Over the past two years, the number of shoppers in Central Plaza has been steadily decreasing while the popularity of skateboarding has increased dramatically. Many Central Plaza store owners believe that the decrease in their business is due to the number of skateboard users in the plaza. There has also been a dramatic increase in the amount of litter and vandalism throughout the plaza. Thus, we recommend that the city prohibit skateboarding in Central Plaza. If skateboarding is prohibited here, we predict that business in Central Plaza will return to its previously high levels.
The argument above claims that the in the past two years there have been a steady decline in the number of shoopers in Central Plaza and the reason of this decline is the popularity of skateboarding which has increasing dramatically. Although the above points and facts taken together appear to be true but connection between these pieces is shaky.
Much of the reasoning that author uses is filmsy and illogically reasoned. The argument above states that "Number of shoppers have been decreasing as the popularity of skateboarding is increasing". First of all we have no clue for the source of this statistic hence it can't be trusted to be a true source of information. Moreover, it cannot be included from this argument as how is the popularity of skateboarding responsible for the decline of shopper as there can be many other strong reasons completely contradicting this fact like it might be due to deteriotion of quality of products that had led to this decline. Also it has't been cited anywhere that who are the people who used to do shopping earlier and now to skateboarding left it. A case can be thought of where in the people who are engaged in these two activities are of different age groups as well as different gender.
In the next argument where author mentions that owners belive it is the number of skateboarders who have led to decline in their business there is no piece of information given that can verify this piece of information, it can be completely concluded on the basis of there assumption instead of any survey. One scenario for this decline can be that the shoppers might have find out much reliable source of shopping than central plaza where they can get good quality products at cheap price. There is no proof that the people who have been shopping earlier have engaged into skateboarding. What if only 10% of shoppers have engaged into shopping? What if the people doing shopping earlier from plaza now shifted to online ordering? What if the popularity of skateboarding has only gained hype in the age group of young children and teenagers who are not into shopping from the past time? Because the author doesn't account for these discrepancies, he reader cannot assume that the reason stated is completey true and trustworthy.
Another fact which weakens the above mentioned argument is that skateboarding has led to increase in the amount of litter and vandalism in plaza but it is quite possible that skateboarding isn't the only reason behind this there can be many other viable reasons for the same like it might be the shoppers or the people working at plaza who litter the premises of the plaza. Besides this damage of property can't be directly linked to skateboarding as in most of the area skateboarding is prohibited inside the property accessible to public due to fact somebody might get hurt. There are seperate parks and place for such recreational activities. Damage of property can also be due to the degrading quality of it in propotion to time. Therefore it can't be completely blamed upon the fact that skateboarding is resposible for this.
Overall this argument is not completely reasoned. The argument seems biased towards the shopowners of plaza and the word choice is more applealing to emotion instead of logic. Additionally, the argument does not consider alternative viewpoints, further weakening its position. Finally the evidence presented in the argument weakens its credibility as author does't cite a source to verify its validity. The logical conclusion could be to come up with ways where in the sale of central plaza can be boosted in order to prevent the losses they are currently facing and to find out the actual root cause which has led to such an outcome by performing survey and gathering data from the skateboarder and shoppers to compare them and conclude the right fact. If an argument addresses all the above mentioned issues it would more stronger than the one given.
Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 26 15
No. of Words: 674 350
No. of Characters: 3243 1500
No. of Different Words: 281 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 5.095 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.812 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.714 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 226 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 164 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 120 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 68 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 25.923 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 16.043 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.538 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.282 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.471 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.104 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 280, Rule ID: CANT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
...r the source of this statistic hence it cant be trusted to be a true source of infor...
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Line 3, column 280, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'cants'?
Suggestion: cants
...r the source of this statistic hence it cant be trusted to be a true source of infor...
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Line 3, column 630, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
... products that had led to this decline. Also it hast been cited anywhere that who ar...
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Line 5, column 732, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...m plaza now shifted to online ordering? What if the popularity of skateboarding has ...
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Line 5, column 877, Rule ID: PAST_TIME[1]
Message: Did you mean 'pastime'?
Suggestion: pastime
...gers who are not into shopping from the past time? Because the author doesnt account for ...
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Line 5, column 907, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
... from the past time? Because the author doesnt account for these discrepancies, he rea...
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Line 7, column 190, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: isn't
...it is quite possible that skateboarding isnt the only reason behind this there can b...
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Line 7, column 406, Rule ID: CANT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
... plaza. Besides this damage of property cant be directly linked to skateboarding as ...
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Line 7, column 733, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Therefore,
...ing quality of it in propotion to time. Therefore it cant be completely blamed upon the f...
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Line 7, column 746, Rule ID: CANT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
...f it in propotion to time. Therefore it cant be completely blamed upon the fact that...
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Line 7, column 746, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'cants'?
Suggestion: cants
...f it in propotion to time. Therefore it cant be completely blamed upon the fact that...
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Line 9, column 278, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Finally,
...points, further weakening its position. Finally the evidence presented in the argument ...
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Line 9, column 352, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[2]
Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'author the doest'.
Suggestion: author the doest
...the argument weakens its credibility as author doest cite a source to verify its validity. T...
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Line 9, column 754, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...mpare them and conclude the right fact. If an argument addresses all the above men...
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Line 9, column 819, Rule ID: MOST_COMPARATIVE[2]
Message: Use only 'stronger' (without 'more') when you use the comparative.
Suggestion: stronger
...all the above mentioned issues it would more stronger than the one given.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, finally, first, hence, if, moreover, so, therefore, well, as well as, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 41.0 19.6327345309 209% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 12.9520958084 131% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 11.1786427146 143% => OK
Relative clauses : 27.0 13.6137724551 198% => OK
Pronoun: 48.0 28.8173652695 167% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 99.0 55.5748502994 178% => OK
Nominalization: 20.0 16.3942115768 122% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3297.0 2260.96107784 146% => OK
No of words: 670.0 441.139720559 152% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.92089552239 5.12650576532 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 5.08766726615 4.56307096286 111% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79975852633 2.78398813304 101% => OK
Unique words: 286.0 204.123752495 140% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.426865671642 0.468620217663 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 1053.0 705.55239521 149% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.76447105788 68% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 19.7664670659 132% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 22.8473053892 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 88.0076398647 57.8364921388 152% => OK
Chars per sentence: 126.807692308 119.503703932 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.7692307692 23.324526521 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.92307692308 5.70786347227 69% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 15.0 5.25449101796 285% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.20758483034 146% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 6.88822355289 145% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.67664670659 86% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.192948451865 0.218282227539 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0519075400781 0.0743258471296 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0675505767046 0.0701772020484 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.126178384275 0.128457276422 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0510519163233 0.0628817314937 81% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.6 14.3799401198 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 48.3550499002 95% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 12.197005988 107% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.55 12.5979740519 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.01 8.32208582834 96% => OK
difficult_words: 133.0 98.500998004 135% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 12.3882235529 93% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 11.1389221557 108% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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