Twenty years ago, Dr. Field, a noted anthropologist, visited the island of Tertia. Using an observation-centered approach to studying Tertian culture, he concluded from his observations that children in Tertia were reared by an entire village rather than by their own biological parents. Recently another anthropologist, Dr. Karp, visited the group of islands that includes Tertia and used the interview-centered method to study child-rearing practices. In the interviews that Dr. Karp conducted with children living in this group of islands, the children spent much more time talking about their biological parents than about other adults in the village. Dr. Karp decided that Dr. Field's conclusion about Tertian village culture must be invalid. Some anthropologists recommend that to obtain accurate information on Tertian child-rearing practices, future research on the subject should be conducted via the interview-centered method.
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the recommendation and the argument on which it is based are reasonable. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.
To decide if the recommendation is reasonable, the anthropologists would need to answer questions such as: how many children were interviewed versus how many children were observed? Was there a certain group focused on during the observations/interviews or did the anthropologists involve different villages? Did the time difference influence the results?
The number of children observed/interviewed is important because if there were many children observed when Dr. Field concluded that the entire village reared the children, he would have made a reliable conclusion. If there were only a few children observed, the conclusion is unreliable. Similarly for Dr. Karp’s conclusion, the number of interviewees determines the reliability.
The villages involved would be an important question because different villages may have different traditions, some may use the whole village to raise the children and others may be fully dependent on the parents to raise the children on their own. If Dr. Field observed one village and Dr. Karp interviewed a different village, the villages may have not come from similar traditions.
One last thing to consider is the time difference. There was a gap of twenty years between the observations and the interviews of the anthropologists. This time difference may be the reason for the opposite results. Along the years, the villages may have developed different child-rearing habits, they once relied on the whole village but now they have the parents responsible for bringing up their children. Just like in the United States, “times have changed” and the way children are raised now is different from how they used to be raised.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: ??? out of 6
Category: Poor Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 13 15
No. of Words: 263 350
No. of Characters: 1377 1500
No. of Different Words: 129 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.027 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.236 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.959 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 101 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 83 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 66 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 40 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 20.231 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 10.024 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.615 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.364 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.589 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.109 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 289, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Similarly,
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, may, similarly, so, such as, on the whole
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 19.6327345309 81% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.9520958084 77% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 11.1786427146 54% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 2.0 13.6137724551 15% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 8.0 28.8173652695 28% => OK
Preposition: 23.0 55.5748502994 41% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 6.0 16.3942115768 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1433.0 2260.96107784 63% => OK
No of words: 261.0 441.139720559 59% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.49042145594 5.12650576532 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.0193898071 4.56307096286 88% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.38591113877 2.78398813304 122% => OK
Unique words: 138.0 204.123752495 68% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.528735632184 0.468620217663 113% => OK
syllable_count: 445.5 705.55239521 63% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Article: 7.0 8.76447105788 80% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 19.7664670659 66% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 22.8473053892 88% => OK
Sentence length SD: 62.4082758888 57.8364921388 108% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.230769231 119.503703932 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.0769230769 23.324526521 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.84615384615 5.70786347227 67% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 1.0 5.25449101796 19% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.20758483034 73% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 6.88822355289 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.67664670659 150% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.240222386918 0.218282227539 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0882024071096 0.0743258471296 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0792770936912 0.0701772020484 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.160027247404 0.128457276422 125% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0505944471405 0.0628817314937 80% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.5 14.3799401198 101% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.72 48.3550499002 88% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.197005988 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.56 12.5979740519 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.2 8.32208582834 99% => OK
difficult_words: 59.0 98.500998004 60% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 12.3882235529 73% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.1389221557 90% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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