A recent study indicates that children living in the Himalayan mountain region in Nepal have lower levels of tooth decay than children living in suburban areas in the United States, despite the fact that people in the Himalayan mountain region in Nepal receive little to no professional dental care, while people in suburban areas in the United States see a dentist an average of 1.25 times per year. Thus, regular dental care is not helpful in preventing tooth decay.
Write a response in which you discuss one or more alternative explanations that could rival the proposed explanation and explain how your explanation(s) can plausibly account for the facts presented in the argument.
The explanation for the observation of lower level of tooth decay in in children living in Nepal as compared to us that regular dental care is not helpful is based few unsubstantiated assumptions which need to be ratified with the help of evidence.
The only fact that number of children suffering with tooth decay is less in Himalayan region of Nepal as compared to united states doesn't prove that the regular dental care received by children in united states is not helpful. there can be many other reasons other than the number of times dental check ups taken accounting for the lesser tooth decay. For instance, along with no provision of professional dental care available in Nepal there might be no tooth decaying sweets available in Nepal for children. even if they have all that junk available in their area they might not be consuming it on a regular basis. As we know how much children love eating junk food and sweets, which are the major reason for the tooth decay in children. children in united states obviously have these junk food and sweets on a regular basis which leads to tooth decaying of these children. Therefore, even if they go for yearly or half yearly dental check ups it would not be enough to stop their tooth decay. so, less availability of these junk food and sweets to children in Nepal and increased consumption of these snacks by children in united states can explain the reason for lower number of children suffering with tooth decay.
Additionally, dental care is not only about visiting a dentist on a regular basis. There are many other factors that decide your dental health. factors like, how regularly you brush, the quality of products you use for dental care and the type of food you consume. Now if the children in united states even after having the provision of professional dental care do not brush their teeth regularly and properly it can lead to increased tooth decay issue. Another example could be that the children living in Himalayan region in Nepal might be using products from natural source to brush their teeth which would obviously be pure and contain no chemicals as compared to the synthetic ones available in the market. so, these could be possible explanation for less number of tooth decay in children living in Himalayan region.
Finally, it is unconscionable to blame the dentist and regular dental check up for higher number of tooth decay cases in children living in any area. The dentist might be providing the required service by explaining the children all the precautions they should take and the dental care they should follow to prevent tooth decay but children might not be following it.
To conclude, children themselves are more responsible for their dental health than the dentist or any other factor. This explanation for lesser number of tooth decay in children staying in Nepal is not cogent. it does not comprehends all the possible reasons for the difference in number and provides explanation based on narrow view.
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 13 15
No. of Words: 512 350
No. of Characters: 2454 1500
No. of Different Words: 187 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.757 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.793 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.449 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 169 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 107 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 80 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 43 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 39.385 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 14.98 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.462 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.453 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.67 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.195 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, if, so, therefore, for instance
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 19.6327345309 107% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 12.9520958084 116% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 11.1786427146 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 13.6137724551 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 35.0 28.8173652695 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 68.0 55.5748502994 122% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 16.3942115768 55% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2508.0 2260.96107784 111% => OK
No of words: 511.0 441.139720559 116% => OK
Chars per words: 4.90802348337 5.12650576532 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.75450408675 4.56307096286 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.48484054675 2.78398813304 89% => OK
Unique words: 191.0 204.123752495 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.373776908023 0.468620217663 80% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 766.8 705.55239521 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 4.0 8.76447105788 46% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 19.7664670659 101% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 22.8473053892 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 56.1541405419 57.8364921388 97% => OK
Chars per sentence: 125.4 119.503703932 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.55 23.324526521 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.25 5.70786347227 39% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 15.0 5.25449101796 285% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 8.20758483034 158% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.88822355289 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.67664670659 43% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.280093516183 0.218282227539 128% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.10933584859 0.0743258471296 147% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0821298555291 0.0701772020484 117% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.176056334956 0.128457276422 137% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0494988012799 0.0628817314937 79% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.5 14.3799401198 101% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 48.3550499002 113% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.197005988 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.49 12.5979740519 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.26 8.32208582834 87% => OK
difficult_words: 77.0 98.500998004 78% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 18.0 12.3882235529 145% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 11.1389221557 108% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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