Pirouettes Ballet School is the clear choice for any child. Of all the dance schools in Elmtown, Pirouettes has the most intensive program, and our teachers have danced in the most prestigious ballet companies all over the world. Many of our students have gone on to become professional dancers with top dance companies.
The author claims that Many of our pupils have gone on to become to Professional dancers with top dance companies. His statement don not honest because they say manifold student not the teachers. I strongly defy with the claim and find it illogical due to the below mentioned reasons:
First argument of author is Pirouettes Ballet School is the clear choice for any child in Elm-town. However there several dancing school and also perhaps few have less tuition fees, so someone who is not rich they can select other school rather than Ballet School. Because Ballet school teacher have danced with ballet companies(international level) and they are professional dancer, so their tuition fess is obviously higher than other school.
Second argument of author is Pirouettes has the most intensive program, and their teachers have danced in the most prestigious ballet companies all over the world. This statement writer say their teachers have danced with international companies, and author claims that manifold their student have gone with top dance companies, and become professional dancers, so this statement defeat the author claims. Teachers had danced with the international company, then how can pupils become professional dancers with top dance companies.
On the whole, The author argument is flaws as per mine reasons mentioned the above. their student to dance with top dance companies and become professional dancers. First they to take a part in dancing competition at international level, and to become master in dancing they should victory in competition.
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: ??? out of 6
Category: Poor Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 11 15
No. of Words: 248 350
No. of Characters: 1297 1500
No. of Different Words: 123 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 3.968 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.23 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.725 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 105 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 63 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 39 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 28 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 22.545 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 6.14 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.727 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.419 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.661 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.147 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: ??? out of 6
Category: Poor Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 11 15
No. of Words: 248 350
No. of Characters: 1297 1500
No. of Different Words: 123 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 3.968 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.23 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.725 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 105 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 63 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 39 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 28 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 22.545 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 6.14 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.727 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.419 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.661 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.147 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 101, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: However,
...clear choice for any child in Elm-town. However there several dancing school and also p...
^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 115, Rule ID: MANY_NN_U[8]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun dancing seems to be uncountable; consider using: 'some dancing'.
Suggestion: some dancing
...or any child in Elm-town. However there several dancing school and also perhaps few have less t...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 86, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Their
... per mine reasons mentioned the above. their student to dance with top dance compani...
^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, however, if, second, so, then, on the whole
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 19.6327345309 36% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 12.9520958084 23% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 11.1786427146 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 13.6137724551 22% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 19.0 28.8173652695 66% => OK
Preposition: 28.0 55.5748502994 50% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 10.0 16.3942115768 61% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1330.0 2260.96107784 59% => More number of characters wanted.
No of words: 248.0 441.139720559 56% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.36290322581 5.12650576532 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.96837696647 4.56307096286 87% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79217493988 2.78398813304 100% => OK
Unique words: 125.0 204.123752495 61% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.504032258065 0.468620217663 108% => OK
syllable_count: 394.2 705.55239521 56% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 2.0 8.76447105788 23% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.67365269461 239% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 19.7664670659 56% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 22.8473053892 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.1718188457 57.8364921388 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 120.909090909 119.503703932 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.5454545455 23.324526521 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.09090909091 5.70786347227 89% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 3.0 5.25449101796 57% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.20758483034 49% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.88822355289 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.67664670659 43% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.397730715808 0.218282227539 182% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.163279196058 0.0743258471296 220% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.139534210061 0.0701772020484 199% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.218788115967 0.128457276422 170% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.107294091326 0.0628817314937 171% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.1 14.3799401198 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 48.3550499002 102% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.197005988 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.1 12.5979740519 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.72 8.32208582834 93% => OK
difficult_words: 47.0 98.500998004 48% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 12.3882235529 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.1389221557 97% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Minimum 250 words wanted.
Rates: 33.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 2.0 Out of 6
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