"Recently, we signed a contract with the Fly-Away Pest Control Company to provide pest control services at our fast-food warehouse in Palm City, but last month we discovered that over $20,000 worth of food there had been destroyed by pest damage. Meanwhile, the Buzzoff Pest Control Company, which we have used for many years, continued to service our warehouse in Wintervale, and last month only $10,000 worth of the food stored there had been destroyed by pest damage. Even though the price charged by Fly-Away is considerably lower, our best means of saving money is to return to Buzzoff for all our pest control services."
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.
The vice president of a food distribution company seems in a deep sorrow due to huge loss of the company's food. He or she blames the pest control company, and he or she decides to contract with the previous pest control company. We need some evidence, however, to evaluate whether his or her argument is right: first, we have to compare the price of food and services of a pest control company. Second, we must compare the severity of pest in Wintervale and Palm City. Third, we have to compare the value of food in two warehouses.
To justify the conclusion in the memo, we first have to show that the price of damaged food exceeds that of payments for a pest control company. It must be checked that services of a pest control company could be far more expensive than price of food. If we prove the former strictly excels the latter, to return to Buzzoff could be a good choice, under the assumption that will-be-mentioned conditions hold. Otherwise, however, changing the pest control company could not be a profitable choice.
Secondly, we have to show the pest in Palm City is as severe as that of Wintervale to show the assertion in the memo is valid. There is a possibility that pest in Palm City is more severe that than of Wintervile, so even the best pest control company could not help food getting worse. If the pest in two cities are equally severe, then we may regard that Fly-Away Pest Control is poor at protecting food from pest. If not, changing the pest control company could not be a good option.
Lastly, we also have to verify the amount and price of food in each warehouses: it could be equal or not. If the warehouse in Palm City had contained twice much, or twice more expensive food than that of Wintervale, then the loss of the warehouse of Palm city would be greater than that of Wintervale under same pest. If the value of food in each warehouses are the same, then changing pest control company could be justified. Otherwise, the vice president have to re-check his or her reasoning again.
We examined three evidences have to be checked. If one of them is hostile against the vice president's opinion, his or her opinion should be re-verified.
Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 19 15
No. of Words: 390 350
No. of Characters: 1740 1500
No. of Different Words: 154 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.444 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.462 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.458 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 108 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 89 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 49 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 32 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 20.526 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.444 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.737 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.399 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.583 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.264 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, lastly, may, second, secondly, so, then, third
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 19.6327345309 102% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 12.9520958084 108% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 11.1786427146 98% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 13.6137724551 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 33.0 28.8173652695 115% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 55.5748502994 90% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 16.3942115768 30% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1788.0 2260.96107784 79% => OK
No of words: 390.0 441.139720559 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.58461538462 5.12650576532 89% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44391917772 4.56307096286 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.54593564278 2.78398813304 91% => OK
Unique words: 163.0 204.123752495 80% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.417948717949 0.468620217663 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 570.6 705.55239521 81% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 4.96107784431 222% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 2.0 8.76447105788 23% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 2.70958083832 221% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 19.7664670659 96% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 22.8473053892 88% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.0586135653 57.8364921388 69% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.1052631579 119.503703932 79% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.5263157895 23.324526521 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.05263157895 5.70786347227 71% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.25449101796 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.20758483034 49% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 6.88822355289 145% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.67664670659 107% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.41928812164 0.218282227539 192% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.157649514729 0.0743258471296 212% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0939069295105 0.0701772020484 134% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.253305951051 0.128457276422 197% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.131787370182 0.0628817314937 210% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.4 14.3799401198 72% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 48.3550499002 123% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 12.197005988 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.28 12.5979740519 74% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.71 8.32208582834 93% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 98.500998004 77% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 12.3882235529 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.1389221557 90% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.9071856287 84% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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