Pirouettes Ballet School is the clear choice for any child. Of all the dance schools in Elmtown, Pirouettes has the most intensive program, and our teachers have danced in the most prestigious ballet companies all over the world. Many of our students have gone on to become professional dancers with top dance companies.
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the recommendation and the argument on which it is based are reasonable. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.
The given argument seems to be presenting an overview of information without and insights being depicted. There are a number of questions related to number of children's or number of teachers from ballet companies, which argument seems to overlook without providing any actual numbers or percentages. Conclusion is based only on the vague information provided which requires some more insight or the answers to the questions mentioned below.
The starting two lines of the argument mention that Pirouettes Ballet School is clear choice for any child. What if this is the only ballet school in Elmtown? Regardless of other dance schools majoring in other dance forms. Also it mentions that they have the most intensive program. Does that mean that children's who just need to become professional's must enroll in the school? What about the people who just need to learn it as an extra curricular activity? Teacher in given ballet schools have danced in most prestigious ballet companies. What guarantees that such teachers might result into successful students? Hence, a number of question are being overlooked while the given information is made available as to why their school is the best in a given area.
It might be the case that, the given school might have some positive reviews concerned with the given dance form, but this does not guarantee success of each and every children who enrolls into it. Also, successful teachers encumber successful students might be a little vague information without any ratios or reports being depicted.
The last line of the argument mentions that most of their students have gone to become professional dancers with top dance companies. What are the total number of such students versus the students who enrolled into the given school? What if a student just seeks to learn the given form without wanting to be a professional? It just provides an obscured view of the total students who go to become professional dancers every year without any comparison charts depicted with respect to previous years. Hence, a more comprehensive information might be required to completely guarantee the success of the given ballet school.
Hence, the given argument, just based on the given information might be invalid for a new child to be enrolled into the school. More reviews or insight might surely guarantee the success of the school.
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.5 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 21 15
No. of Words: 387 350
No. of Characters: 1950 1500
No. of Different Words: 167 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.435 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.039 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.597 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 140 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 106 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 77 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 40 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 18.429 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 6.953 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.429 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.338 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.514 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.082 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 225, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
... schools majoring in other dance forms. Also it mentions that they have the most int...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, hence, if, look, so, while, as to, with respect to
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 19.6327345309 92% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.9520958084 77% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 11.1786427146 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 13.6137724551 103% => OK
Pronoun: 17.0 28.8173652695 59% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 55.5748502994 92% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 16.3942115768 79% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2000.0 2260.96107784 88% => OK
No of words: 387.0 441.139720559 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.16795865633 5.12650576532 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.43534841618 4.56307096286 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.63383683281 2.78398813304 95% => OK
Unique words: 173.0 204.123752495 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.447028423773 0.468620217663 95% => OK
syllable_count: 597.6 705.55239521 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.96107784431 40% => OK
Article: 7.0 8.76447105788 80% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.70958083832 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 4.22255489022 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 19.7664670659 106% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 22.8473053892 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 41.4471769934 57.8364921388 72% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.2380952381 119.503703932 80% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.4285714286 23.324526521 79% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.90476190476 5.70786347227 51% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.25449101796 19% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.20758483034 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 6.88822355289 87% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.67664670659 150% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.252353093196 0.218282227539 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.100835694848 0.0743258471296 136% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.106531656284 0.0701772020484 152% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.150711013061 0.128457276422 117% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.128346917266 0.0628817314937 204% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.1 14.3799401198 84% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 48.3550499002 128% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 12.197005988 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.71 12.5979740519 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.87 8.32208582834 95% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 98.500998004 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 12.3882235529 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.1389221557 83% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.9071856287 67% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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