"Of the two leading real estate firms in our town—Adams Realty and Fitch Realty—Adams Realty is clearly superior. Adams has 40 real estate agents; in contrast, Fitch has 25, many of whom work only part-time. Moreover, Adams' revenue last year was twice as high as that of Fitch and included home sales that averaged $168,000, compared to Fitch's $144,000. Homes listed with Adams sell faster as well: ten years ago I listed my home with Fitch, and it took more than four months to sell; last year, when I sold another home, I listed it with Adams, and it took only one month. Thus, if you want to sell your home quickly and at a good price, you should use Adams Realty."
The author has cited some facts and come to the conclusion that Adams Realty is superior to Fitch Realty and that business with Adams ensures quick selling of house at a good price. However, the argument is rife with holes and unwarranted assumptions, and hence, not strong enough to buttress the preceded conclusion.
First of all, the argument is based on a questionable assumption that higher number of real estate agents and greater revenue are the indication of superior service quality of a real estate agency. However, since there is no substantial information in the argument to imply otherwise, it is plausible that greater revenue of Adams Realty is due to its higher commission charge. Perhaps, Adams sold fewer number of houses the previous year but charged exorbitant fees to its customers which would attribute to its high revenue. Also, the argument doesn't give any details about the qualification and competence of the employees of either real estate agency. It could be that the fewer employees at Fitch are better qualified at doing their jobs.
The author has further set his conclusion on the basis of his experience of working with Fitch Realty ten years ago. The service quality of Fitch Realty could have been mediocre previously. Nonetheless, this information is insufficient to corroborate the firm's present service quality. On a different note, it is possible that the house on sale ten years ago was not in its ideal state, due to which it took longer time to appeal to prospective buyers, or that the entire real estate business was facing recession at the time. If this was the case, the firm's services couldn't be judged on the basis of the author's experience.
Furthermore, before deciding upon which agency to choose, it would be prudent to learn about the nature of business conducted by each agency. Perhaps, Adams deals with projects in rich and extravagant settlement areas. It may be inclined to take businesses from high class citizens like celebrity, politicians and such rather than from commoners. Fitch on the other hand may have non-selective approach about who it takes as a client. It would be better to include each agency's business approach and methodology in the argument. Similarly, information about the design and location of the house too would assist in selecting one agency over the other.
To recapitulate, it is clear that there are still some unexplored avenues in the argument due to which the conclusion seems feeble. It would be wise to address those areas prior to setting any firm conclusion on the matter.
Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'first', 'furthermore', 'hence', 'however', 'if', 'may', 'nonetheless', 'similarly', 'so', 'still', 'first of all', 'on the other hand']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.257142857143 0.25644967241 100% => OK
Verbs: 0.128571428571 0.15541462614 83% => OK
Adjectives: 0.102040816327 0.0836205057962 122% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0428571428571 0.0520304965353 82% => OK
Pronouns: 0.034693877551 0.0272364105082 127% => OK
Prepositions: 0.120408163265 0.125424944231 96% => OK
Participles: 0.0285714285714 0.0416121511921 69% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.82039173246 2.79052419416 101% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0387755102041 0.026700313972 145% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.001811407834 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.0979591836735 0.113004496875 87% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0183673469388 0.0255425247493 72% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0102040816327 0.0127820249294 80% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2611.0 2731.13054187 96% => OK
No of words: 427.0 446.07635468 96% => OK
Chars per words: 6.11475409836 6.12365571057 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.54576487731 4.57801047555 99% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.360655737705 0.378187486979 95% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.269320843091 0.287650121315 94% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.19906323185 0.208842608468 95% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.128805620609 0.135150697306 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.82039173246 2.79052419416 101% => OK
Unique words: 219.0 207.018472906 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.512880562061 0.469332199767 109% => OK
Word variations: 57.9163961123 52.1807786196 111% => OK
How many sentences: 20.0 20.039408867 100% => OK
Sentence length: 21.35 23.2022227129 92% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.3225708104 57.7814097925 73% => OK
Chars per sentence: 130.55 141.986410481 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.35 23.2022227129 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.7 0.724660767414 97% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.14285714286 97% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 3.58251231527 0% => OK
Readability: 48.2820843091 51.9672348444 93% => OK
Elegance: 1.9702970297 1.8405768891 107% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.282730446734 0.441005458295 64% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.111151749247 0.135418324435 82% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0627024573582 0.0829849096947 76% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.552209816968 0.58762219726 94% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.152308668771 0.147661913831 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.109394340208 0.193483328276 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0785713913065 0.0970749176394 81% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.372291878507 0.42659136922 87% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0583994850469 0.0774707102158 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.184863116379 0.312017818177 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0909716243578 0.0698173142475 130% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.33743842365 96% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 6.87684729064 87% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.82512315271 124% => OK
Positive topic words: 6.0 6.46551724138 93% => OK
Negative topic words: 6.0 5.36822660099 112% => OK
Neutral topic words: 3.0 2.82389162562 106% => OK
Total topic words: 15.0 14.657635468 102% => OK
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Rates: 83.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 6 -- The score is based on the average performance of 20,000 argument essays. This e-grader is not smart enough to check on arguments.
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