Several factors indicate that KNOW radio can no longer succeed as a rock-and-roll music station. Consider, for example, that the number of people in our listening area over fifty years of age has increased dramatically, while our total number of listeners

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Several factors indicate that KNOW radio can no longer succeed as a rock-and-roll music station. Consider, for example, that the number of people in our listening area over fifty years of age has increased dramatically, while our total number of listeners has declined. Also, music stores in our area report decreased sales of rock-and-roll music. Finally, continuous news stations in neighboring cities have been very successful. We predict that switching KNOW radio from rock-and-roll music to 24-hour news will allow the station to attract older listeners and make KNOW radio more profitable than ever.

The author of argument recommends that the 24-hour news program instead of the rock-and-roll music program in the KNOW radio will attract more listeners. This recommendation cannot be accepted as it stands; it rests on the series of surmises for the support of which some vital questions are to be answered.

The first problem with the argument is that the author assumed a link between the increased number of the senior citizens over the fifty years old and declined the number of the listener. However, it is a vague assumption, a list of question should have been addressed till fortifies the accuracy of this link. The first question comes to mind at first glance is that what is the total demographic statistic? Is there a sole increase in the number of elder people or there is a huge migration from the other city which includes wide-range of people with the various age? If there is an increase in all ranges of the age, and the category of youth age covers nearly fifty percent of the migration, the radio has more young listener than before. Besides, even the increment includes lonely the elder people; it does not convince that the main reason of the declined listeners is the seniors. The second question which should be answered is that, is there any survey to illustrate the listeners do not like the rock-and-roll programs in radio? Maybe the people do like the rock-and-roll music, but the program plays the old ones which are repetitive and make the listener reluctance toward the radio's program.

The next issue with the argument is that the author asserts that based on the report by the music stores in the KNOW radio's area, the people purchase the rock-and-roll records fewer than the past; therefore, the rock-and-roll music does not fit with the people's taste. The problem which should have to address accurately to strengthened the argument is that is there any alternative source to buy or listen the rock-and-roll music apart from the local music stores? In a case which people can easily buy or listen their desired music from the internet, there is no requirement for the music stores. Or if there is a new and attractive music program on the TV or radio which competes with the music stores and persuades the people to listen to its rock-and-roll music instead of the buying them from the stores. Each scenario would present an alternative possibility for the decrement of rock-and-roll music sale apart from the assumed factor.

Finally, the writer predicts that the shift from the rock-and-roll program to the 24-hour news program will be appealing and profitable. Actually, this predication is dangling, and the author leaves the lots of unanswered questions. For example, what leads the writer thinks the news program is a favorite program for the senior citizens? Even in a case which the majority of the listeners are elders, it does not mean that they like the news program. Maybe they prefer to listen to the light music or a narration which differ entirely from the news program. In addition, if the people prefer the 24-news program, there is no obvious clue that this type of the program is beneficial financially since the commercial shows and advertisement advocate the program. If the writer had responded that the local businesses are willing to adherence the 24-news program, the argument would have been fortified.

All in all, the argument is flawed for the reasons mentioned above and is, therefore, unpersuasive.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 111, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
...d of the rock and roll music program in the KNOW radio will attract more listeners. This...
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Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
...ed on the report by the music stores in the KNOW radio's area, the people purchase ...
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Discourse Markers used:
['actually', 'besides', 'but', 'finally', 'first', 'however', 'if', 'may', 'second', 'so', 'then', 'therefore', 'apart from', 'for example', 'in addition']

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.263868065967 0.25644967241 103% => OK
Verbs: 0.139430284858 0.15541462614 90% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0764617691154 0.0836205057962 91% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0419790104948 0.0520304965353 81% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0149925037481 0.0272364105082 55% => OK
Prepositions: 0.113943028486 0.125424944231 91% => OK
Participles: 0.0209895052474 0.0416121511921 50% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.48809034043 2.79052419416 89% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0179910044978 0.026700313972 67% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.001811407834 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.170914542729 0.113004496875 151% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0134932533733 0.0255425247493 53% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0164917541229 0.0127820249294 129% => OK

Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 3491.0 2731.13054187 128% => OK
No of words: 607.0 446.07635468 136% => OK
Chars per words: 5.75123558484 6.12365571057 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.96360453597 4.57801047555 108% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.309719934102 0.378187486979 82% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.224052718287 0.287650121315 78% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.164744645799 0.208842608468 79% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.0922570016474 0.135150697306 68% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.48809034043 2.79052419416 89% => OK
Unique words: 251.0 207.018472906 121% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.413509060956 0.469332199767 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
Word variations: 49.6423786392 52.1807786196 95% => OK
How many sentences: 23.0 20.039408867 115% => OK
Sentence length: 26.3913043478 23.2022227129 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.400495672 57.7814097925 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 151.782608696 141.986410481 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.3913043478 23.2022227129 114% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.652173913043 0.724660767414 90% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.14285714286 97% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 3.58251231527 56% => OK
Readability: 48.7965761765 51.9672348444 94% => OK
Elegance: 2.03053435115 1.8405768891 110% => OK

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.300485330682 0.441005458295 68% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.188857903305 0.135418324435 139% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.098992932388 0.0829849096947 119% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.699496446504 0.58762219726 119% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.126700426723 0.147661913831 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.151987950704 0.193483328276 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0596015295745 0.0970749176394 61% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.579401093568 0.42659136922 136% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.153140922132 0.0774707102158 198% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.214932206607 0.312017818177 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0775672521881 0.0698173142475 111% => OK

Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.33743842365 120% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 6.87684729064 131% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.82512315271 83% => OK
Positive topic words: 8.0 6.46551724138 124% => OK
Negative topic words: 9.0 5.36822660099 168% => OK
Neutral topic words: 4.0 2.82389162562 142% => OK
Total topic words: 21.0 14.657635468 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6 -- The score is based on the average performance of 20,000 argument essays. This e-grader is not smart enough to check on arguments.
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