Twenty years ago, Dr. Field, a noted anthropologist, visited the island of Tertia. Using an observation-centered approach to studying Tertian culture, he concluded from his observations that children in Tertia were reared by an entire village rather than by their own biological parents. Recently another anthropologist, Dr. Karp, visited the group of islands that includes Tertia and used the interview-centered method to study child-rearing practices. In the interviews that Dr. Karp conducted with children living in this group of islands, the children spent much more time talking about their biological parents than about other adults in the village. Dr. Karp decided that Dr. Field's conclusion about Tertian village culture must be invalid. Some anthropologists recommend that to obtain accurate information on Tertian child-rearing practices, future research on the subject should be conducted via the interview-centered method.
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the recommendation and the argument on which it is based are reasonable. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.
The author states that interview-centered approached used by Dr.Karp should be used for future research on child rearing practices than observation-centred approcah in Tertian Culture. He also claims that during interviews,children talked more about their biological parents than other adults which makes Dr.Field's results invalid. After a casual reading,the argument seems convincing.However, closer scrutiny of the argument reveals many loopholes which the author needs to address.
Firstly,the author states that Dr.Karp visited a group of islands including Tertia Islands and interviewed their children. However,the author has not provided any substantial information about the interviewes. It is highly possible that most of the children are from islands other than Tertia Islands where the child rearing culture is different.A detailed report or any strogn statistical evidence showing distribution of children by island will increase the credibilty of the argument.
Secondly,the author has based his argument on the response of children which seems very simplistic base for such argument. It is highly likely children are unaware of the social rules in the island. The author should provide a more robust base like a detailed study of soceity's involvement in child rearing for a large perios of time.Additonally,the author could also strengthen the argument by including children of different age-groups for interviews.
In conclusion,the argument has several weak points which cannot be overlooked easily. The argument would have been more persuasive if sufficient statistics or data would be provided in support by the author.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, however, if, look, second, secondly, so, then, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 19.6327345309 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 12.9520958084 54% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 11.1786427146 27% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 13.6137724551 66% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 10.0 28.8173652695 35% => OK
Preposition: 28.0 55.5748502994 50% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 13.0 16.3942115768 79% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1412.0 2260.96107784 62% => OK
No of words: 240.0 441.139720559 54% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.88333333333 5.12650576532 115% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.93597934253 4.56307096286 86% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.34986525434 2.78398813304 120% => OK
Unique words: 143.0 204.123752495 70% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.595833333333 0.468620217663 127% => OK
syllable_count: 424.8 705.55239521 60% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.59920159681 113% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Article: 10.0 8.76447105788 114% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 19.7664670659 56% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 22.8473053892 92% => OK
Sentence length SD: 63.5371954576 57.8364921388 110% => OK
Chars per sentence: 128.363636364 119.503703932 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.8181818182 23.324526521 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.90909090909 5.70786347227 139% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 13.0 5.25449101796 247% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 8.20758483034 24% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 6.88822355289 87% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.67664670659 64% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.185172325609 0.218282227539 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0731575392086 0.0743258471296 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0765450097559 0.0701772020484 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.108838300686 0.128457276422 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0794187820347 0.0628817314937 126% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.2 14.3799401198 120% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 33.24 48.3550499002 69% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 12.197005988 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 16.82 12.5979740519 134% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.88 8.32208582834 119% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 98.500998004 80% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 12.3882235529 69% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.1389221557 93% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Minimum 250 words wanted.
Rates: 33.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 2.0 Out of 6
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