Over the past two years, the number of shoppers in Central Plaza has been steadily decreasing while the popularity of skateboarding has increased dramatically. Many Central Plaza store owners believe that the decrease in their business is due to the number of skateboard users in the plaza. There has also been a dramatic increase in the amount of litter and vandalism throughout the plaza. Thus, we recommend that the city prohibit skateboarding in Central Plaza. If skateboarding is prohibited here, we predict that business in Central Plaza will return to its previously high levels."
The author makes several unwanted assumptions and hence, is not well reasoned. While it may be true that the decline in central plaza sales is due to increasing skateboarders, this author's unsubstantiated argument utterly fails to weave a cogent case to prove it.
Firstly,The author makes a crucial logical error by stating, prohibiting skateboarding can increase the sales of Central Plaza.One if the reasons for the lower steep in business might be because of the price associated with products.The cost of the items in the plaza may be increased in the consecutive years.People always try to husband their money.So the customers might have thought that the rates are too expensive.Eventually they might have chosen alternative place.
Secondly,it has been erroneously stated that there is dramatic increase in vandalism and litter in the Plaza.The debris might be generated because of the food courts,bars,restaurants.The squander might not be cleaned properly by the cleaners. Ambiance and amenities are the first thing that pulls the customers into a place.The Plaza maintenance department need to be blamed for tidiness but not the skateboarders.
Thirdly,there might be new shopping complex that have been started within the proximity of the Central Plaza.The novel one might have all sorts of shopping malls and also entertainment zone that Central Plaza lacks.Everyone like to visit a place that is an agglomeration of all kinds.That novel shopping complex might be providing discounts or offers thats attracting people ,which automatically can pull people to it.
In recapitulation, the author made several unaddressed assumptions that gravely undermine its tenability.Unless these underlying assumptions are addressed ,the argument falls apart,the conclusion that skateboarding is perturbing business at Central Plaza could be flawed.
Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 7 15
No. of Words: 295 350
No. of Characters: 1536 1500
No. of Different Words: 172 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.144 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.207 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.868 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 103 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 85 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 61 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 40 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 42.143 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 21.892 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.857 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.432 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.83 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.067 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, hence, if, may, second, secondly, so, third, thirdly, well, while
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 19.6327345309 97% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 12.9520958084 108% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 11.1786427146 54% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 13.6137724551 81% => OK
Pronoun: 19.0 28.8173652695 66% => OK
Preposition: 28.0 55.5748502994 50% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 8.0 16.3942115768 49% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1582.0 2260.96107784 70% => OK
No of words: 277.0 441.139720559 63% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.71119133574 5.12650576532 111% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.07962216107 4.56307096286 89% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.53973282246 2.78398813304 127% => OK
Unique words: 166.0 204.123752495 81% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.599277978339 0.468620217663 128% => OK
syllable_count: 479.7 705.55239521 68% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Article: 10.0 8.76447105788 114% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 7.0 19.7664670659 35% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 39.0 22.8473053892 171% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 129.359647369 57.8364921388 224% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 226.0 119.503703932 189% => OK
Words per sentence: 39.5714285714 23.324526521 170% => OK
Discourse Markers: 13.1428571429 5.70786347227 230% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 21.0 5.25449101796 400% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 8.20758483034 24% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.88822355289 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.67664670659 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.171867064248 0.218282227539 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0840839901045 0.0743258471296 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0461309424406 0.0701772020484 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.104240962552 0.128457276422 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0160712056094 0.0628817314937 26% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 25.2 14.3799401198 175% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 23.43 48.3550499002 48% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 13.0 7.1628742515 181% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 19.7 12.197005988 162% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 16.43 12.5979740519 130% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.59 8.32208582834 127% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 98.500998004 89% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 19.0 12.3882235529 153% => OK
gunning_fog: 17.6 11.1389221557 158% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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