Twenty years ago, Dr. Field, a noted anthropologist, visited the island of Tertia. Using an observation-centered approach to studying Tertian culture, he concluded from his observations that children in Tertia were reared by an entire village rather than by their own biological parents. Recently another anthropologist, Dr. Karp, visited the group of islands that includes Tertia and used the interview-centered method to study child-rearing practices. In the interviews that Dr. Karp conducted with children living in this group of islands, the children spent much more time talking about their biological parents than about other adults in the village. Dr. Karp decided that Dr. Field's conclusion about Tertian village culture must be invalid. Some anthropologists recommend that to obtain accurate information on Tertian child-rearing practices, future research on the subject should be conducted via the interview-centered method.
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the recommendation and the argument on which it is based are reasonable. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.
The author here states that some anthropologists recommend that in order to obtain accurate information on Tertian child-rearing practices, it is necessary that all the future research on the subject should be conducted via the interview-centered method. The statement mentions about the different ways two noted anthropologists, Dr. Field and Dr Karp used to conclude about the child-rearing practices. Dr. Field used the observation-centered approach to study Tertian culture. He concluded that the children in Tertia were reared by an entire village rather than by their own biological parents. Dr. Karp on the other hand interviewed children to get the necessary insight. He found out that the children spent much more time talking about their bilogicial parents than about other adults in the village. To decide on the correct technique to obtain accurate information about the child-rearing process it is necessary to delve deeper into the subject and find answers to some questions.
The statement here mentions that when Dr. Karp interviewed the children they spent maximum time talking about their biological parents than about any other adults from the village. This statement does not clearly indicate that they were being reared by only their biological parents. There is a high possibility that Dr. Karp has misinterpreted this conversation. The author also needs to provide accurate information on how many children were interviewed. Were the children under study statistically variant to extrapolate the results? Did all the children belong to a particualr family or region? Did the children interviwed had any special needs and hence were being taken care of only by their biological parents? Did Dr. Karp interview children from different islands and then clubbed all the results? Answers to all these question will surely decide if the recommendation made by the author are reasonable or not.
The statement says that Dr. Karp interviewed the children to learn more about the child-rearing practices in Tertia. In order to get a complete picture of the situation it is necessary that the adults of the island are also invloved in the process. Not only they can provide more trustworthy details, but also mention about the evolution and histoy of the practice. Adults can better explain the reason of the conflicting conclusions. These details will neccessarily strengthen the details and help to reach a better conclusion.
The argument mentions that Dr. Field studied the characteristics of the child-rearing practices of the island of Tertia twenty years ago. There is a huge time gap between both the studies which cannot be ignored. Care must be taken while assuming that the culture of Tertian is time-invariant. It is possible that with time the practices in the island have changed considerably hence the different results. The author must mention about the group that both the anthropologists studied. What if the group of people studied by both anthropologists are different and both the practices of child-rearing co-exist. All these evidences can greatly strengthen the argument.
In order to decide on the better practice to obtain accurate information on Tertian child-rearing practices and find the best possible way to base the future research on the subject it is necessary the author provides answers to all the above questions with proper reasoning and statistical figures.
Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 5 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 12 2
No. of Sentences: 29 15
No. of Words: 537 350
No. of Characters: 2837 1500
No. of Different Words: 219 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.814 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.283 4.6
Word Length SD: 3.014 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 208 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 164 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 111 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 77 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 18.517 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.492 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.414 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.293 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.293 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.088 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 1 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 718, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...re of only by their biological parents? Did Dr. Karp interview children from differ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, hence, if, so, then, while, talking about, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 19.6327345309 107% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.9520958084 69% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 11.1786427146 107% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 13.6137724551 118% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 28.8173652695 118% => OK
Preposition: 71.0 55.5748502994 128% => OK
Nominalization: 18.0 16.3942115768 110% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2877.0 2260.96107784 127% => OK
No of words: 537.0 441.139720559 122% => OK
Chars per words: 5.35754189944 5.12650576532 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.81386128306 4.56307096286 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.07478283288 2.78398813304 110% => OK
Unique words: 224.0 204.123752495 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.417132216015 0.468620217663 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 877.5 705.55239521 124% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 4.96107784431 121% => OK
Article: 7.0 8.76447105788 80% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.70958083832 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 29.0 19.7664670659 147% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 22.8473053892 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 53.9780199244 57.8364921388 93% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.2068965517 119.503703932 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.5172413793 23.324526521 79% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.44827586207 5.70786347227 43% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.25449101796 19% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.20758483034 122% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 6.88822355289 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 15.0 4.67664670659 321% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.28190849453 0.218282227539 129% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0778156526996 0.0743258471296 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0987272478583 0.0701772020484 141% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.137727716792 0.128457276422 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0988225568133 0.0628817314937 157% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.1 14.3799401198 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 48.3550499002 110% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.197005988 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.81 12.5979740519 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.68 8.32208582834 92% => OK
difficult_words: 107.0 98.500998004 109% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 12.3882235529 97% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.1389221557 83% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.9071856287 118% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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