"We recommend that Monarch Books open a café in its store. Monarch, having been in business at the same location for more than twenty years, has a large customer base because it is known for its wide selection of books on all subjects. Clearly, opening the café would attract more customers. Space could be made for the café by discontinuing the children's book section, which will probably become less popular given that the most recent national census indicated a significant decline in the percentage of the population under age ten. Opening a café will allow Monarch to attract more customers and better compete with Regal Books, which recently opened its own café."
Argument outlines that It is recommended to Monarch Books to open a Cafe` in the store. Monarch is at same location form more than twenty years, and have large customer base due to wide selection of books on all subjects. Cafe can use part of children’s book section as population of children under age ten will decline significantly. By opening cafe Monarch can better compete with Regal books. This argument depends on many assumptions, which will weaken the argument if proved false.
It assumes that Monarch books has large customer base because of being in the same location more than twenty years and known for wide selection of books on all subjects. Another assumption is that if there will be significant decrease in children population under ten as per recent national census, then there will decrease in number of readers of age under ten. It also assumes the just merely by opening cafe Monarch can compete with Regal books.
First assumption is that Monarch books has good customer case. There is no data presented in the argument to prove it. Many questions are unanswered such as how many customers visit per day to Monarch, is the books store is having good verity of customers everyday?, are customers visiting to the book store are regular customers which are visiting most often?, how many new customers are come in a certain number of days or months and how many of those stick for longer time? Details need to be accumulated to answer these questions. Author need to scrutinize this information before reaching to the conclusion that Monarch books has good customer base.
Next hypothesis based on the statement national census report indicated a significant decline in the percentage of population under age ten. Author surmised from this statement is that if there is decrease in kids population under then then number kids customer under ten will curtail in Monarch also, and author proposed to reduce the children’s book section and utilize this space for cafe. Census report didn’t furnish discrete information about in which region children’s population lessened. Is Monarch books exist in that region? Even if there is decline in kids populace, did Monarch undergo any reduction in number of children customers. Information is missing about what is age group of consumers who use children’s book section. There might be a chance that children’s zone is also used by customers who are above the age of ten. Only if there is downturn in children’s population also caused notable decline in children customers in Monarch also then this assumption can be considered in the buttress of argument, otherwise additional information required to ratify this assumption bonafide.
Here is another assumption, by constructing cafe monarch can ameliorate compete with Regal books. The argument is wanting information about Regal books. How Monarch and Regal books can be juxtaposed. Are they in the same region? Do they have comparable customer base? Are they selling same books? To compare both books stores, both need have very similar matter to provide to customer, similar locations and similar age groups of customer. As the argument don’t provide this information, endorsing opening cafe doesn’t seem much cogent.
As this reasoning is based on speculations which don’t have firm base to be true. Author require to do more research and collate more data. Just based on assumptions it can’t be proposed that Monarch can construct cafe in the store. There might be chance that most of the monarch customers love to read books rather and they may have majority of customers kids which Regal books doesn’t have.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: every day
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Suggestion: then
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Message: Did you mean 'doing'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'require' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: doing
...ve firm base to be true. Author require to do more research and collate more data. Ju...
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'first', 'if', 'may', 'so', 'then', 'such as']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.310344827586 0.25644967241 121% => OK
Verbs: 0.169540229885 0.15541462614 109% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0718390804598 0.0836205057962 86% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0316091954023 0.0520304965353 61% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0129310344828 0.0272364105082 47% => OK
Prepositions: 0.129310344828 0.125424944231 103% => OK
Participles: 0.0416666666667 0.0416121511921 100% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.79441368001 2.79052419416 100% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0258620689655 0.026700313972 97% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.001811407834 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.058908045977 0.113004496875 52% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0229885057471 0.0255425247493 90% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0172413793103 0.0127820249294 135% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 3706.0 2731.13054187 136% => OK
No of words: 597.0 446.07635468 134% => OK
Chars per words: 6.20770519263 6.12365571057 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.94303383012 4.57801047555 108% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.373534338358 0.378187486979 99% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.301507537688 0.287650121315 105% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.202680067002 0.208842608468 97% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.139028475712 0.135150697306 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79441368001 2.79052419416 100% => OK
Unique words: 242.0 207.018472906 117% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.405360134003 0.469332199767 86% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
Word variations: 48.3720348735 52.1807786196 93% => OK
How many sentences: 33.0 20.039408867 165% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0909090909 23.2022227129 78% => OK
Sentence length SD: 71.7197637887 57.7814097925 124% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.303030303 141.986410481 79% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.0909090909 23.2022227129 78% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.242424242424 0.724660767414 33% => More Discourse Markers wanted.
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.14285714286 117% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 3.58251231527 112% => OK
Readability: 48.2416628598 51.9672348444 93% => OK
Elegance: 2.24832214765 1.8405768891 122% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.400960693097 0.441005458295 91% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.103351709097 0.135418324435 76% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0738605604062 0.0829849096947 89% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.442062731077 0.58762219726 75% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.12890851105 0.147661913831 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.140605959442 0.193483328276 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.117993918553 0.0970749176394 122% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.327778364432 0.42659136922 77% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.091786531176 0.0774707102158 118% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.274522544853 0.312017818177 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0915074889153 0.0698173142475 131% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.33743842365 144% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 6.87684729064 102% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 14.0 4.82512315271 290% => Less neutral sentences wanted.
Positive topic words: 10.0 6.46551724138 155% => OK
Negative topic words: 7.0 5.36822660099 130% => OK
Neutral topic words: 11.0 2.82389162562 390% => Less neutral topic words wanted.
Total topic words: 28.0 14.657635468 191% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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More arguments wanted.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6 -- The score is based on the average performance of 20,000 argument essays. This e-grader is not smart enough to check on arguments.
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