A recent sales study indicates that consumption of seafood dishes in Bay City restaurants has increased by 30 percent during the past five years Yet there are no currently operating city restaurants whose specialty is seafood Moreover the majority of fami

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A recent sales study indicates that consumption of seafood dishes in Bay City restaurants has increased by 30 percent during the past five years. Yet there are no currently operating city restaurants whose specialty is seafood. Moreover, the majority of families in Bay City are two-income families, and a nationwide study has shown that such families eat significantly fewer home-cooked meals than they did a decade ago but at the same time express more concern about healthful eating. Therefore, the new Captain Seafood restaurant that specializes in seafood should be quite popular and profitable.
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.

In the passage, the author argues that the new Captain Seafood restaurant in Bay City that specializes in seafood should be quite popular and profitable. The contention is built around a recent sales study indicating an increased consumption of seafood in Bay City restaurants and a nationwide study claiming that two-income families, which are prevalent in Bay City, eat less home-cooked meals. Though tempting to draw conclusions from the studies, more information about the sales study itself, the discrepancies in local and national demographics, and current consumption trends must be presented to assess the robustness of the argument.

The first price of evidence we need to acquire is the validity and representability of the sales study referenced in the argument. First of all, we must know how many restaurants are studied. If merely 5 restaurants are studied while there are 1000 restaurants in Bay City, the result of the study can hardly be deemed as representative. Furthermore, we also need to know the consumption of other types of food. If general consumption of food increased, then the increase in seafood consumption is simply a reflection of population behavior. However, if the relative increase in consumption of seafood outstrips that of others, it could indeed indicate a trend.

Secondly, we need information about differences between local and national demographics so we can reasonably interpret the results of the national study cited in the passage. It is always perfunctory to apply national study results to local issues unless we acknowledge regional discrepancies. If public transportation is wanting in Bay City, two-income families in Bay City may eat home-cooked meals more often since it is more inconvenient to get around. Also, residents in Bay City might adopt a healthier lifestyle than other places and are less inclined to dine in restaurants. Hence, more local demographic data must be provided to assess the validity of the argument.

Finally, we need more data about current consumption trends to help us evaluate the argument. Though we know seafood consumption has increased by 30% during the past 5 years, we do not know the current trend of seafood consumption, hence it is cursory to extrapolate this observation into the future. For example, there could be a 50% increase of seafood consumption in the in the first year followed by a gradual decrease. Or, there could be emerging studies on negative effects of seafood overconsumption. Either possibility undermines the claim that there is an increasing trend in seafood consumption.

In conclusion, more evidence related to the aforementioned issues must be presented to substantiate the claim that the new Captain Seafood restaurant that specializes in seafood would be quite popular and profitable.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 320, Rule ID: PROGRESSIVE_VERBS[1]
Message: This verb is normally not used in the progressive form. Try a simple form instead.
...discrepancies. If public transportation is wanting in Bay City, two-income families in Bay...
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Line 7, column 368, Rule ID: PHRASE_REPETITION[1]
Message: This phrase is duplicated. You should probably leave only 'in the'.
Suggestion: in the
...e a 50% increase of seafood consumption in the in the first year followed by a gradual decrea...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, finally, first, furthermore, hence, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, then, while, for example, in conclusion, first of all

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 19.6327345309 107% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 12.9520958084 131% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 11.1786427146 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 13.6137724551 59% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 23.0 28.8173652695 80% => OK
Preposition: 64.0 55.5748502994 115% => OK
Nominalization: 25.0 16.3942115768 152% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2375.0 2260.96107784 105% => OK
No of words: 443.0 441.139720559 100% => OK
Chars per words: 5.3611738149 5.12650576532 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.58776254615 4.56307096286 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.18120605265 2.78398813304 114% => OK
Unique words: 207.0 204.123752495 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.467268623025 0.468620217663 100% => OK
syllable_count: 740.7 705.55239521 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 4.96107784431 141% => OK
Article: 5.0 8.76447105788 57% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 2.70958083832 221% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 19.7664670659 101% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 22.8473053892 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.6629851034 57.8364921388 91% => OK
Chars per sentence: 118.75 119.503703932 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.15 23.324526521 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.75 5.70786347227 118% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.25449101796 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.20758483034 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 6.88822355289 87% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.67664670659 107% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.321982891439 0.218282227539 148% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.102229874534 0.0743258471296 138% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0732808019378 0.0701772020484 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.192043633463 0.128457276422 150% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0891316591022 0.0628817314937 142% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.9 14.3799401198 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.69 48.3550499002 84% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 12.197005988 107% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.81 12.5979740519 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.9 8.32208582834 107% => OK
difficult_words: 117.0 98.500998004 119% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 19.0 12.3882235529 153% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.1389221557 97% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 20 15
No. of Words: 443 350
No. of Characters: 2315 1500
No. of Different Words: 198 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.588 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.226 4.6
Word Length SD: 3.1 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 168 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 139 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 101 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 70 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 22.15 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.926 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.7 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.344 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.542 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.22 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5