A recent study indicates that children living in the Himalayan mountain region in Nepal have lower levels of tooth decay than children living in suburban areas in the United States, despite the fact that people in the Himalayan mountain region in Nepal re

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A recent study indicates that children living in the Himalayan mountain region in Nepal have lower levels of tooth decay than children living in suburban areas in the United States, despite the fact that people in the Himalayan mountain region in Nepal receive little to no professional dental care, while people in suburban areas in the United States see a dentist an average of 1.25 times per year. Thus, regular dental care is not helpful in preventing tooth decay.

The conclusion cited in the argument is based on unproven facts and unsupported claims.

The study which is done does not state anything about the sample size of the children. We don not know about the population of the children living in the Himalayan mountain region in Nepal and the population of the children living in suburban areas in the United States. If the study was based on a few samples, it cannot be taken as a generalization for the entire country of the United States. There is no evidence which corroborates the fact mentioned by the writer that children living in the Himalayan mountain region in Nepal have lower levels of tooth decay than children living in suburban areas in the United States.

There could be a possibility that the water of the Himalayan rivers is comprised of some minerals which make the teeth strong and prevent its decay. This could act a natural advantage for the children living in the Himalayan mountain region in Nepal in comparison to the children living in the suburbs if United States. In such a case, the possibility of requiring medical dental care for the Nepal kids is less in comparison to that of the children living in suburban areas in the United States. While it is mentioned that the people in the US, see a dentist an average of 1.25 times per year, there is no fact present which talks about how many times do the kids visit the dentist. This could talk about adults and kids and 'people' makes it a very ambiguous statement.

Even if for once, we assume the fact that the kids in the US, visit the dentist on a regular basis, there isn't enough evidence which states that dental habits or the dental hygiene followed by the kids in their normal routine. We are unsure of the eating habits of the kids in the Himalayan region and the kids in the suburbs of US. While the doctor may suggest something, we are not sure whether the kids follow that or are careless in their dental habits which could lead to their tooth decay.

Hence, the information given by the writer is not enough in concluding that regular dental care is not helpful in preventing tooth decay. There may be various factors which could result in this, which are not advocated with clear evidence and facts and figures, by the writer.

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Discourse Markers used:
['hence', 'if', 'may', 'so', 'while']

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.276744186047 0.25644967241 108% => OK
Verbs: 0.139534883721 0.15541462614 90% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0674418604651 0.0836205057962 81% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0279069767442 0.0520304965353 54% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0255813953488 0.0272364105082 94% => OK
Prepositions: 0.160465116279 0.125424944231 128% => OK
Participles: 0.0511627906977 0.0416121511921 123% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.35480602518 2.79052419416 84% => OK
Infinitives: 0.00697674418605 0.026700313972 26% => Some infinitives wanted.
Particles: 0.0 0.001811407834 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.155813953488 0.113004496875 138% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0186046511628 0.0255425247493 73% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0232558139535 0.0127820249294 182% => OK

Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2270.0 2731.13054187 83% => OK
No of words: 403.0 446.07635468 90% => OK
Chars per words: 5.63275434243 6.12365571057 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48049772903 4.57801047555 98% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.320099255583 0.378187486979 85% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.196029776675 0.287650121315 68% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.133995037221 0.208842608468 64% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.0694789081886 0.135150697306 51% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.35480602518 2.79052419416 84% => OK
Unique words: 163.0 207.018472906 79% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.404466501241 0.469332199767 86% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
Word variations: 42.685954658 52.1807786196 82% => OK
How many sentences: 15.0 20.039408867 75% => OK
Sentence length: 26.8666666667 23.2022227129 116% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.406118041 57.7814097925 79% => OK
Chars per sentence: 151.333333333 141.986410481 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.8666666667 23.2022227129 116% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.333333333333 0.724660767414 46% => More Discourse Markers wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.14285714286 97% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 3.58251231527 84% => OK
Readability: 46.4696443342 51.9672348444 89% => OK
Elegance: 2.53012048193 1.8405768891 137% => OK

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.666330089637 0.441005458295 151% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.207207656528 0.135418324435 153% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.117273657302 0.0829849096947 141% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.703593184443 0.58762219726 120% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.174827726067 0.147661913831 118% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.345495093075 0.193483328276 179% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.223747444084 0.0970749176394 230% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.535488796111 0.42659136922 126% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.160531307549 0.0774707102158 207% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.445915275513 0.312017818177 143% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.194435043753 0.0698173142475 278% => OK

Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.33743842365 60% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 6.87684729064 102% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.82512315271 62% => OK
Positive topic words: 3.0 6.46551724138 46% => OK
Negative topic words: 5.0 5.36822660099 93% => OK
Neutral topic words: 3.0 2.82389162562 106% => OK
Total topic words: 11.0 14.657635468 75% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6 -- The score is based on the average performance of 20,000 argument essays. This e-grader is not smart enough to check on arguments.
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