Twenty years ago, Dr. Field, a noted anthropologist, visited the island of Tertia. Using an observation-centered approach to studying Tertian culture, he concluded from his observations that children in Tertia were reared by an entire village rather than by their own biological parents. Recently another anthropologist, Dr. Karp, visited the group of islands that includes Tertia and used the interview-centered method to study child-rearing practices. In the interviews that Dr. Karp conducted with children living in this group of islands, the children spent much more time talking about their biological parents than about other adults in the village. Dr. Karp decided that Dr. Field's conclusion about Tertian village culture must be invalid. Some anthropologists recommend that to obtain accurate information on Tertian child-rearing practices, future research on the subject should be conducted via the interview-centered method.
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the recommendation and the argument on which it is based are reasonable. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.
The argument states that further research on the subject, based on dr. karp's claim, should be conducted via the interview-centered method to get more reliable information on tertian child rearing practice. At first glance, the argument seem to be plausible, but thoughtful observation reveals that the argument contains several flaws, which render it is based on unpersuasive assumption inferred from lack of information. The recommendation, made by some anthropologists, invites a number of questions whose answer will help in evaluating the arguments.
first, the argument solely provides the information that dr. field studied tertian culture by observation-centered approach, whereas dr karp studied the group of island including tertian by interview-centered method. but it does not provide any data about how many children participated in the response of interview conducted by dr karp and what percent of the total participated children in the interview were from tertian. if very negligible number of children of tertian participated in the interview compared to the total number of participants, the dr. karp’s decision about dr. field conclusion would be wrong. The argument would have been more convincing if it had explicitly mentioned the real figure of the participants.
Second, the argument merely assumes that the culture of island tertia about the up bring children was same as they were twenty years ago. this is only assumption made without solid ground. The culture of any region can be changed over a period of time. The argument fails to mention any possible causes whether it might have changed the culture of tertia within twenty years, if happened, the argument would be wrong. if the argument had clearly mention the probable causes that did not changes the culture of tertia, the argument would have been more convincing to the reader.
Finally, the argument sites that dr. karp only conducted interview of the children without considering the interview of their biological parents, but dr. field closely observed the both of them and made his conclusion. it is very unusual and shameful jobs that children do not get chances to pass their most of time with their parents. Regarding this, if the children felt shame to tell the truth that they passed their most time of time without father and mother. To transparent the argument, dr. karp should have included the parents in his conducted interviews.
In conclusion, the argument is unpersuasive as it stands and the explanation about two different approaches in studying tertian culture is not cogent enough to support the argument. To strength the argument, sufficient documents including possible causes should be provided in the way of details analysis of the argument that it will rule out all the doubts and questions which have been arisen in the argument.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 2.0 out of 6
Category: Poor Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 14 15
No. of Words: 453 350
No. of Characters: 2342 1500
No. of Different Words: 202 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.613 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.17 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.897 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 182 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 141 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 98 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 53 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 32.357 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 17.372 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.571 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.403 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.646 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.138 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
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... but thoughtful observation reveals that the argument contains several flaws, whi...
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...ll help in evaluating the arguments. first, the argument solely provides the infor...
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Suggestion: But
... tertian by interview-centered method. but it does not provide any data about how ...
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Suggestion: If
...ren in the interview were from tertian. if very negligible number of children of t...
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...was same as they were twenty years ago. this is only assumption made without solid g...
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...ure of any region can be changed over a period of time. The argument fails to mention any poss...
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... happened, the argument would be wrong. if the argument had clearly mention the pr...
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...d be wrong. if the argument had clearly mention the probable causes that did not change...
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...uses that did not changes the culture of tertia, the argument would have been mor...
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... both of them and made his conclusion. it is very unusual and shameful jobs that ...
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...which have been arisen in the argument.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, if, regarding, second, so, whereas, in conclusion, to tell the truth
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 19.6327345309 87% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.9520958084 85% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 11.1786427146 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 13.6137724551 88% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 28.8173652695 94% => OK
Preposition: 65.0 55.5748502994 117% => OK
Nominalization: 28.0 16.3942115768 171% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2411.0 2260.96107784 107% => OK
No of words: 453.0 441.139720559 103% => OK
Chars per words: 5.32229580574 5.12650576532 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.61343653406 4.56307096286 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.97485920508 2.78398813304 107% => OK
Unique words: 216.0 204.123752495 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.476821192053 0.468620217663 102% => OK
syllable_count: 719.1 705.55239521 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.96107784431 40% => OK
Article: 13.0 8.76447105788 148% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.70958083832 148% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.67365269461 179% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.22255489022 118% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 19.7664670659 126% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 22.8473053892 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 59.2355839002 57.8364921388 102% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.44 119.503703932 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.12 23.324526521 78% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.56 5.70786347227 62% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 11.0 5.25449101796 209% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.20758483034 49% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 13.0 6.88822355289 189% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.67664670659 171% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.179929735065 0.218282227539 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0556676010783 0.0743258471296 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0605566192841 0.0701772020484 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0992835421562 0.128457276422 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0520737403204 0.0628817314937 83% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.7 14.3799401198 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 48.3550499002 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.197005988 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.28 12.5979740519 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.29 8.32208582834 100% => OK
difficult_words: 108.0 98.500998004 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 12.3882235529 73% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.1389221557 83% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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