Pirouettes Ballet School is the clear choice for any child. Of all the dance schools in Elmtown, Pirouettes has the most intensive program, and our teachers have danced in the most prestigious ballet companies all over the world. Many of our students have gone on to become professional dancers with top dance companies.
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the recommendation and the argument on which it is based are reasonable. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.
In the given argument, the author is of the opinion that Pirouettes Ballet School is the foremost choice for any student wishing to attend a dance school. He backs his argument by stating that of all dance schools in Elmtown, Pirouettes Ballet School has the most intensive dance program, and their teachers have danced in the most prestigious ballet companies. Also, many of their students have gone on to become professional dancers in top most dancing companies. The author's argument might seem plausible to many, however, there are several questions if left unanswered may render this argument invalid.
The author here has failed to consider a very important aspect of any school. Rather than looking at the qualifications of a teacher, it is much more important to look at the ability with which a teacher can relate to his students and impart knowledge to them. A good teacher should possess the ability to alter his teaching methods in accordance with the aptitude level and learning pace of a student. Even though, the teacher may be a dancing prodigy, it is not always the case that he might be the best coach. For instance, Sachin Tendulkar, a world-known cricketer hasn't been able to get his son Arjun Tendulkar qualified even for the Under-16 cricket team in India. Thus, a person having excellent credentials in a field doesn’t necessarily underscore that the same person might be the best teacher in that particular field.
Another important point that the author missed is the pricing of the dance program. It might not be feasible for all children to attend the school as their family might be financially weak. It is possible that other schools in Elmtown are ready to provide a similar dance program for a lesser fee. It might be possible that some schools are even providing scholarships and hence students might be inclined to attend these schools. Thus, Pirouettes Ballet School might not be the clear choice for all the students. Also, the author has conveniently missed the location accessibility of Pirouettes Ballet School. The town and this school might not be easily accessible for a student because of the huge distance from their place of residence. Also, it is not said if Pirouettes Ballet School provides any temporary residence or hostels for its students. These are some of the important criteria for a student selecting a dance school.
Moreover, the credibility of the data provided by the author can be questionable. The author has failed to back his assertion with statistical evidence. The author just states that many of their students have gone on to become professional dancers. However, he has not backed this claim with quantified data. For instance, in India, getting into an IIT for pursuing the course of engineering is a big deal. Many coaching institutes have started for the sole purpose of providing the coaching for appearing in competitive examinations for getting admission into an IIT. One such example is "Kota" from where thousands of students get selected. However, lakhs of students attend the coaching classes in "Kota". Thus, only a fraction of their students are able to clear the competitive exam. Hence, it can't be said that coaching in "Kota" is the best. The same analogy can be applied for Pirouettes Ballet School where many students pursue the dance course but only a few are able to reach the pinnacle.
In a nutshell, even though the author asserts that Pirouettes Ballet School is the best dancing school in Elmtown, he has failed to back his claim with credible statistical evidence. Moreover, he has left many questions about the Pirouettes Ballet School, its faculty and former students unanswered. This makes the argument presented by the author weak and hence Pirouettes Ballet School might not be the clear choice for all children yearning to attend dance school.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 299, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...similar dance program for a lesser fee. It might be possible that some schools are...
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Line 5, column 863, Rule ID: SOME_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
... or hostels for its students. These are some of the important criteria for a student select...
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'hence', 'however', 'if', 'look', 'may', 'moreover', 'so', 'thus', 'for instance']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.266483516484 0.25644967241 104% => OK
Verbs: 0.151098901099 0.15541462614 97% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0851648351648 0.0836205057962 102% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0480769230769 0.0520304965353 92% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0370879120879 0.0272364105082 136% => Less pronouns wanted. Try not to use 'you, I, they, he...' as the subject of a sentence
Prepositions: 0.114010989011 0.125424944231 91% => OK
Participles: 0.0467032967033 0.0416121511921 112% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.78950246591 2.79052419416 100% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0247252747253 0.026700313972 93% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.001811407834 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.118131868132 0.113004496875 105% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0233516483516 0.0255425247493 91% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.00549450549451 0.0127820249294 43% => Some subClauses wanted starting by 'Which, Who, What, Whom, Whose.....'
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 3902.0 2731.13054187 143% => OK
No of words: 639.0 446.07635468 143% => OK
Chars per words: 6.10641627543 6.12365571057 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 5.02776782673 4.57801047555 110% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.397496087637 0.378187486979 105% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.286384976526 0.287650121315 100% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.209702660407 0.208842608468 100% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.128325508607 0.135150697306 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78950246591 2.79052419416 100% => OK
Unique words: 267.0 207.018472906 129% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.417840375587 0.469332199767 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
Word variations: 50.9817194978 52.1807786196 98% => OK
How many sentences: 33.0 20.039408867 165% => OK
Sentence length: 19.3636363636 23.2022227129 83% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.734812184 57.7814097925 67% => OK
Chars per sentence: 118.242424242 141.986410481 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.3636363636 23.2022227129 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.333333333333 0.724660767414 46% => More Discourse Markers wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.14285714286 97% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 3.58251231527 56% => OK
Readability: 48.0021340162 51.9672348444 92% => OK
Elegance: 1.80813953488 1.8405768891 98% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.595497904447 0.441005458295 135% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.123438329008 0.135418324435 91% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0988753722272 0.0829849096947 119% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.482617542562 0.58762219726 82% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.12732286098 0.147661913831 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.220559140128 0.193483328276 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.128765319231 0.0970749176394 133% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.438288223027 0.42659136922 103% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0353191388415 0.0774707102158 46% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.445471635637 0.312017818177 143% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0946329866648 0.0698173142475 136% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 8.33743842365 156% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 12.0 6.87684729064 174% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.82512315271 166% => OK
Positive topic words: 11.0 6.46551724138 170% => OK
Negative topic words: 12.0 5.36822660099 224% => OK
Neutral topic words: 6.0 2.82389162562 212% => OK
Total topic words: 29.0 14.657635468 198% => OK
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Rates: 83.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 6 -- The score is based on the average performance of 20,000 argument essays. This e-grader is not smart enough to check on arguments.
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