A recent sales study indicates that consumption of seafood dishes in Bay City restaurants has increased by 30 percent during the past five years. Yet there are no currently operating city restaurants whose specialty is seafood. Moreover, the majority of families in Bay City are two-income families, and a nationwide study has shown that such families eat significantly fewer home-cooked meals than they did a decade ago but at the same time express more concern about healthful eating. Therefore, the new Captain Seafood restaurant that specializes in seafood should be quite popular and profitable.
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be addressed in order to decide whether the conclusion and the argument on which it is based are reasonable. Be sure to explain how the answers to the questions would help to evaluate the conclusion.
While it seem that new Captain seafood restuarent that specializes in seafood will be quite popular and profitable, but the there is lot of weakness in the argument.
It is stated that consumption of seafood dishes in Bay City restuarents has incresed by 30 percent during past few number, while the percentage increase is given, total number of cunsumers increased is not mentioned. Maybe earlier there was too few consumers like 10, so 30 percent increase means an addition of 3 consumers which will not create a significant difference in consumption. Maybe, as the population has increased in Bay area in last five year, there has been increase in consumption of every type of dishes.
Furthermore, there is less profit margin in seafood dishes. Many seafood dishes if not consumed right after the time of cunsumption are unhealthy for eating. While other dishes can be put into refrigerators. Many restuarents has stopped preparing these dishes due to less profit margin.
Moreover, most of the people enjoy eating seafood on the side of bay, where they are some old conventional seafood shops that are cheap and haelthy. Families prefer in these areas, where there is old traditions and some traditional seafood dishes. Moreover, Bay area being rich in sea creatures has number of companies that offers healthy processed food at lower price that can prepared in instant. As most families in bay area are two income families, and life in bay area is fast paced, whenever people have less time they prefer processed seafood.
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 12 15
No. of Words: 253 350
No. of Characters: 1247 1500
No. of Different Words: 143 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 3.988 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.929 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.602 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 88 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 63 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 45 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 30 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 21.083 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.341 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.667 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.385 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.447 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.09 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 2 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 112, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun number seems to be countable; consider using: 'few numbers'.
Suggestion: few numbers
... has incresed by 30 percent during past few number, while the percentage increase is given...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 4, column 158, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “While” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...f cunsumption are unhealthy for eating. While other dishes can be put into refrigerat...
^^^^^
Line 5, column 187, Rule ID: THERE_S_MANY[4]
Message: Did you mean 'there are old traditions'?
Suggestion: there are old traditions
.... Families prefer in these areas, where there is old traditions and some traditional seafood dishes. Mo...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, furthermore, if, may, moreover, so, while, as to
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 19.6327345309 81% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 12.9520958084 31% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 11.1786427146 45% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 13.6137724551 66% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 12.0 28.8173652695 42% => OK
Preposition: 32.0 55.5748502994 58% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 8.0 16.3942115768 49% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1280.0 2260.96107784 57% => More number of characters wanted.
No of words: 253.0 441.139720559 57% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.05928853755 5.12650576532 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.98822939669 4.56307096286 87% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6915225749 2.78398813304 97% => OK
Unique words: 147.0 204.123752495 72% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.581027667984 0.468620217663 124% => OK
syllable_count: 397.8 705.55239521 56% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 4.96107784431 20% => OK
Article: 0.0 8.76447105788 0% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 2.70958083832 221% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 4.22255489022 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 19.7664670659 61% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 22.8473053892 92% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.9156521632 57.8364921388 83% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.666666667 119.503703932 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.0833333333 23.324526521 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.41666666667 5.70786347227 77% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 3.0 5.25449101796 57% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.20758483034 85% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 6.88822355289 29% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.67664670659 64% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.258122871267 0.218282227539 118% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0901662096406 0.0743258471296 121% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0668916489774 0.0701772020484 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.140301905544 0.128457276422 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0656851590132 0.0628817314937 104% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.9 14.3799401198 90% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 48.3550499002 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.197005988 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.07 12.5979740519 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.55 8.32208582834 103% => OK
difficult_words: 62.0 98.500998004 63% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 12.3882235529 109% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.1389221557 93% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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