“In order to alleviate the serious unemployment problem in our town, we should encourage Autotech to build its automobile manufacturing plant in our area. The Hillview landfill, which has been undeveloped for decades, is a perfect site for this plant. The building and staffing of this plant will put to work thousands of Hillview residents left unemployed after Computech computer software programming company abandoned its national facility last year. I am asking the City Council to authorize a large campaign to attract the company and offer significant tax incentives to make our town attractive to this giant of car manufacturing.” Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the recommendation and the argument on which it is based are reasonable. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.
The excerpt from the memo unequivocally states that establishing an automobile manufacturing plant in the underdeveloped Hillview landfill will ameliorate the prevailing unemployment problem in the city. There are many underlying assumptions, which needs to be analyzed before coming to any sort of conclusion.
Firstly, the memo asserts that there are thousands of Hillview residents left unemployed after Computech computer software company abandoned its national facility last year. The extent of the unemployment rate at present is unknown. The Computech programming company may have hired people from Hillview, who have a very good or at least some kind of programming skill set. So, even though the company has left many people unemployed last year, it is highly unlikely that the people are still unemployed, given the fact the programming skill set is highly sought skill set and companies are on a hunt to recruit people who have some experience in the Information technology industry. It is also unlikely that these residents would have stayed unemployed for a year. They may have got some good offers elsewhere and moved out. So, are all residents still unemployed is the first question that needs to be answered.
Secondly, the memo assumes that people from a programming background would like to work in a manufacturing plant where most of the jobs are manual labour. Sure, there might be some jobs, which require a programming mindset. But, these jobs are not abundant. Most of the jobs include manual work and long excruciating working hours. The residents might not like this and wouldn't want to go work there. So, does a majority of the unemployed population would like to work in an automobile manufacturing plant is the second question. If not the argument does not hold true in the sense that it will not reduce the unemployment rate.
In addition, Autotech may not have enough incentives to build a manufacturing plant in first place. Most of the unemployed residents are skilled in programming. The Company might need people who have a good amount of knowledge in mechanical engineering or similar field. It might not be able to pay the programmers of Hillview very well as the pay scale of the programmers and workers in a plant is very high. So, the company may recruit most of the people from outside the city, which makes the argument fallacious. So, What kind of jobs are being offered? Will Autotech recruit most of the people from Hillview itself? are the questions that need to be answered.
In conclusion, a further investigation is required on the formerly stated questions to come to any sort of final conclusion.
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 24 15
No. of Words: 438 350
No. of Characters: 2164 1500
No. of Different Words: 192 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.575 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.941 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.829 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 140 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 112 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 87 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 59 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 18.25 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.252 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.667 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.293 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.485 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.057 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 371, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: wouldn't
.... The residents might not like this and wouldnt want to go work there. So, does a major...
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Line 5, column 531, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...facturing plant is the second question. If not the argument does not hold true in ...
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Line 7, column 623, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Are
...ost of the people from Hillview itself? are the questions that need to be answered....
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, if, may, second, secondly, so, still, well, at least, in addition, in conclusion, kind of, sort of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 19.6327345309 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 12.9520958084 124% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 11.1786427146 63% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 13.6137724551 110% => OK
Pronoun: 18.0 28.8173652695 62% => OK
Preposition: 55.0 55.5748502994 99% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 16.3942115768 73% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2222.0 2260.96107784 98% => OK
No of words: 437.0 441.139720559 99% => OK
Chars per words: 5.08466819222 5.12650576532 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.57214883401 4.56307096286 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.87655672576 2.78398813304 103% => OK
Unique words: 195.0 204.123752495 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.446224256293 0.468620217663 95% => OK
syllable_count: 684.9 705.55239521 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.76447105788 103% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 19.7664670659 126% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 22.8473053892 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 59.1929184954 57.8364921388 102% => OK
Chars per sentence: 88.88 119.503703932 74% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.48 23.324526521 75% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.0 5.70786347227 88% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.25449101796 57% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.20758483034 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 6.88822355289 102% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.67664670659 214% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.133240909412 0.218282227539 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0404546213491 0.0743258471296 54% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.043776719269 0.0701772020484 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0763982396181 0.128457276422 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0452213545615 0.0628817314937 72% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.2 14.3799401198 78% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 48.3550499002 112% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 12.197005988 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.89 12.5979740519 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.59 8.32208582834 91% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 98.500998004 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 12.3882235529 97% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 11.1389221557 79% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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