A recent study indicates that children living in the Himalayan mountain region in Nepal have lower levels of tooth decay than children living in suburban areas in the United States, despite the fact that people in the Himalayan mountain region in Nepal re

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A recent study indicates that children living in the Himalayan mountain region in Nepal have lower levels of tooth decay than children living in suburban areas in the United States, despite the fact that people in the Himalayan mountain region in Nepal receive little to no professional dental care, while people in suburban areas in the United States see a dentist an average of 1.25 times per year. Thus, regular dental care is not helpful in preventing tooth decay.

Write a response in which you discuss one or more alternative explanations that could rival the proposed explanation and explain how your explanation(s) can plausibly account for the facts presented in the argument.

The author claims here that, regular checkups with dentists is not helping to reduce dental decay and neglecting the checkups will result in

decreased dental decay. Stated in this way, the argument fails to mention some key features on the basis of which it could have been evaluated.

To support his claim, the author reasons that, as children in nepal, with little to no dental care, are facing less dental decay, then it must be the regular

dental care that is increasing the dental decay. However, careful scrutiny of evidence reveals that it provides little credible support to author's claim.

Hence, the argument can be considered incomplete and unsustainable.

Firstly, the author readily assumes that, as children of suburban areas of USA are seeing dentists in regular intervaal, this is causing the dental decay rate

to increase. This is merely an assumption without much solid ground. To illustarte, the children in suburban areas might be using some product which are

actually harming their tooth. The good products may not be available there. So, the dentists are also unable to recommend the good product, thinking

they will not find it nereby. Hence, it would have been much more convincing if the author explicitely stated that, suburban areas also have the same products

but still tooth decay rates are higher.

Again, the author points out to the fact that, children in Himalayan mountain region are facing less tooth decoy problem. This is again a weak and

unsupported claim which does not demonstrate any clear correlation between less exposer to dentist and their tooth decay rate. There may have been other

reasons for which they are not facing the problem. For example, they might be using some natuarsal elements to brush their teeth. The water or any other

element may be beneficial to the health of the tooth. So, if the author provided evidence that there is not any advantagve of the location

regarding tooth, it would have been much more convincing.

Finally, the author conclusion raises some skepticall questions. Are nepali children have a tooth structure better than suburban areas children?

Do nepal have some natural elemts help to lessen the decay rate of tooth? Are doctors less qualified in suburbs? Without answering these questions, the reader is left with the impression that the claim is just

a wishful thinking of the author ratherthan substantive evidence.

In conclusion, the argument is unpersuasive as it stands. To bolster further, the autrhor must have provided evidence with the help of some statistics from reliable sorces.

Without those, the argument is weak.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, finally, first, firstly, hence, however, if, may, regarding, so, still, then, for example, in conclusion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 29.0 19.6327345309 148% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 12.9520958084 100% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 11.1786427146 54% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 13.0 13.6137724551 95% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 28.8173652695 101% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 55.5748502994 77% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 16.3942115768 79% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2248.0 2260.96107784 99% => OK
No of words: 427.0 441.139720559 97% => OK
Chars per words: 5.26463700234 5.12650576532 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.54576487731 4.56307096286 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.46353549284 2.78398813304 88% => OK
Unique words: 211.0 204.123752495 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.494145199063 0.468620217663 105% => OK
syllable_count: 666.9 705.55239521 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 4.96107784431 141% => OK
Article: 16.0 8.76447105788 183% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.22255489022 213% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 19.7664670659 126% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 22.8473053892 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 47.4637377374 57.8364921388 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 89.92 119.503703932 75% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.08 23.324526521 73% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.0 5.70786347227 88% => OK
Paragraphs: 20.0 5.15768463074 388% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 21.0 5.25449101796 400% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.20758483034 134% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 11.0 6.88822355289 160% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.67664670659 64% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.185938072658 0.218282227539 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0514920424371 0.0743258471296 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0757265219414 0.0701772020484 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0587431209591 0.128457276422 46% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0595487294544 0.0628817314937 95% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.9 14.3799401198 83% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 48.3550499002 112% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 12.197005988 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.93 12.5979740519 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.58 8.32208582834 103% => OK
difficult_words: 111.0 98.500998004 113% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 12.3882235529 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 11.1389221557 79% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Maximum six paragraphs wanted.

Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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