A recent study indicates that children living in the Himalayan mountain region in Nepal have lower levels of tooth decay than children living in suburban areas in the United States, despite the fact that people in the Himalayan mountain region in Nepal receive little to no professional dental care, while people in suburban areas in the United States see a dentist an average of 1.25 times per year. Thus, regular dental care is not helpful in preventing tooth decay.
The following argument is flawed for numerous reasons. primarily, the argument is based on unwarranted assumption that the living of children living in suburban region of United States and the children living in Himalayan region of Nepal is same, rendering its conclusion, that regular dental care is not helpful in preventing tooth decay.
The argument is based is on the unjustified assumption that the livelihood of children in Himalayan is similar to those in States. It might be possible that the children living in Himalayan due to living in mountain region does not have access to junk food or candies or even they have access to junk food or candies or their lifestyle is different and they do not eat much candies while the children living in suburban areas of States eat a lot of junk foods and candies as they have easy access to candies. It might also be possible that the dental hygine routine of children living in Himalayan is far better than then those living in States.
The argument would have be more convincing if the author have provided more information about the livelihood of the children of two areas. Even then the author have to further prove and provide more information that how he can say that people living in Nepal does not receive little to no professional dental care.
The data also lack the depth of information which is required to access the results of the study. How the study has taken out? how many people were involved in the survey? Wheather the survey involve enough participants to represent general population? all this information is important to access the result of the study. Alternatively, it might be possible that people of Himalayan receive dental care but very few of them were surveyed or the children of States have similar level of tooth decay but few people were surveyed out of which large portion have higher level of tooth decay.
Because the argument is based on multiple unwarranted assumptions, it fails to make a convincing case that regular dental care is not helpful in preventing tooth decay.
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 11 15
No. of Words: 351 350
No. of Characters: 1688 1500
No. of Different Words: 143 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.328 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.809 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.531 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 125 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 82 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 60 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 33 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 31.909 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 16.649 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.545 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.412 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.706 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.174 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 56, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Primarily
...rgument is flawed for numerous reasons. primarily, the argument is based on unwarranted a...
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Line 5, column 370, Rule ID: MUCH_COUNTABLE[1]
Message: Use 'many' with countable nouns.
Suggestion: many
...estyle is different and they do not eat much candies while the children living in su...
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Line 7, column 25, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'been'.
Suggestion: been
...ng in States. The argument would have be more convincing if the author have prov...
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Line 11, column 128, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: How
...the study. How the study has taken out? how many people were involved in the survey...
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Line 11, column 254, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: All
...ipants to represent general population? all this information is important to access...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, so, then, while
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 19.6327345309 102% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 12.9520958084 39% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 11.1786427146 98% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 13.6137724551 81% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 28.8173652695 80% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 55.5748502994 85% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 16.3942115768 79% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1728.0 2260.96107784 76% => OK
No of words: 351.0 441.139720559 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.92307692308 5.12650576532 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.32839392791 4.56307096286 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.57946962096 2.78398813304 93% => OK
Unique words: 147.0 204.123752495 72% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.418803418803 0.468620217663 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 545.4 705.55239521 77% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Article: 5.0 8.76447105788 57% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 4.22255489022 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 19.7664670659 71% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 22.8473053892 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 97.81323311 57.8364921388 169% => OK
Chars per sentence: 123.428571429 119.503703932 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.0714285714 23.324526521 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.14285714286 5.70786347227 38% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.25449101796 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.20758483034 61% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 6.88822355289 87% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.67664670659 64% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.378119085261 0.218282227539 173% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.105342727569 0.0743258471296 142% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.113166793036 0.0701772020484 161% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.188703291096 0.128457276422 147% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.115824181168 0.0628817314937 184% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.3 14.3799401198 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 48.3550499002 95% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 12.197005988 107% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.55 12.5979740519 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.44 8.32208582834 89% => OK
difficult_words: 57.0 98.500998004 58% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 12.3882235529 109% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 11.1389221557 108% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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