"Over the past two years, the number of shoppers in Central Plaza has been steadily decreasing while the popularity of skateboarding has increased dramatically. Many Central Plaza store owners believe that the decrease in their business is due to the number of skateboard users in the plaza. There has also been a dramatic increase in the amount of litter and vandalism throughout the plaza. Thus, we recommend that the city prohibit skateboarding in Central Plaza. If skateboarding is prohibited here, we predict that business in Central Plaza will return to its previously high levels."
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the recommendation is likely to have the predicted result. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.
The argument at hand indicates that an increase in skateboarding activities has lead to decreasing number of shoppers at Central Plaza. However, this letter is rife with holes that needs to be answered before coming to a conclusion.
Firstly, the letter mentioning the decrease in number of shoppers don't specify the business earnings of the Plaza stores to get an idea of whether the stores were making profits before two years. It might be possible that the stores had started to loose customers because of poor service and the Plaza was getting deserted gradually. Finding a relatively open place to practice, skateboard users started flocking near the Plaza to enjoy. Hence, we can't be sure that prohibiting skateboard activities would bring back the high business levels in the Plaza if the customers are unhappy with the stores themselves.
Moreover, it's an assumption by the Central Plaza owner that the amount of litter throughout the plaza had increased. Although it is possible that vandalism might had increased, yet blaming the skateboard users for littering without sufficient proof is unjustifiable. For instance, one of the reasons that customers stopped visiting the Plaza might be because the store owners stopped disposing their waste at proper locations in the Plaza which resulted in easy littering. Another way of creating such a unpleasant view might be because of the negligence of the workers at the Plaza who didn't clean the place after customers had thrown litters around accidentally. Therefore, pointing at the skateboard users to the only culprit for littering near the Plaza is not a valid argument.
In conclusion, the letter expressing the reason for a decrease in shoppers is because of some people enjoying skateboard in the Plaza lacks sound arguments to back it up. In my opinion, the editor should ask the above mentioned questions to get a better picture of the problem and find solution accordingly.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 13 15
No. of Words: 317 350
No. of Characters: 1601 1500
No. of Different Words: 174 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.22 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.05 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.686 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 123 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 97 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 68 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 42 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 24.385 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 6.045 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.615 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.389 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.605 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.109 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 157, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...s at Central Plaza. However, this letter is rife with holes that needs to be answ...
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Line 4, column 67, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...ning the decrease in number of shoppers dont specify the business earnings of the Pl...
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Line 4, column 158, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...res to get an idea of whether the stores were making profits before two years. It...
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Line 5, column 91, Rule ID: LOOSE_LOSE[3]
Message: Did you mean 'lose' (= miss, waste, suffer the loss etc.)?
Suggestion: lose
...possible that the stores had started to loose customers because of poor service and t...
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Line 5, column 165, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...rvice and the Plaza was getting deserted gradually. Finding a relatively open pla...
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Line 6, column 126, Rule ID: CANT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
...king near the Plaza to enjoy. Hence, we cant be sure that prohibiting skateboard a...
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Line 6, column 166, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...cant be sure that prohibiting skateboard activities would bring back the high bus...
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Line 9, column 11, Rule ID: IT_IS[6]
Message: Did you mean 'it's' (='it is') instead of 'its' (possessive pronoun)?
Suggestion: it's; it is
...ith the stores themselves. Moreover, its an assumption by the Central Plaza owne...
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Line 9, column 177, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ible that vandalism might had increased, yet blaming the skateboard users for lit...
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Line 10, column 182, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...pped visiting the Plaza might be because the store owners stopped disposing their...
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Line 11, column 144, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...littering. Another way of creating such a unpleasant view might be because of the...
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Line 11, column 185, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... unpleasant view might be because of the negligence of the workers at the Plaza w...
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Line 12, column 44, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: didn't
...ligence of the workers at the Plaza who didnt clean the place after customers had thr...
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Line 12, column 185, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...the skateboard users to the only culprit for littering near the Plaza is not a va...
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Line 15, column 76, Rule ID: REASON_IS_BECAUSE[1]
Message: Probably an incorrect phrase. Use 'the reason 'is that''.
Suggestion: is that
...g the reason for a decrease in shoppers is because of some people enjoying skateboard in t...
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Line 15, column 186, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... arguments to back it up. In my opinion, the editor should ask the above mentione...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, first, firstly, hence, however, if, moreover, so, therefore, for instance, in conclusion, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 19.6327345309 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 12.9520958084 46% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 11.1786427146 27% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 13.6137724551 66% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 16.0 28.8173652695 56% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 55.5748502994 88% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 16.3942115768 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1651.0 2260.96107784 73% => OK
No of words: 315.0 441.139720559 71% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.24126984127 5.12650576532 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.21286593061 4.56307096286 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76788988431 2.78398813304 99% => OK
Unique words: 173.0 204.123752495 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.549206349206 0.468620217663 117% => OK
syllable_count: 502.2 705.55239521 71% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 5.0 8.76447105788 57% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 19.7664670659 66% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 22.8473053892 105% => OK
Sentence length SD: 34.9139262834 57.8364921388 60% => OK
Chars per sentence: 127.0 119.503703932 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.2307692308 23.324526521 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.92307692308 5.70786347227 156% => OK
Paragraphs: 13.0 5.15768463074 252% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 16.0 5.25449101796 305% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.20758483034 85% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.88822355289 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.67664670659 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.286031266881 0.218282227539 131% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.106707887954 0.0743258471296 144% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0850003204934 0.0701772020484 121% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.103670616986 0.128457276422 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0712662241298 0.0628817314937 113% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.4 14.3799401198 107% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 48.3550499002 97% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 12.197005988 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.41 12.5979740519 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.79 8.32208582834 106% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 98.500998004 80% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 11.1389221557 104% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum six paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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