over the past two years, the number of shoppers in central plaza has been steadily decreasing while the popularity of skateboarding has increased dramatically. Many central plaza owners believe that the decrease in their business is due to the number of skateboard users in the plaza. There has also been a dramatic increase in the amount of litter and vandalism in the plaza. Thus, we recommend that the city prohibit skateboarding in central plaza. If skateboarding is prohibited here, we predict that the business in Central Plaza will return to its previously high levels.
In the above letter a shop owner of Central Plaza complaints about decrease in business at the plaza and proposes a possible solution. He based this decrease in business on the increasing popularity of skateboarding. He further relates this increase in skateboarding with the increase in nuisance in the Plaza. He concludes his letter by requesting the city to prohibit skateboarding in the plaza as an attempt to increase business for shop owners. Though this might seem a legitimate solution, the author has based many of his arguments on mere predictions and possible prejudice against skateboarding.
Firstly, the author has predicted the decrease in sales in plaza as a result of increasing popularity of skateboarding. Whereas, there could be multiple reasons behind the decrease. It is possible that due to construction of many other mega malls and shopping hubs in the city the old Central Plaza might have lost its earlier charm and importance. The people of the city would now prefer to shop from newer stores which might have better collection as well as services. Also it is not asserted that the people have avoided coming to the Plaza because of skateboarders. It is possible that some find it interesting and entertaining and not a nuisance.
Secondly, the author directly related the increase in litter and vandalism in the Plaza with the increase in skateboarding. There could be tons of other factors affecting the environment of the Plaza. Major factors affecting could be low maintenance due to decline in sales or addition of other undesired entities. Deteriorating reputation of the Plaza could be one of the reasons. Vandalism in Plaza due to skateboarding is mere prejudice against the phenomenon.
Moreover, as a solution to the problem of decreases in sales the author has proposed that skateboarding be prohibited in the Plaza. Though the author contains no such assurance or proof that business will gain momentum as soon as skateboarding deceases. It can be the case that the decline in sales is not at all related to increase in skateboarding. Neither the author has instances of other places where sales would have increased by stopping skateboarding or other such activities. Hence, this request of the author is based solely on predictions and baseless assumptions.
In conclusion, the author should collect thorough statistics and proofs to support his argument. He should prepare a concrete case against skateboarding in Plaza and also reviews of customers visiting the plaza regarding that. Only through detailed study of the prevailing problem and an indifferent evaluation of all the factors can the author be able to reach a definite solution.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
argument 1 -- OK
argument 2 -- OK
argument 3 -- OK
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 5.0 out of 6
Category: Very Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 24 15
No. of Words: 434 350
No. of Characters: 2214 1500
No. of Different Words: 188 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.564 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.101 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.96 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 162 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 134 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 103 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 56 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 18.083 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 5.049 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.375 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.329 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.524 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.135 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 312, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
... the increase in nuisance in the Plaza. He concludes his letter by requesting the ...
^^
Line 3, column 121, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Whereas” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...increasing popularity of skateboarding. Whereas, there could be multiple reasons behind...
^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 472, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
... better collection as well as services. Also it is not asserted that the people have...
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, hence, if, moreover, regarding, second, secondly, so, well, whereas, in conclusion, such as, as a result, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 19.6327345309 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 12.9520958084 108% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 11.1786427146 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 13.6137724551 66% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 24.0 28.8173652695 83% => OK
Preposition: 69.0 55.5748502994 124% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 16.3942115768 98% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2263.0 2260.96107784 100% => OK
No of words: 434.0 441.139720559 98% => OK
Chars per words: 5.21428571429 5.12650576532 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.56428161445 4.56307096286 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.05481382242 2.78398813304 110% => OK
Unique words: 189.0 204.123752495 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.435483870968 0.468620217663 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 712.8 705.55239521 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 4.96107784431 161% => OK
Article: 5.0 8.76447105788 57% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 19.7664670659 121% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 22.8473053892 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 28.4792504876 57.8364921388 49% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 94.2916666667 119.503703932 79% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.0833333333 23.324526521 78% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.75 5.70786347227 101% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.25449101796 57% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.20758483034 146% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 6.88822355289 87% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.67664670659 128% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.248681218895 0.218282227539 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0811210440354 0.0743258471296 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0743954478481 0.0701772020484 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.145237164727 0.128457276422 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0661659822388 0.0628817314937 105% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.1 14.3799401198 84% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 48.3550499002 110% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.197005988 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.64 12.5979740519 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.31 8.32208582834 100% => OK
difficult_words: 104.0 98.500998004 106% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 12.3882235529 69% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.1389221557 83% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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