Tusk University should build a new recreational facility, both to attract new students and to better serve the needs of our current student body. Tusk projects that enrollment will double over the next 10 years, based on current trends. The new student bo

Essay topics: Tusk University should build a new recreational facility, both to attract new students and to better serve the needs of our current student body. Tusk projects that enrollment will double over the next 10 years, based on current trends. The new student body is expected to reflect a much higher percentage of commuter students than we currently enroll. This will make the existing facilities inadequate. Moreover, the cost of health and recreation club membership in our community has increased rapidly in recent years. Thus students will find it much more advantageous to make use of the facilities on the campus. Finally, an attractive new recreation center would make prospective students, especially athletically gifted ones, more likely to enroll at Tusk.

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This argument concludes that an attractive new creation center would make athletically gifted ones to enroll at Tusk. It is because of a Tusk University's new Recreation project at the campus. It may be possible that Tusk University will not attract new students because of some possibilities.

First,it says that new recreation building will attract new students and enrollment will double over the next 10 years but it may be possible that it will not happen. Because in next 10 years may a new university will be inaugurated and it has more attracting buildings than turkey buildings. It may also be possible other universities which are currently running provide better recreation facility than Tusk University. It is not the case that If Recreational facility is better in Tusk university it leads to increase enrollment . Enrollment does not depend only on the recreational facility. It may be possible that Tusk university lack in the other facilities.

Second, the new student body is expected to reflect a much higher percentage of commuter students than we currently enroll. This will make the existing facilities inadequate may be a failure because new recreation facilities does not mean it will attract more commuters. It may be possible that Tusk University is not a safe place or location lacks the opportunity students can get outside the campus. In other universities it may be possible outside opportunity is higher than Tusk University.

Third, the cost of health and recreation club membership in our community has increased rapidly this is not the reason for the higher enrollment. Tusk University may increase the cost of health and recreation club membership. It may be possible that there are some health center and recreation club which will provide lower cost than Tusk University or it may provide special discounts for students so that it will cost lower than campus facilities.It may be the case that new health center will open near university at a walking distance.

For all these reasons or possibilities Tusk university will fulfill their expectation after creation of new recreation facilities. Enrollment of athletically gifted once may not be increased in Tusk University.

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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'first', 'if', 'may', 'second', 'so', 'third']

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.281167108753 0.25644967241 110% => OK
Verbs: 0.15649867374 0.15541462614 101% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0954907161804 0.0836205057962 114% => OK
Adverbs: 0.053050397878 0.0520304965353 102% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0503978779841 0.0272364105082 185% => Less pronouns wanted. Try not to use 'you, I, they, he...' as the subject of a sentence
Prepositions: 0.116710875332 0.125424944231 93% => OK
Participles: 0.026525198939 0.0416121511921 64% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.98733809018 2.79052419416 107% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0079575596817 0.026700313972 30% => Some infinitives wanted.
Particles: 0.0 0.001811407834 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.0716180371353 0.113004496875 63% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0689655172414 0.0255425247493 270% => Less modal verbs wanted (like 'must , shall , will , should , would , can , could , may , and might').
WH_determiners: 0.0079575596817 0.0127820249294 62% => OK

Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2273.0 2731.13054187 83% => OK
No of words: 356.0 446.07635468 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 6.38483146067 6.12365571057 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34372677135 4.57801047555 95% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.376404494382 0.378187486979 100% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.317415730337 0.287650121315 110% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.241573033708 0.208842608468 116% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.171348314607 0.135150697306 127% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.98733809018 2.79052419416 107% => OK
Unique words: 143.0 207.018472906 69% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.401685393258 0.469332199767 86% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
Word variations: 40.708450432 52.1807786196 78% => OK
How many sentences: 18.0 20.039408867 90% => OK
Sentence length: 19.7777777778 23.2022227129 85% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.5821388051 57.7814097925 94% => OK
Chars per sentence: 126.277777778 141.986410481 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.7777777778 23.2022227129 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.444444444444 0.724660767414 61% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.14285714286 97% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 3.58251231527 279% => Correct essay format wanted or double check grammar & spelling issues after essay writing.
Readability: 51.5193508115 51.9672348444 99% => OK
Elegance: 1.63265306122 1.8405768891 89% => OK

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.360916330784 0.441005458295 82% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.208281553541 0.135418324435 154% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.141332685046 0.0829849096947 170% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.574099456825 0.58762219726 98% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.114024604289 0.147661913831 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.165451924816 0.193483328276 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0562617058687 0.0970749176394 58% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.408318620901 0.42659136922 96% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.095135900208 0.0774707102158 123% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.251493753671 0.312017818177 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0556557819826 0.0698173142475 80% => OK

Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.33743842365 120% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.87684729064 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.82512315271 62% => OK
Positive topic words: 10.0 6.46551724138 155% => OK
Negative topic words: 5.0 5.36822660099 93% => OK
Neutral topic words: 2.0 2.82389162562 71% => OK
Total topic words: 17.0 14.657635468 116% => OK
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