A recent study reported that pet owners have longer, healthier lives on average than do people who own no pets. Specifically, dog owners tend to have a lower incidence of heart disease. In light of these findings, Sherwood Hospital should form a partnership with Sherwood Animal Shelter to institute an adopt-a-dog program. The program would encourage dog ownership for patients recovering from heart disease, which should reduce these patients' chance of experiencing continuing heart problems and also reduce their need for ongoing treatment. As a further benefit, the publicity about the program would encourage more people to adopt pets from the shelter. And that will reduce the incidence of heart disease in the general population.
xc Write a response in which you examine the stated and/or unstated assumptions of the argument. Be sure to explain how the argument depends on these assumptions and what the implications are for the argument if the assumptions prove unwarranted.
Author concluded that if more people adopt the pets, then the incidence of heart disease would be reduced in the general population. To support that recommendations author mentioned about a study where it is said that pet owners have longer life than who own no pets. He also added that hospital should form a petnership with animal shelter to adopt pets so that it would encourage pet ownership to recover from heart disease. But, he has severals flaws and he has not given reliable information to believe the support.
Firstly, author have mentioned about a study report where it is mentioned that pet owner have longer life.However, he has not cleared about some omportant information to believe that claim. For example, he should mentioned that when and where this report has been published. It might be happen that this report has not been published in any authentic journals and some people spread out the report for their beneficial purpose. So, without any reliable source , we can not make decision to support this report.
Secondly, author also mentioned that especially dog owner tend to have lower incidence of heart disease. But he has not make clarification about why specifically dog can have good impacts to cure disease than other pet animals. It might be happen that other pet animals such as pet cat has also better impact than pet dogs. Moreover, he also mentioned about to have dog adoption program in hospitals to cure frm heart disease in the patients. But, without constructive evaluation of this report , we can not imply it in the hospitals. It might be happen that after promoting this program in the hospitals, patients conditions become more bad.
Thirdly, author made a desicions that pet adoptions publicity would encourage people to adopt pets and it will reduce heart disease. But, author has not mentioned why this adopting pets can sace people from heart disease. It might bee happen this publicity has by a fraud team who are making money by promoting this type of reports. So, without any constructive judgements , we can not believe on this type of publicity.
In sum, we need severals clarifications to support that views. Author need to mention about the report that where and whome were connected wih this reopot to make a decisions that dog pet owner have longer life than who do not have pet. Moreover, without any constructive reliable data, we can not imply this pet adoption program in the hospitals because it miht have severals bad impacts on patients rather than cure from heart disease.
Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 13 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 10 2
No. of Sentences: 21 15
No. of Words: 428 350
No. of Characters: 2062 1500
No. of Different Words: 171 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.548 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.818 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.468 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 141 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 103 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 64 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 46 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 20.381 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 6.321 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.714 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.368 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.56 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.239 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 252, Rule ID: IN_WHO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'whom'?
Suggestion: whom
...d that pet owners have longer life than who own no pets. He also added that hospita...
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Line 3, column 107, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: However
...ntioned that pet owner have longer life.However, he has not cleared about some omportan...
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Line 3, column 460, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...purpose. So, without any reliable source , we can not make decision to support thi...
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Line 5, column 121, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error -- use past participle here: 'made'.
Suggestion: made
...idence of heart disease. But he has not make clarification about why specifically do...
^^^^
Line 5, column 296, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error -- use past participle here: 'bettered', 'welled'.
Suggestion: bettered; welled
...er pet animals such as pet cat has also better impact than pet dogs. Moreover, he also...
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Line 5, column 495, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...t constructive evaluation of this report , we can not imply it in the hospitals. I...
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Line 7, column 43, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'adoptions'' or 'adoption's'?
Suggestion: adoptions'; adoption's
...irdly, author made a desicions that pet adoptions publicity would encourage people to ado...
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Line 7, column 373, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
... So, without any constructive judgements , we can not believe on this type of publ...
^^
Line 9, column 164, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a decision' or simply 'decisions'?
Suggestion: a decision; decisions
... were connected wih this reopot to make a decisions that dog pet owner have longer life tha...
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Line 9, column 217, Rule ID: IN_WHO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'whom'?
Suggestion: whom
...hat dog pet owner have longer life than who do not have pet. Moreover, without any ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, however, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, then, third, thirdly, for example, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 19.6327345309 51% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 12.9520958084 139% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 11.1786427146 54% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 24.0 13.6137724551 176% => OK
Pronoun: 50.0 28.8173652695 174% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 47.0 55.5748502994 85% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 16.3942115768 61% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2119.0 2260.96107784 94% => OK
No of words: 427.0 441.139720559 97% => OK
Chars per words: 4.962529274 5.12650576532 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.54576487731 4.56307096286 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.56626721528 2.78398813304 92% => OK
Unique words: 180.0 204.123752495 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.421545667447 0.468620217663 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 663.3 705.55239521 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 4.96107784431 282% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 0.0 8.76447105788 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.70958083832 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.22255489022 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 19.7664670659 106% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 22.8473053892 88% => OK
Sentence length SD: 36.4619517155 57.8364921388 63% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.904761905 119.503703932 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.3333333333 23.324526521 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.42857142857 5.70786347227 95% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 5.25449101796 190% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.20758483034 122% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.88822355289 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.67664670659 128% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.316808504508 0.218282227539 145% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.107784086167 0.0743258471296 145% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0941069797797 0.0701772020484 134% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.207035497179 0.128457276422 161% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.067709244674 0.0628817314937 108% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.1 14.3799401198 84% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 48.3550499002 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.197005988 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.49 12.5979740519 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.33 8.32208582834 88% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 98.500998004 74% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 12.3882235529 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.1389221557 90% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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