There is now evidence that the relaxed pace of life in small towns promotes better health and greater longevity than does the hectic pace of life in big cities. Businesses in the small town of Leeville report fewer days of sick leave taken by individual workers than do businesses in the nearby large city of Masonton. Furthermore, Leeville has only one physician for its one thousand residents, but in Masonton the proportion of physicians to residents is five times as high. Finally, the average age of Leeville residents is significantly higher than that of Masonton residents. These findings suggest that the relaxed pace of life in Leeville allows residents to live longer, healthier lives.
Write a response in which you discuss one or more alternative explanations that could rival the proposed explanation and explain how your explanation(s) can plausibly account for the facts presented in the argument.
Since, claim is made that realexed pace of life in small town buttress better health and greater longevitgy than hetic pace of life in city. Not only meager , uncanny evidince are presented
but also too effte to bolseter claim. The argument depend upon serval untenablae conjecture like number of person who for sick leave is not mentioned only it juxtapose is done, less doctor
doesn't leads to better health, what about mental health of people which is also cardinal for better health, fail to elucidate the time of greatear longevity i.e 60, 70, years.
Moreover, small town people take fewer sick leave than big city people, what is the amount or number of people that take sicke juxtapose between is wanting to corroborate the claim. for instace, if 10 people take sick leaave in compare to 2 people thata of small town , doesn't make plausible sense at all. Instead , large size of smaple should presented by its propnent, survey is should done around half population of city and town peole and exegesis should be performed by advance statistical tools like normal distribution, sigma analysi etc for comparsion. so that general consenus could be extrpolated.
Furthermore, less number of physician compare to city doesn't mean people from small live healthy life. However, it means small city people lack the health facility and health infrastructure , many peole berft of health serviec, it uncanny about their health condiiton. likewise, greater longevity of life means how manay of years of life is that 60, or more than of that it utterly equivocal. Meanwhile, to butteress the argument, longevity of life should be expounded with pertinet numbers of year, after that comparsion should be doe between city and
small town people. if avarage life span of city and small town people are around 60, 70 respectively does't support the argument as it claim.
consequently, lacking evidence to justify and given evidence and assumption are ambiguous, so argument is erroneous in manay ways. Rather, how hectic life is prone to health and longevity than realxed shuold be annoted by difinig the appropiately, corroboated with bigger sample size , longevity peoriod should be mention to make argument better. Other wise, in respect of premise it would just a fairy tale to promulagate above argumnet.
Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 11 15
No. of Words: 381 350
No. of Characters: 1869 1500
No. of Different Words: 198 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.418 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.906 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.495 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 140 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 90 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 60 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 39 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 34.636 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 16.278 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.727 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.391 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.625 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.071 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 157, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...ic pace of life in city. Not only meager , uncanny evidince are presented but al...
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Line 1, column 190, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... meager , uncanny evidince are presented but also too effte to bolseter claim. Th...
^^^
Line 2, column 159, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'juxtaposes'?
Suggestion: juxtaposes
...for sick leave is not mentioned only it juxtapose is done, less doctor doesnt leads to b...
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Line 3, column 1, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...only it juxtapose is done, less doctor doesnt leads to better health, what about ment...
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Line 5, column 146, Rule ID: PROGRESSIVE_VERBS[1]
Message: This verb is normally not used in the progressive form. Try a simple form instead.
...eople that take sicke juxtapose between is wanting to corroborate the claim. for instace,...
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Line 5, column 183, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: For
...en is wanting to corroborate the claim. for instace, if 10 people take sick leaave...
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Line 5, column 186, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...is wanting to corroborate the claim. for instace, if 10 people take sick leaave i...
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Line 5, column 269, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
... compare to 2 people thata of small town , doesnt make plausible sense at all. Ins...
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Line 5, column 272, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...mpare to 2 people thata of small town , doesnt make plausible sense at all. Instead , ...
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Line 5, column 315, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...snt make plausible sense at all. Instead , large size of smaple should presented b...
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Line 5, column 380, Rule ID: IS_SHOULD[1]
Message: Did you mean 'it'?
Suggestion: it
...hould presented by its propnent, survey is should done around half population of c...
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Line 5, column 390, Rule ID: PRP_PAST_PART[2]
Message: Did you mean 'have done' or 'do'?
Suggestion: have done; do
...ented by its propnent, survey is should done around half population of city and town...
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Line 5, column 563, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: So
...tion, sigma analysi etc for comparsion. so that general consenus could be extrpola...
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Line 5, column 563, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[3]
Message: “so that” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...tion, sigma analysi etc for comparsion. so that general consenus could be extrpolated. ...
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Line 7, column 55, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...ess number of physician compare to city doesnt mean people from small live healthy lif...
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Line 7, column 190, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...ealth facility and health infrastructure , many peole berft of health serviec, it ...
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Line 7, column 270, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Likewise
...t uncanny about their health condiiton. likewise, greater longevity of life means how ma...
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Line 7, column 553, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...omparsion should be doe between city and small town people. if avarage life span ...
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Line 8, column 20, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: If
...e between city and small town people. if avarage life span of city and small tow...
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Line 8, column 89, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[2]
Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'respectively the doest'.
Suggestion: respectively the doest
...and small town people are around 60, 70 respectively doest support the argument as it claim. co...
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Line 10, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Consequently
...st support the argument as it claim. consequently, lacking evidence to justify and given ...
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Line 10, column 164, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...y ways. Rather, how hectic life is prone to health and longevity than realxed shu...
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Line 10, column 285, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...ely, corroboated with bigger sample size , longevity peoriod should be mention to ...
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Line 10, column 316, Rule ID: SHOULD_BE_DO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'mentioned'?
Suggestion: mentioned
...mple size , longevity peoriod should be mention to make argument better. Other wise, in...
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Line 10, column 349, Rule ID: OTHER_WISE_OTHERWISE[1]
Message: Did you mean 'otherwise'?
Suggestion: Otherwise
...uld be mention to make argument better. Other wise, in respect of premise it would just a ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, furthermore, however, if, likewise, moreover, so, while
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 19.6327345309 97% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.9520958084 62% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 11.1786427146 107% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 13.6137724551 59% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 15.0 28.8173652695 52% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 55.5748502994 95% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 16.3942115768 73% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1933.0 2260.96107784 85% => OK
No of words: 376.0 441.139720559 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.14095744681 5.12650576532 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.40348946061 4.56307096286 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.57574876753 2.78398813304 93% => OK
Unique words: 207.0 204.123752495 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.550531914894 0.468620217663 117% => OK
syllable_count: 603.0 705.55239521 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.96107784431 40% => OK
Article: 1.0 8.76447105788 11% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.70958083832 148% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 19.7664670659 76% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 22.8473053892 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 69.1287365878 57.8364921388 120% => OK
Chars per sentence: 128.866666667 119.503703932 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.0666666667 23.324526521 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.33333333333 5.70786347227 93% => OK
Paragraphs: 7.0 5.15768463074 136% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 25.0 5.25449101796 476% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.20758483034 85% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 6.88822355289 87% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.67664670659 43% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.351795408236 0.218282227539 161% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.117552412555 0.0743258471296 158% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0969594354675 0.0701772020484 138% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.173378638023 0.128457276422 135% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0927522518345 0.0628817314937 148% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.3 14.3799401198 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 48.3550499002 95% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 12.197005988 107% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.83 12.5979740519 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.74 8.32208582834 105% => OK
difficult_words: 92.0 98.500998004 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 12.3882235529 109% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 11.1389221557 108% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum six paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 83.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 6
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