"When XYZ lays off employees, it pays Delany Personnel Firm to offer those employees assistance in creating résumés and developing interviewing skills, if they so desire. Laid-off employees have benefited greatly from Delany's services: last year those who used Delany found jobs much more quickly than did those who did not. Recently, it has been proposed that we use the less expensive Walsh Personnel Firm in place of Delany. This would be a mistake because eight years ago, when XYZ was using Walsh, only half of the workers we laid off at that time found jobs within a year. Moreover, Delany is clearly superior, as evidenced by its bigger staff and larger number of branch offices. After all, last year Delany's clients took an average of six months to find jobs, whereas Walsh's clients took nine."
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.
The author of the above argument states that in order to provide assistance to laid off employees of XYZ company,delany firma is superior in providing training and developing skills for employees to find a new job instead of much cheaper walsh.He also provided information supporting his point of view that delany has much bigger staff and more number of branch offices and also only half of the employees who were laid off trained by walsh were able to find jobs.However,this argument may seem it has well supported facts to the author's recommendation,it also consists of loopholes with information provided which should be analysed more carefully.
Firslty,the auhtor is comparing walsh performance that dated eight years ago where only half of the laid off employees got job whereas Delanu's performance of last year.This is quite absurd as situation with employees 8 years ago should have been so much different compared to last year.If the number of employees laid off 8 years ago could have been less than the number who were laid off last year.In that case clearly,the author cannot come to conclusion that undermines walsh.
Secondly,it is stated that the employees trained in delany found jobs within an average of 6 months whereas the ones of walsh took 9 months to get a job.The author ignored possibility where the employees trained in delany were already more experienced and thus found the jons easily while the employees part of walsh were much begginers without any experience and required more time.Furthermore,the author didnot any where mentioned statistics data of employees that were laid off and how many of them were assissted under walsh and delany firms.that information could be crucial in judging the two firms which author had completely ignored.
Moreover,the author put forward that delany is better firm because of the reason that it has much larger staff and more number of branch offices than walsh.But what could be more cardinal is the abilities or skillset of faculties or trainess and the assisting methods that would make difference.The service provided is much more correlated to quality than the quantity.Even though Wlash is smaller in staff and Distribution networks.the staff there could be more talented and assist better than delany.
To conclude,the above seems to put up a argument that might make sense at first glance,but the argument have many inherent loopholes in the information provided which raises many questions and thus weaken the argument.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 8 15
No. of Words: 423 350
No. of Characters: 2068 1500
No. of Different Words: 205 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.535 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.889 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.487 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 143 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 101 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 74 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 48 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 52.875 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 33.643 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.75 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.446 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.753 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.135 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 113, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , delany
...nce to laid off employees of XYZ company,delany firma is superior in providing training...
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Suggestion: He
...a new job instead of much cheaper walsh.He also provided information supporting hi...
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Suggestion: However
...trained by walsh were able to find jobs.However,this argument may seem it has well supp...
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Suggestion: , this
... by walsh were able to find jobs.However,this argument may seem it has well supported...
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Line 1, column 531, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
...seem it has well supported facts to the authors recommendation,it also consists of loop...
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Suggestion: , it
...rted facts to the authors recommendation,it also consists of loopholes with informa...
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Suggestion: , the
...d be analysed more carefully. Firslty,the auhtor is comparing walsh performance t...
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...hereas Delanus performance of last year.This is quite absurd as situation with emplo...
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Suggestion: If
...so much different compared to last year.If the number of employees laid off 8 year...
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Line 3, column 287, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...so much different compared to last year.If the number of employees laid off 8 year...
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... the number who were laid off last year.In that case clearly,the author cannot com...
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Suggestion: , it
...usion that undermines walsh. Secondly,it is stated that the employees trained in...
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Suggestion: The
...nes of walsh took 9 months to get a job.The author ignored possibility where the em...
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Suggestion: Furthermore
...t any experience and required more time.Furthermore,the author didnot any where mentioned s...
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Suggestion: , the
...ience and required more time.Furthermore,the author didnot any where mentioned stati...
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Message: Did you mean 'anywhere'?
Suggestion: anywhere
...more time.Furthermore,the author didnot any where mentioned statistics data of employees ...
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Suggestion: , the
...thor had completely ignored. Moreover,the author put forward that delany is bette...
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Suggestion: But
...ore number of branch offices than walsh.But what could be more cardinal is the abil...
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Suggestion: The
...ting methods that would make difference.The service provided is much more correlate...
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Suggestion: Even
...correlated to quality than the quantity.Even though Wlash is smaller in staff and Di...
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Suggestion: , the
...ssist better than delany. To conclude,the above seems to put up a argument that m...
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Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
... To conclude,the above seems to put up a argument that might make sense at first...
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Suggestion: , but
...nt that might make sense at first glance,but the argument have many inherent loophol...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, however, if, may, moreover, second, secondly, so, thus, well, whereas, while
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 19.6327345309 107% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.9520958084 77% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 11.1786427146 143% => OK
Relative clauses : 20.0 13.6137724551 147% => OK
Pronoun: 21.0 28.8173652695 73% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 55.5748502994 95% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 16.3942115768 104% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2107.0 2260.96107784 93% => OK
No of words: 403.0 441.139720559 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.22828784119 5.12650576532 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48049772903 4.56307096286 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.88560536922 2.78398813304 104% => OK
Unique words: 203.0 204.123752495 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.503722084367 0.468620217663 107% => OK
syllable_count: 637.2 705.55239521 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 4.96107784431 121% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.76447105788 103% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 5.0 19.7664670659 25% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 80.0 22.8473053892 350% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 156.222149518 57.8364921388 270% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 421.4 119.503703932 353% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 80.6 23.324526521 346% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 21.4 5.70786347227 375% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 24.0 5.25449101796 457% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 8.20758483034 24% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 6.88822355289 44% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.67664670659 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.195553028538 0.218282227539 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.10493280558 0.0743258471296 141% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0637634637025 0.0701772020484 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.10493280558 0.128457276422 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0637634637025 0.0628817314937 101% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 43.5 14.3799401198 303% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: -9.72 48.3550499002 -20% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 14.6 7.1628742515 204% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 34.5 12.197005988 283% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 14.24 12.5979740519 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 11.17 8.32208582834 134% => OK
difficult_words: 91.0 98.500998004 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 57.0 12.3882235529 460% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 34.0 11.1389221557 305% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 15.0 11.9071856287 126% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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