"Several recent surveys indicate that home owners are increasingly eager to conserve energy. At the same time, manufacturers are now marketing many home appliances, such as refrigerators and air conditioners, that are almost twice as energy efficient as those sold a decade ago. Also, new technologies for better home insulation and passive solar heating are readily available to reduce the energy needed for home heating. Therefore, the total demand for electricity in our area will not increase — and may decline slightly. Since our three electric generating plants in operation for the past twenty years have always met our needs, construction of new generating plants will not be necessary."
In the given argument author says that, home owners are now increasingly eager to conserve energy. Also, he mentions the some of the point’s and thought’s that can help us to conserve the energy. However, in the given argument author put some valid areas to support the given cause he might missed some other area as well, let’s look into some of those areas by explaining it.
Now, several recent surveys. Here we don’t know how recent the surveys were taken in that author indicates that home owners are eager to conserve the energy. At the same time we don’t know the county or city from where they took the survey, so we don’t know the mind set or thinking capacity of the crowd, many of the home owners are belonging from rural region that can be the possibility, and they don’t even know the meaning of energy conservation.
Author also compared the product here which were manufacturing a decade ago. With current generation, although we can say that many companies are manufacturing the products which are more energy efficient but at the same time these products can empty our pocket. Because products of this category are costlier than the others, and because of that many people cannot afford it. So, we cannot say that this will surely help us to reduce the energy. Even if we take the solar heating which is readily available and uses for home heating, only will valid for the winter season then there is no use of it so why people will invest money in this. Also, there is change of increasing demand for electricity when people go for budget friendly products which are not energy conservation.
In the given argument author hastily conclude that the existing three electric plant will meet our needs, so constructing another one is not necessary. Which seriously create a bad impact if we see the scenarios mentioned above. If most of the people use the budget friendly products there will be no energy conservation on those, and if we see in the conclusion it says that existing plants are 20 years old that to clearly not indicate the when they were built so obviously, we cannot rely on that. and if we compared it with todays generation then it is obvious that there is an increase in population.
Hence, we can confidently conclude that there have to be the possibility that we will have to develop the new plant which can generate an ample amount of electricity, and that can fulfil our needs as well.
Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 16 15
No. of Words: 431 350
No. of Characters: 1954 1500
No. of Different Words: 203 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.556 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.534 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.377 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 125 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 77 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 58 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 29 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 26.938 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 16.798 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.75 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.341 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.494 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.224 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 3 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 122, Rule ID: THE_SOME_DAY[1]
Message: Did you mean 'same'?
Suggestion: same
... conserve energy. Also, he mentions the some of the point’s and thought’s that can h...
^^^^
Line 1, column 122, Rule ID: SOME_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
... conserve energy. Also, he mentions the some of the point’s and thought’s that can help us ...
^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 2, column 330, Rule ID: NON_ACTION_CONTINUOUS[4]
Message: The verb belong is usually not used with a continuous form, use the simple form instead. Suggestion: 'belong'
Suggestion: belong
...y of the crowd, many of the home owners are belonging from rural region that can be the poss...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 2, column 330, Rule ID: PROGRESSIVE_VERBS[1]
Message: This verb is normally not used in the progressive form. Try a simple form instead.
...y of the crowd, many of the home owners are belonging from rural region that can be the poss...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 2, column 377, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...onging from rural region that can be the possibility, and they don’t even know th...
^^
Line 4, column 556, Rule ID: THE_FALL_SEASON[1]
Message: Use simply 'winter'.
Suggestion: winter
...s for home heating, only will valid for the winter season then there is no use of it so why peopl...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 6, column 502, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: And
...t so obviously, we cannot rely on that. and if we compared it with todays generatio...
^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, hence, however, if, look, so, then, well, as to
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 19.6327345309 102% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 12.9520958084 131% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 11.1786427146 89% => OK
Relative clauses : 25.0 13.6137724551 184% => OK
Pronoun: 50.0 28.8173652695 174% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 37.0 55.5748502994 67% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 16.3942115768 55% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2025.0 2260.96107784 90% => OK
No of words: 427.0 441.139720559 97% => OK
Chars per words: 4.74238875878 5.12650576532 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.54576487731 4.56307096286 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.45408896301 2.78398813304 88% => OK
Unique words: 207.0 204.123752495 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.484777517564 0.468620217663 103% => OK
syllable_count: 645.3 705.55239521 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 0.0 8.76447105788 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.70958083832 148% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.67365269461 299% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.22255489022 118% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 19.7664670659 86% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 22.8473053892 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 70.6670148628 57.8364921388 122% => OK
Chars per sentence: 119.117647059 119.503703932 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.1176470588 23.324526521 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.41176470588 5.70786347227 60% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.25449101796 133% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.20758483034 134% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 6.88822355289 44% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.67664670659 64% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.198071006705 0.218282227539 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0717638178669 0.0743258471296 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0770059719844 0.0701772020484 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.102779217148 0.128457276422 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.079410047135 0.0628817314937 126% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.5 14.3799401198 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 48.3550499002 113% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.197005988 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.51 12.5979740519 83% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.06 8.32208582834 97% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 98.500998004 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 12.3882235529 61% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 11.1389221557 108% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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