Over the past two years,the number of shoppers in central plaza has been steadily decreasing while the popularity of skateboarding has increased dramatically.Many Central Plaza store owners believe that the decrease in their business is due to the number of skateboard users in the plaza.Thus , we recommend that the city prohibit skateboarding in Central Plaza.If the skateboarding is prohibited here,we predict that business in central plaza will return to its previously high levels.
The recommendation states that the prohibition should be kept for skateboarding in the central plaza to increase their profit margin. From the past two years, the number of shoppers in central plaza is decreased and it may be due to a number of increase of skateboarders. However, before this recommendation can be properly evaluated the following questions must be answered.
Firstly, in the span of two years are there any new malls that came into the market? In other words, if the new malls arrived into the market that consists of maybe same shops that are in the central plaza,then people may prefer to go to different places rather than shopping in the routine malls. For example, if the recently opened mall contains various shops with different styles and may if the prices are decreased with minimum profit to attract the customers, the shoppers may prefer to choose a place with better quality for a low price. if the above scenario is true, then the conclusion in the argument gets weakened.
Secondly, even though popularity of skateboarding is increased ,is it comparable to the decrease of shoppers in the central plaza? there may be many other customers other than skateboarders who use various styles. people need not necessarily like skateboarding as it is trending in the city. The quality may also be decreased in central plaza which leads customers not to visit it. if this is true, the argument may not hold water.
Thirdly, if the skate boarding is prohibited , is there any evidence that the shoppers may get increased ?
The shoppers may not be willing to attend plaza due to its quality less products or various styles that can't be offered. And also as the popularity is increased, the people who are already attending plaza even though they have liking on skateboarding may stop coming due to prohibition which results in the loss of customers.
After applying prohibition, if there is no increase in amount of customers, the profit rate will not grow, if the above scenario is true, the conclusion doesn't hold good.
In conclusion, the argument, as it stands now, is considerably flawed, due to it's reliance on unwarranted assumptions. if author is able to provide evidence and answer the above questions, then it will be possible to fully evaluate the viability of the proposed recommendation to prohibit skate boarders in central plaza.
Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 4 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 4 2
No. of Sentences: 13 15
No. of Words: 398 350
No. of Characters: 1925 1500
No. of Different Words: 176 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.467 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.837 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.745 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 137 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 101 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 76 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 42 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 30.615 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 13.171 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.923 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.381 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.641 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.097 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 206, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , then
...same shops that are in the central plaza,then people may prefer to go to different pl...
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Line 3, column 546, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: If
...ce with better quality for a low price. if the above scenario is true, then the co...
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Line 5, column 63, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...popularity of skateboarding is increased ,is it comparable to the decrease of shop...
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Line 5, column 132, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: There
...rease of shoppers in the central plaza? there may be many other customers other than ...
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Line 5, column 215, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: People
...n skateboarders who use various styles. people need not necessarily like skateboarding...
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Line 7, column 45, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...dly, if the skate boarding is prohibited , is there any evidence that the shoppers...
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Line 8, column 68, Rule ID: FEWER_LESS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'fewer'? The noun products is countable.
Suggestion: fewer
...ling to attend plaza due to its quality less products or various styles that cant be...
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Line 8, column 105, Rule ID: CANT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
...ty less products or various styles that cant be offered. And also as the popularity ...
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Line 9, column 154, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
... above scenario is true, the conclusion doesnt hold good. In conclusion, the argume...
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Line 11, column 120, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: If
...ts reliance on unwarranted assumptions. if author is able to provide evidence and ...
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Line 11, column 304, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ecommendation to prohibit skate boarders in central plaza.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, then, third, thirdly, for example, in conclusion, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 26.0 19.6327345309 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 12.9520958084 124% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 11.1786427146 45% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 13.6137724551 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 18.0 28.8173652695 62% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 55.5748502994 97% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 16.3942115768 73% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1983.0 2260.96107784 88% => OK
No of words: 396.0 441.139720559 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.00757575758 5.12650576532 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.46091344257 4.56307096286 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.83692820892 2.78398813304 102% => OK
Unique words: 189.0 204.123752495 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.477272727273 0.468620217663 102% => OK
syllable_count: 616.5 705.55239521 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 4.96107784431 0% => OK
Article: 10.0 8.76447105788 114% => OK
Subordination: 12.0 2.70958083832 443% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.22255489022 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 19.7664670659 91% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 22.8473053892 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.7809916395 57.8364921388 93% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.166666667 119.503703932 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.0 23.324526521 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.0 5.70786347227 123% => OK
Paragraphs: 7.0 5.15768463074 136% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 11.0 5.25449101796 209% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.20758483034 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 6.88822355289 44% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.67664670659 150% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.281112208707 0.218282227539 129% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0990669906186 0.0743258471296 133% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.11890896824 0.0701772020484 169% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.131750399524 0.128457276422 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0986890909441 0.0628817314937 157% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.2 14.3799401198 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 48.3550499002 102% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.197005988 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.78 12.5979740519 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.92 8.32208582834 95% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 98.500998004 81% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.1389221557 97% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum six paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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