"Over the past two years, the number of shoppers in Central Plaza has been steadily decreasing while the popularity of skateboarding has increased dramatically. Many Central Plaza store owners believe that the decrease in their business is due to the

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"Over the past two years, the number of shoppers in Central Plaza has been steadily decreasing while the popularity of skateboarding has increased dramatically. Many Central Plaza store owners believe that the decrease in their business is due to the number of skateboard users in the plaza. There has also been a dramatic increase in the amount of litter and vandalism throughout the plaza. Thus, we recommend that the city prohibit skateboarding in Central Plaza. If skateboarding is prohibited here, we predict that business in Central Plaza will return to its previously high levels."
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the recommendation is likely to have the predicted result. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.

The owner of Central Plaza argues in this letter, to prohibit skateboarding in Central Plaza to return business to its previously high levels. The reasons which he provide fails to mention some key factors on the basis of which argument can evaluated. In support for his argument, he suggests that there has been increased amount of litter and vandalism; he states that there is decrease in number of shoppers as skateboarding has increased. Considering these points, provides no strong base to owner's argument. Hence the argument can be considered incomplete.

First of all, the owner assumes that due to increased popularity of skateboarding, the number of shoppers have been decreased over last two year. Here he fails show the relation between this two. How can increase in skateboarding directly affect the shoppers in Central Plaza? As both have motives for visiting Central Plaza. Also it is seen that, generally malls are very large in area and one can get tired of walking too much for shopping in this condition skateboard helps shoppers and due to which he/she can shop more and for more time.

Secondly the owner states that the amount of litter and vandalism also has increased in Central Plaza. But there is not stated who are the practicing these types of activity in Plaza. As it may be possible that shoppers are only practicing such type of activities or some other third party. If we talk about damaging properties of Plaza or other’s through skateboarders, then it is obvious that if one is not good at riding a skateboard he himself will not prefer it. So the owner should more information about who are performing this practice to convince the reader.

Lastly, the owner argues that skateboarding should be prohibited in whole city, which is not at all convincing. As due the decrease in number of shoppers in Central Plaza, whose reason is not evaluated completely. How can the skateboarding be prohibited in whole city.

The owner argument is unpersuasive as it stands. To bolster his argument, he must provide more information. Like what is the relationship with shoppers and Skateboarder? Who the culprits for litter and vandalism in Central Plaza? And how prohibiting skateboarding in city will directly help the Plaza to regain his business.

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Average: 7.7 (3 votes)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 165, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'provides'.
Suggestion: provides
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Line 1, column 513, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Hence,
...ides no strong base to owners argument. Hence the argument can be considered incomple...
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
...ave motives for visiting Central Plaza. Also it is seen that, generally malls are ve...
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Line 7, column 44, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...tly, the owner argues that skateboarding should be prohibited in whole city, whic...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, hence, if, lastly, may, second, secondly, so, then, third, first of all

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 19.6327345309 97% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.9520958084 93% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 11.1786427146 98% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 13.6137724551 118% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 28.8173652695 115% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 55.5748502994 90% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 16.3942115768 67% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1911.0 2260.96107784 85% => OK
No of words: 378.0 441.139720559 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.05555555556 5.12650576532 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.40933352052 4.56307096286 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.84566698855 2.78398813304 102% => OK
Unique words: 189.0 204.123752495 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.5 0.468620217663 107% => OK
syllable_count: 593.1 705.55239521 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.76447105788 68% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.70958083832 148% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.22255489022 118% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 19.7664670659 116% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 22.8473053892 70% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 47.299192494 57.8364921388 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 83.0869565217 119.503703932 70% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.4347826087 23.324526521 70% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.86956521739 5.70786347227 68% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.25449101796 76% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.20758483034 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 6.88822355289 145% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.67664670659 86% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.327440973394 0.218282227539 150% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.105005506778 0.0743258471296 141% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.100358593321 0.0701772020484 143% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.198171884175 0.128457276422 154% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0475665999506 0.0628817314937 76% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.6 14.3799401198 74% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 48.3550499002 114% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 12.197005988 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.77 12.5979740519 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.98 8.32208582834 96% => OK
difficult_words: 85.0 98.500998004 86% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 12.3882235529 69% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 11.1389221557 75% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.

Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 23 15
No. of Words: 379 350
No. of Characters: 1853 1500
No. of Different Words: 181 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.412 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.889 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.751 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 126 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 98 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 75 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 42 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 16.478 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.806 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.391 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.305 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.494 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.099 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5