A recent study indicates that children living in the Himalayan mountain region in Nepal have lower levels of tooth decay than children living in suburban areas in the United States, despite the fact that people in the Himalayan mountain region in Nepal re

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A recent study indicates that children living in the Himalayan mountain region in Nepal have lower levels of tooth decay than children living in suburban areas in the United States, despite the fact that people in the Himalayan mountain region in Nepal receive little to no professional dental care, while people in suburban areas in the United States see a dentist an average of 1.25 times per year. Thus, regular dental care is not helpful in preventing tooth decay.

Write a response in which you discuss one or more alternative explanations that could rival the proposed explanation and explain how your explanation(s) can plausibly account for the facts presented in the argument.

The proposed argument states that regular dental care is not helpful in preventing tooth decay. The evidence given for this is- children living in Himalayan mountain region in Nepal have limited dental care and still the rate of tooth decay is less than that of children living the suburban areas of U.S who have greater professional dental care access. However, various factors should be consider before coming to the conclusion.

The fact that the children in Nepal have lesser tooth decay problem then the children in U.S. could be because of the less eating options in Nepal. People living in mountain have limited options for food.most of their daily food consists of only vegetables and fruits grown in mountains. It is possible that the children living in Nepal are eating healthier food than the children in U.S. therefore, children in U.S. may have more tooth decay .

Another factor that the children in Nepal face less problems relating to teeth may be the result of the possibility that they are using less chemicals products for their teeth such as tree stem in place of toothpaste. Toothpaste contains various teeth whitening chemicals which are harmful to teeth and which cause various tooth problems. Children in U.S may be using toothpaste which results in more tooth problems.

Third factor that maybe causing more tooth decay in U.S children is because children living in U.S are not taking care of their teeth as they should be. Brushing teeth two times a day is very important to keep the teeth healthy. Children in Nepal could be brushing their teeth multiple times to keep their teeth safe from decaying as they know that they have limited dental care. On the other hand children in U.S may not be taking good care of their teeth which is resulting in more tooth decay.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, may, still, then, therefore, third, such as, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 19.6327345309 92% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.9520958084 62% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 11.1786427146 27% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 13.0 13.6137724551 95% => OK
Pronoun: 20.0 28.8173652695 69% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 55.5748502994 67% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 16.3942115768 12% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1508.0 2260.96107784 67% => OK
No of words: 305.0 441.139720559 69% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.94426229508 5.12650576532 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.17902490978 4.56307096286 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.2745285853 2.78398813304 82% => OK
Unique words: 132.0 204.123752495 65% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.432786885246 0.468620217663 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 436.5 705.55239521 62% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.59920159681 88% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 4.96107784431 20% => OK
Article: 3.0 8.76447105788 34% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.70958083832 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 19.7664670659 66% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 22.8473053892 101% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.1376194407 57.8364921388 90% => OK
Chars per sentence: 116.0 119.503703932 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.4615384615 23.324526521 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.46153846154 5.70786347227 96% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 10.0 5.25449101796 190% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.20758483034 49% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 6.88822355289 116% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.67664670659 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.318200438283 0.218282227539 146% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.129673629784 0.0743258471296 174% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.123199125617 0.0701772020484 176% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.220398683069 0.128457276422 172% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.119988114207 0.0628817314937 191% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.6 14.3799401198 95% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 65.05 48.3550499002 135% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 12.197005988 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.67 12.5979740519 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.94 8.32208582834 95% => OK
difficult_words: 61.0 98.500998004 62% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 12.3882235529 73% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.1389221557 101% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 13 15
No. of Words: 310 350
No. of Characters: 1463 1500
No. of Different Words: 129 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.196 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.719 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.293 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 97 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 71 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 50 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 18 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 23.846 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.598 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.615 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.436 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.651 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.194 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5