Over the past two years, the number of shoppers in Central Plaza has been steadily decreasing while the popularity of skateboarding has increased dramatically. Many Central Plaza store owners believe that the decrease in their business is due to the number of skateboard users in the plaza. There has also been a dramatic increase in the amount of litter and vandalism throughout the plaza. Thus, we recommend that the city prohibit skateboarding in Central Plaza. If skateboarding is prohibited here, we predict that business in Central Plaza will return to its previously high levels."
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the recommendation is likely to have the predicted result. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.
The given argument arrives at the general conclusion that the central plaza business is decreased due to the increased number of skateboard users in the plaza and the increased amount of litter and vandalism. though the author claims cogent at first, this argument flawed with numerous loopholes and unwarranted assumptions. therefore, to strengthen the argument three questions need to be answered.
First, the author states that in the past two years the number of shoppers in central plaza decreased. However, is this decrease business in central plaza is because of the dramatic increase in skateboards? It is possible that there are many other reasons to decreased business in the central plaza. It can be caused by introducing new plaza in that area or products provided by the stores in the central plaza was not in good condition or central plaza stores increased the price of products in the last two years. The argument does not give any evidence to prove that the lack of shoppers in the plaza is because of skateboarding and therefore before concluding the fact owners of central plaza should analyze the fact through the survey or a poll.
Secondly, the argument state that there was a dramatic increase in litter and vandalism. But, any ware in the argument does not mention that this is because of the skateboarding population. Is there any evidence to prove that theses litter and vandalism acts caused by skateboarders? Without providing witnesses argument cannot come up with the conclusion that the banned of skateboarding will decrease litter and vandalism from the plaza. Furthermore, there is a possibility that increased in litter and vandalism is because of some third party and because of that customer in central plaza does not willing to come to this place. Therefore, before suggesting the recommendation central plaza owners can check CCTV cameras or find any other evidenced to confirm the wrongdoing.
Thirdly, the author links increase in skateboarding population with the decrease in business in the plaza. If skateboarding is prohibited in the plaza what are the possible effects that would happen? It is not clear that the reason for the decrease in sales in the plaza. It is possible that skateboarders choose this place because of the lack of customers inside the central plaza. And also, since there is a huge number of skateboarders coming to this place central plaza stores have some business because of these skateboarders buy products from stores. If the company recommended banning these customers as well, they may face more reduction in customers.
In conclusion, the logical flow of the argument suffers from several weak points including a lack of evidence and unwarranted assumptions. therefore, the author needs to answer the above questions before deciding to prohibit skateboarding in the central plaza. though it is unclear whether the answers for these questions would support or weaken the claim it will improve the rigour of the conclusion.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 19 15
No. of Words: 486 350
No. of Characters: 2470 1500
No. of Different Words: 189 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.695 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.082 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.753 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 187 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 143 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 101 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 61 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 25.579 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 14.894 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.684 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.384 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.569 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.129 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 210, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Though
...creased amount of litter and vandalism. though the author claims cogent at first, this...
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Line 1, column 326, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Therefore
... loopholes and unwarranted assumptions. therefore, to strengthen the argument three quest...
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Line 1, column 401, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...nt three questions need to be answered. first, the author states that in the pas...
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: First
...hree questions need to be answered. first, the author states that in the past two...
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Line 3, column 208, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
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Suggestion: It
...f the dramatic increase in skateboards? it is possible that there are many other r...
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Suggestion: It
...ecreased business in the central plaza. it can be caused by introducing new plaza ...
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Line 3, column 748, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... the fact through the survey or a poll. Secondly, the argument state that there ...
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Line 5, column 191, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Is
...ecause of the skateboarding population. is there any evidence to prove that theses...
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Line 5, column 227, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'theses'' or 'thesis's'?
Suggestion: theses'; thesis's
...on. is there any evidence to prove that theses litter and vandalism acts caused by ska...
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Line 5, column 633, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Therefore
...does not willing to come to this place. therefore, before suggesting the recommendation c...
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Line 7, column 108, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: If
... the decrease in business in the plaza. if skateboarding is prohibited in the plaz...
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Suggestion: It
...the possible effects that would happen? it is not clear that the reason for the de...
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Suggestion: It
...for the decrease in sales in the plaza. it is possible that skateboarders choose t...
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Line 7, column 558, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: If
...skateboarders buy products from stores. if the company recommended banning these c...
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Line 7, column 661, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...y may face more reduction in customers. In conclusion, the logical flow of the a...
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Line 9, column 140, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Therefore
...f evidence and unwarranted assumptions. therefore, the author needs to answer the above q...
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Line 9, column 262, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Though
...bit skateboarding in the central plaza. though it is unclear whether the answers for t...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, third, thirdly, well, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 19.6327345309 102% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.9520958084 77% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 11.1786427146 143% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 13.6137724551 103% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 28.8173652695 104% => OK
Preposition: 76.0 55.5748502994 137% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 16.3942115768 104% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2515.0 2260.96107784 111% => OK
No of words: 485.0 441.139720559 110% => OK
Chars per words: 5.18556701031 5.12650576532 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.69283662038 4.56307096286 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.82822871605 2.78398813304 102% => OK
Unique words: 194.0 204.123752495 95% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.4 0.468620217663 85% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 782.1 705.55239521 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 4.96107784431 121% => OK
Article: 7.0 8.76447105788 80% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 2.70958083832 221% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.22255489022 118% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 19.7664670659 116% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 22.8473053892 92% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.2845237442 57.8364921388 78% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.347826087 119.503703932 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.0869565217 23.324526521 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.34782608696 5.70786347227 94% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 17.0 5.25449101796 324% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.20758483034 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 6.88822355289 145% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.67664670659 107% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.40345622494 0.218282227539 185% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.14008189461 0.0743258471296 188% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.116981284484 0.0701772020484 167% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.245309942209 0.128457276422 191% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.143236139903 0.0628817314937 228% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.6 14.3799401198 95% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 48.3550499002 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.197005988 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.82 12.5979740519 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.58 8.32208582834 91% => OK
difficult_words: 89.0 98.500998004 90% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 12.3882235529 61% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.1389221557 93% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.9071856287 67% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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