Twenty years ago, Dr. Field, a noted anthropologist, visited the island of Tertia. Using an observation-centered approach to studying Tertian culture, he concluded from his observations that children in Tertia were reared by an entire village rather than by their own biological parents. Recently another anthropologist, Dr. Karp, visited the group of islands that includes Tertia and used the interview-centered method to study child-rearing practices. In the interviews that Dr. Karp conducted with children living in this group of islands, the children spent much more time talking about their biological parents than about other adults in the village. Dr. Karp decided that Dr. Field's conclusion about Tertian village culture must be invalid. Some anthropologists recommend that to obtain accurate information on Tertian child-rearing practices, future research on the subject should be conducted via the interview-centered method.
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the recommendation and the argument on which it is based are reasonable. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.
The following argument is discussing the researches conducted by Dr Field and Dr Karp on child-rearing on the island of Tertia. The argument is full of unwarranted statements about researches conducted by both of the scientists; there is a requirement of additional proofs for each of the studies to make the argument valid. This argument is rife with holes and assumptions, and thus, not strong enough to support the recommendation given in the paragraph.
Firstly, the argument is discussing the study that was performed 20 years ago which was observation-centred. The argument is not describing the whole process explicitly. This argument is not giving a proper count of the sample size in observation, what was the method used for observation. It might be possible that there were good relations among the families of the village that children can freely go from one home to another and on the basis of that Dr Field concluded that the children are reared by the whole village. It is also not mentioned that which area of the island or which village he had visited. All the above questions must be answered in order to prove the theory of Dr Field warranted.
Similarly, the theory of Dr Karp is not providing clear answers. If we look at the description provided by Dr Karp's findings, he had taken the interviews of children. In the argument, there is no mention of what questions were asked? how many children participated in the process? if children are talking more about their biological parents than the adults in the village then how could he conclude that Dr Field's theory was wrong? It would be possible that the questions are asked about their biological families. The argument is not providing the answer to these questions which can prove this argument trustful.
However, in both of the theories, there is a gap of 20 years. So, it is hardly possible to say that things have not changed in this duration. It might be possible that 20 years ago children were raised by the whole village; but now, children are under the care of their parents. In both theories, the sample size, the parameters, what process and methods are used are not mentioned.
If the argument is providing the answer of all the mentioned questions then we would decide what method should we use for future research and its effectiveness.
In conclusion, There are a lot of questions need to be answered to make this argument a valid one. without answering them we can not choose any recommendation.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 20 15
No. of Words: 425 350
No. of Characters: 2018 1500
No. of Different Words: 184 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.54 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.748 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.742 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 134 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 106 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 83 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 48 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 21.25 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.476 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.55 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.324 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.557 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.144 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 6 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 9, column 235, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: How
...o mention of what questions were asked? how many children participated in the proce...
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Line 9, column 282, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: If
...y children participated in the process? if children are talking more about their b...
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Line 19, column 100, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Without
...ered to make this argument a valid one. without answering them we can not choose any re...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, however, if, look, similarly, so, then, thus, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 33.0 19.6327345309 168% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.9520958084 85% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 11.1786427146 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 13.6137724551 103% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 28.8173652695 115% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 55.5748502994 97% => OK
Nominalization: 21.0 16.3942115768 128% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2083.0 2260.96107784 92% => OK
No of words: 425.0 441.139720559 96% => OK
Chars per words: 4.90117647059 5.12650576532 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.54043259262 4.56307096286 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.86224825127 2.78398813304 103% => OK
Unique words: 192.0 204.123752495 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.451764705882 0.468620217663 96% => OK
syllable_count: 626.4 705.55239521 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 4.96107784431 161% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.76447105788 91% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.22255489022 118% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 19.7664670659 116% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 22.8473053892 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 44.9311592742 57.8364921388 78% => OK
Chars per sentence: 90.5652173913 119.503703932 76% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.4782608696 23.324526521 79% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.73913043478 5.70786347227 66% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.15768463074 116% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.25449101796 57% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 8.20758483034 24% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 12.0 6.88822355289 174% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.67664670659 192% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.174224803467 0.218282227539 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0484843841046 0.0743258471296 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0569817145491 0.0701772020484 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.080601438758 0.128457276422 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0625045181235 0.0628817314937 99% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.9 14.3799401198 76% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 48.3550499002 128% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 12.197005988 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.14 12.5979740519 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.5 8.32208582834 90% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 98.500998004 81% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.1389221557 83% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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