Two years ago, radio station WCQP in Rockville decided to increase the number of call-in advice programs that it broadcast; since that time, its share of the radio audience in the Rockville listening area has increased significantly. Given WCQP's recent success with call-in advice programming, and citing a nationwide survey indicating that many radio listeners are quite interested in such programs, the station manager of KICK in Medway recommends that KICK include more call-in advice programs in an attempt to gain a larger audience share in its listening area.
In the given passage, the station manage of KICK in Medway argues that inclusion of more call-in advice programs are required in order to enchant a larger audiences. The argument was bolstered by several reasons. Another radio station, WCQP in Rockville, showed a successful evidence for call-in advice programs in their broadcast. Also, a nationwide survey implied that radio listeners are quiet interested in such programs. Even though the contention sounds logical, the passage reflects copious faux which need to be amended in order to deliver more pellucid argument.
Firstly, the epitome of radio statin WCQP in Rockville needs to be canvassed in detail in terms of period and definition of success. Call-in advice programs has been introduced in two years ago and the KICK station manger called this period as "recent". Naming two years as a recent can cause controversial among people with its subjectivity. As a result, the manger cannot assure that recent success of WCQP is derived from call-in advice program or not; the radio station in Rockville could increase their radio listeners from different schemes. Also, even assuming recent success came from call-in advice programming in WCQP, success is dire ambigious term to use in this passage because there is no provided objective evidences such as numerical datas or listeners' survey.
In addition, a nationwide survey is great conducive to mislead its implication. Since it is called "nationwide", people would tend to think it is more trustable on people's vogue. However, nationwide survey is not going to explicit all people's opinion, and the manager does not even mentioned the source or creditability of the survey. Thus, it is not reliable as a evidence for necessity of augmentation of call-in advice programs. Even, the result of survey is extremely vague since it indicates that radio listeners are "quiet" interested. How can we define "quiet" in order to every one can agree upon? It is going to be hard to define.
Lastly, comparison between WCQP radio station and KICK radio stain should entail more expounded factors. For example, WCQP could be already huge radio statin in a large city while KICK radio station is mainly for rural areas. In this case, introducing call-in advice programs in KICK radio stations is blatant to be less successful than WCQP scenario. The manager of KICK should delineate situations of two companies in order to compare based on same canon.
To sum up, the assertation that the manger makes is implausible based on the reasons mentioned above, and he or she need to reconsider inclusion of more call-in advice programs in KICK radio statin or bring out with more sophisticated logic.
Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.5 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 7 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 9 2
No. of Sentences: 22 15
No. of Words: 439 350
No. of Characters: 2201 1500
No. of Different Words: 213 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.577 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.014 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.583 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 175 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 124 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 76 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 52 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 19.955 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.385 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.455 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.322 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.52 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.094 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 208, Rule ID: MANGER_MANAGER[1]
Message: Did you mean 'station manager'?
Suggestion: station manager
...ntroduced in two years ago and the KICK station manger called this period as 'recent&apos...
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Line 5, column 293, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[3]
Message: The verb 'does' requires base form of the verb: 'mention'
Suggestion: mention
... opinion, and the manager does not even mentioned the source or creditability of the surv...
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Line 5, column 374, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...the survey. Thus, it is not reliable as a evidence for necessity of augmentation ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, however, if, lastly, so, thus, while, for example, in addition, such as, as a result, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 19.6327345309 117% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.9520958084 85% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 11.1786427146 89% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 13.6137724551 44% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 20.0 28.8173652695 69% => OK
Preposition: 74.0 55.5748502994 133% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 16.3942115768 98% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2306.0 2260.96107784 102% => OK
No of words: 439.0 441.139720559 100% => OK
Chars per words: 5.25284738041 5.12650576532 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.57737117129 4.56307096286 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.95772873268 2.78398813304 106% => OK
Unique words: 221.0 204.123752495 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.503416856492 0.468620217663 107% => OK
syllable_count: 729.0 705.55239521 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.96107784431 40% => OK
Article: 11.0 8.76447105788 126% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.22255489022 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 19.7664670659 111% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 22.8473053892 83% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 50.987946234 57.8364921388 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 104.818181818 119.503703932 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.9545454545 23.324526521 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.31818181818 5.70786347227 93% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.25449101796 57% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 8.20758483034 158% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.88822355289 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.67664670659 86% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.343617818206 0.218282227539 157% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0998101577799 0.0743258471296 134% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0888654094565 0.0701772020484 127% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.18660679397 0.128457276422 145% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.107869299251 0.0628817314937 172% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.3 14.3799401198 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 43.73 48.3550499002 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.197005988 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.17 12.5979740519 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.93 8.32208582834 107% => OK
difficult_words: 121.0 98.500998004 123% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 12.3882235529 61% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.1389221557 86% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 75.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.5 Out of 6
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