Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument The following appeared in a memo from the owner of a chain of cheese stores located throug | TOEFL IELTS GMAT GRE SAT ACT PTE ESL

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Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.
The following appeared in a memo from the owner of a chain of cheese stores located throughout the United States.
"For many years all the stores in our chain have stocked a wide variety of both domestic and imported cheeses. Last year, however, the five best-selling cheeses at our newest store were all domestic cheddar cheeses from Wisconsin. Furthermore, a recent survey by Cheeses of the World magazine indicates an increasing preference for domestic cheeses among its subscribers. Since our company can reduce expenses by limiting inventory, the best way to improve profits in all of our stores is to discontinue stocking many of our varieties of imported cheese and concentrate primarily on domestic cheeses."

The owner of a chain of cheese stores claims that the stocking of different varieties of imported cheese should discontinue as nowadays people prefer domestic cheese more than the imported cheese. However, the owner has to provide some evidence to strengthen his argument.
First of all, the owner of a chain of cheese store has mentioned in his argument that in last year's ranking of best-selling cheeses, in the newest store located in Wisconsin, any variety of imported cheese was not present in the top five. But it is possible that the ranking in other stores is different from the store located in Wisconsin. Furthermore, it is also possible that as the store is new, people in this area would like to stick to the domestic cheeses at first to assure that the taste and quality are good and later on, check the imported cheese. These possibilities weaken the argument. Hence, the owner needs to provide sufficient data from different stores, new and old, located all around the United States to strengthen his statement.
Afterwards, the owner has mentioned that survey by Cheeses of the World magazine indicates an increasing preference for domestic cheeses among its subscribers. But it is more likely possible that, the survey may have some loopholes in it like the number of subscribers, the percentage of increase in proclivity towards domestic cheese, the total number of subscribers in the United States who prefer domestic cheese, etc. The owner has to provide a detailed report of the survey which includes the above points to strengthen his argument further.
Finally, he has provided a solution for improving the profit in all of the stores in the United States. The solution states the best way to improve profits by discontinuation of stocking of imported cheese and concentrate primarily on domestic cheeses. The owner has to provide evidence that currently, the wastage is almost equal to the stock of imported cheese whereas the wastage of domestic cheese is low in different stores. Afterward, he also needs to mention the expected percentage of increase in profit with proper calculations and evidence.
To sum up, the Owner of a chain of cheese store has to provide data of different stores, detailed reports of survey and wastage, and profit calculations to strengthen his argument regarding the discontinuation of the stock of different varieties of imported cheese to increase the profit.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 65, Rule ID: ALL_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: all the
... a solution for improving the profit in all of the stores in the United States. The soluti...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, furthermore, hence, however, if, may, regarding, so, then, whereas, as to, first of all, to sum up

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 19.6327345309 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 12.9520958084 23% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 11.1786427146 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 13.6137724551 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 22.0 28.8173652695 76% => OK
Preposition: 74.0 55.5748502994 133% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 16.3942115768 91% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2026.0 2260.96107784 90% => OK
No of words: 397.0 441.139720559 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.10327455919 5.12650576532 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.46372701284 4.56307096286 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77383390304 2.78398813304 100% => OK
Unique words: 167.0 204.123752495 82% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.420654911839 0.468620217663 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 642.6 705.55239521 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 13.0 8.76447105788 148% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.70958083832 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 3.0 1.67365269461 179% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 19.7664670659 76% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 22.8473053892 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 67.8536333261 57.8364921388 117% => OK
Chars per sentence: 135.066666667 119.503703932 113% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.4666666667 23.324526521 113% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.33333333333 5.70786347227 146% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.25449101796 19% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.20758483034 85% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.88822355289 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.67664670659 64% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.236412845695 0.218282227539 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.101970367589 0.0743258471296 137% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0644759026879 0.0701772020484 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.152236619599 0.128457276422 119% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0615815860847 0.0628817314937 98% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.8 14.3799401198 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.09 48.3550499002 93% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 12.197005988 110% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.6 12.5979740519 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.95 8.32208582834 96% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 98.500998004 77% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 12.3882235529 101% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 11.1389221557 111% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, furthermore, hence, however, if, may, regarding, so, then, whereas, as to, first of all, to sum up

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments