A recent sales study indicates that consumption of seafood dishes in Bay City restaurants has increased by 30 percent during the past five years. Yet there are no currently operating city restaurants whose specialty is seafood. Moreover, the majority of families in Bay City are two-income families, and a nationwide study has shown that such families eat significantly fewer home-cooked meals than they did a decade ago but at the same time express more concern about healthful eating. Therefore, the new Captain Seafood restaurant that specializes in seafood should be quite popular and profitable.
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be addressed in order to decide whether the conclusion and the argument on which it is based are reasonable. Be sure to explain how the answers to the questions would help to evaluate the conclusion.
The author has made an argument that a new specialized seafood restaurant called Captain Seafood will be popular and profitable. The author has provided some data to make his point valid. However, the author’s argument does not seem well thought through and neglects several possibilities glossing over various unanswered questions.
Firstly, an author has provided a sales study which states that consumption of seafood dishes in Bay City restaurants has increased by 30 percent during the past five years. We do not have sufficient information about the studies that were undertaken. For one thing, how many restaurants participated in the study? If the restaurants studied were less in number then the study won’t be that reliable. Also, it is very important to know the consumption of seafood for 5 years. As this might be the case that the number of people preferring the seafood before was already so less in number than the increase of 30 percent is of no significance.
As the author has explicitly mentioned that currently there are no operating city restaurants whose specialty is seafood, thus it might be possible that previously the seafood specialty restaurants existed. Hence the author has to answer the questions like, what were the locations of the restaurants, how was the hospitality and the ambiance, how was the taste of food offered by them, etc. For a restaurant to become popular and profitable the taste of the food, its hospitality and ambiance, accessibility of location are very important factors to be considered.
Furthermore, the author has mentioned that in a nationwide study, two-income families eat significantly fewer home-cooked meals than they did a decade ago but at the same time express more concern about healthful eating and in Bay-city most of the families are two-income families. The results of the study seem to be unreliable because of the following questions being unanswered. Was seafood preferred by the families who participated in the study? Is it correct to generalize the nationwide study to the Bay city? As it might be possible that most of the families being surveyed preferred eating vegetarian food, thus it would not be beneficial for the restaurants whose specialty is seafood. Also, what is applicable to the nation may not be true for the city.
To sum up, Thus, the author should not make any hasty predictions about the popularity and profitability of the restaurant, as it may prove to be a waste of money and time. Questions regarding the author’s prediction of the new Captain Seafood restaurant, which specializes in seafood, should be thoroughly investigated before the author’s prediction is put into practice.
Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 19 15
No. of Words: 437 350
No. of Characters: 2207 1500
No. of Different Words: 205 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.572 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.05 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.91 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 155 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 130 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 96 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 72 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 23 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 12.724 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.684 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.329 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.551 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.1 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 348, Rule ID: ADJECTIVE_IN_ATTRIBUTE[1]
Message: A more concise phrase may lose no meaning and sound more powerful.
Suggestion: less
... study? If the restaurants studied were less in number then the study won’t be that reliable. ...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 2, column 574, Rule ID: ADJECTIVE_IN_ATTRIBUTE[1]
Message: A more concise phrase may lose no meaning and sound more powerful.
Suggestion: less
...rring the seafood before was already so less in number than the increase of 30 percent is of n...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 208, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Hence,
... seafood specialty restaurants existed. Hence the author has to answer the questions ...
^^^^^
Line 4, column 766, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...he nation may not be true for the city. To sum up, Thus, the author should not m...
^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, furthermore, hence, however, if, may, regarding, so, then, thus, well, as to, for one thing, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 30.0 19.6327345309 153% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.9520958084 69% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 11.1786427146 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 13.6137724551 103% => OK
Pronoun: 21.0 28.8173652695 73% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 55.5748502994 94% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 16.3942115768 67% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2264.0 2260.96107784 100% => OK
No of words: 436.0 441.139720559 99% => OK
Chars per words: 5.19266055046 5.12650576532 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.56953094068 4.56307096286 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.99468569507 2.78398813304 108% => OK
Unique words: 211.0 204.123752495 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.483944954128 0.468620217663 103% => OK
syllable_count: 703.8 705.55239521 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Article: 7.0 8.76447105788 80% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.70958083832 185% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 19.7664670659 101% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 22.8473053892 92% => OK
Sentence length SD: 61.8016181018 57.8364921388 107% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.2 119.503703932 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.8 23.324526521 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.45 5.70786347227 113% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.25449101796 76% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.20758483034 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 6.88822355289 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.67664670659 171% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.152740891097 0.218282227539 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0505968973078 0.0743258471296 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0517456050423 0.0701772020484 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0882172360155 0.128457276422 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0310362599196 0.0628817314937 49% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.9 14.3799401198 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 48.3550499002 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.197005988 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.82 12.5979740519 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.26 8.32208582834 99% => OK
difficult_words: 99.0 98.500998004 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 12.3882235529 69% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.1389221557 93% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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