"For the past year, as part of an effort to broaden our supporter base, our Folk on the Air program has allocated less time to traditional American folk music and more time to Latino music and world music. In recent months, many long-term supporters of our station have written to complain about what they describe as the un-American bias of the program. In addition, the local newspaper has published a recent editorial critical of our shift in programming. Therefore, in order to forestall any further adverse publicity for the station and to avoid the loss of additional listener-supporters, we should discontinue our current emphasis on Latino and world music and restore the time devoted to traditional American folk music to its former level."
The topic was about the radio station, decided to decrease Latino and world music playtime and increase play time of American folk music in order to increase their subscribers. The argument is flawed because of the following unwarranted assumptions made by the author.
Primarily, the author told that in order to increase their supporter base they had decided to play more Latino and world music and now they decided to return to their previous schedule after getting written complaints from supporters. The author does not provide any specific number of people who launched complaints. It is possible that number is a trifle and because of their songs diversity they have huge listener base and if they curtail wold and Latino music, might lose subscribers.
Besides the author does not provide any competitors who played the same types of music to attract listeners. what if the complaints actually a request from listeners to different from other stations. The author does not provide any reference about what kind of station is that, for example, there are different categories for stations some of them are a news channel and some are folk and jazz music channel. If it is not a folk music station then there is no need to shift their schedule. People always tune other stations to listen to folk songs.
The author claims that a local newspaper criticizes their shift, but was placid what the newspaper actually write about the station. It may be possible that the station already playing enough of American folk music and local newspaper criticize their shifts about they should play more world music for more diverse experience for the listeners.
The argument does not provide any unfeasible logic because the author makes several unwarranted assumptions, it fails to make a convincing case that the station changes its current shift or programme to increase their subscribers.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 12 15
No. of Words: 310 350
No. of Characters: 1554 1500
No. of Different Words: 141 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.196 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.013 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.432 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 111 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 86 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 55 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 32 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 25.833 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.771 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.5 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.406 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.406 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.097 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 1 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 110, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: What
...me types of music to attract listeners. what if the complaints actually a request fr...
^^^^
Line 3, column 410, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...d some are folk and jazz music channel. If it is not a folk music station then the...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, besides, but, if, may, so, then, for example, kind of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 19.6327345309 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 12.9520958084 31% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 11.1786427146 107% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 13.6137724551 59% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 25.0 28.8173652695 87% => OK
Preposition: 33.0 55.5748502994 59% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 10.0 16.3942115768 61% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1582.0 2260.96107784 70% => OK
No of words: 310.0 441.139720559 70% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.10322580645 5.12650576532 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.19604776685 4.56307096286 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.5222506178 2.78398813304 91% => OK
Unique words: 150.0 204.123752495 73% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.483870967742 0.468620217663 103% => OK
syllable_count: 490.5 705.55239521 70% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Article: 7.0 8.76447105788 80% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 19.7664670659 66% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 22.8473053892 101% => OK
Sentence length SD: 60.9759871254 57.8364921388 105% => OK
Chars per sentence: 121.692307692 119.503703932 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.8461538462 23.324526521 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.84615384615 5.70786347227 85% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.25449101796 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.20758483034 49% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 6.88822355289 102% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.67664670659 43% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.201169153661 0.218282227539 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0783336720774 0.0743258471296 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0785216938435 0.0701772020484 112% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.120095449561 0.128457276422 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0655016898016 0.0628817314937 104% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.5 14.3799401198 101% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 48.3550499002 100% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.197005988 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.6 12.5979740519 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.83 8.32208582834 94% => OK
difficult_words: 60.0 98.500998004 61% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 12.3882235529 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.1389221557 101% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 54.17 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.25 Out of 6
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