As people rely more and more on technology to solve problems, the ability of humans to think for themselves will surely deteriorate.
Discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree, explain your reasoning. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.
The author unequivocally argues that, if we continue to rely on technology to solve problems, one's thinking ability will deteriorate. This argument is true to some extent. Relying on technology to help with very minor or simple problems will hinder one's ability to think. However,on the other hand, if technology is used right, it can help improve our cognitive capabilities.
Let's consider the usage of phones to help people organize their daily tasks, by setting reminders, storing information such as phone numbers. Before the advent of mobile phones, people used to remember phone numbers for a very long period. Now, people barely remember their father or mothers phone number, let alone remembering their friends numbers. Not only phones, people now-a-days use technology to help solve or avoid the social problem of meeting people, talking to them personally, making a great first impression. They do this with social media. Conversation with other people in person is essential for one's development in cognitive capability. Technology, used in this manner will thwart humans thinking capacity.
However, if technology is used in ways to inspire people to think more or develop cognitive capabilities, it will help in ones way of thinking. For,example, recently people have used artificial intelligence called Google Dream to create florid and intricate paintings, drawings, which inspired many artists in the world to think on their own. It inspired them to draw, explore their artistic skills, thus by increasing their capacity to think.
While technology can be used in many ways,if it is used in a manner that challenges people to think more and use their dormant parts of the brain, it surely can help. On the other hand, usage of technology for very simple tasks, which can be done without the help of technology, will surely deteriorate ones thinking capacity.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, however, if, so, thus, while, such as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 19.5258426966 36% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.4196629213 72% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 14.8657303371 40% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 4.0 11.3162921348 35% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 22.0 33.0505617978 67% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 58.6224719101 73% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 12.9106741573 39% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1588.0 2235.4752809 71% => OK
No of words: 300.0 442.535393258 68% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.29333333333 5.05705443957 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.16179145029 4.55969084622 91% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73173937263 2.79657885939 98% => OK
Unique words: 163.0 215.323595506 76% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.543333333333 0.4932671777 110% => OK
syllable_count: 504.0 704.065955056 72% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 6.24550561798 96% => OK
Article: 1.0 4.99550561798 20% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.10617977528 193% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.2370786517 79% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 18.0 23.0359550562 78% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 45.2879674969 60.3974514979 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.25 118.986275619 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.75 23.4991977007 80% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.9375 5.21951772744 75% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 7.80617977528 102% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 10.2758426966 107% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 5.13820224719 19% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.83258426966 83% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.213477709319 0.243740707755 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0777929757397 0.0831039109588 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0588516245016 0.0758088955206 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.144107436232 0.150359130593 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0346186151623 0.0667264976115 52% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.9 14.1392134831 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 44.75 48.8420337079 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.1743820225 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.4 12.1639044944 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.74 8.38706741573 104% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 100.480337079 80% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 11.8971910112 76% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.2143820225 82% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.