"Your recent article on corporate downsizing* in Elthyria maintains that the majority of competent workers who have lost jobs as a result of downsizing face serious economic hardship, often for years, before finding other suitable employment. But this claim is undermined by a recent report on the Elthyrian economy, which found that since 1999 far more jobs have been created than have been eliminated, bringing the unemployment rate in Elthyria to its lowest level in decades. Moreover, two-thirds of these newly created jobs have been in industries that tend to pay above-average wages, and the vast majority of these jobs are full-time."
*Downsizing is the process whereby corporations deliberately make themselves smaller, reducing the number of their employees.
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.
In the article published in a local newspaper, it is stated that the opponent of author of the article of corporate downsizing has been undermined by the report on elthyrian economy. The evidence for the rebuttle of the claim is based on the incresased jobs in market compared to that of eliminated and waning rate of employment in Elthyria in recent decades. However, before the evidence can be properly evaluated, three questions must be answered.
First of all, is the report representative enough in regard to the hardship faced by the worker? In other words, the author of article has stated about the economic hardship which can be abstract in its term.It is not clearly stated that the indicator of hardship and how they are weighted in terms of loss in their jobs and its post effect. It is possible that the report and the question might have been asked to the people in the situation where they are not comfortable in answering with- thus leading the answer to be biased.If either of these scenario has merit, then the argument has been seriously weakened.
Secondly,Is it not possible that the population might have been increased since last 1999? In other words, the report has not mentioned anything about the concomitant increase in the jobless people in Elthyria. It is possible that the number of jobs might have been increased but it cannot be ignored that the demand of job has been increased which might have further worsen due to corporate downsizing as a result the apparent increase in job cannot cannot supersede the demand. Also, the report has not given statistical data of number of jobs created and jobs eliminated likewise. For an instance, the job might have been created by 40% which is definitely greater than past history but the rate of jobless people might have been 60% which results 20 % of people to suffer from economic hardship. Thus, if the answer of these questions were properly addressed in a report then the evidence would have bolstered the argument made by the opponents.
Similarly, the opening of job in industries paying above average wage rate with full time mode is feasible for majority of people who has lost their job? In other words, the industries are generally in industrial area far away from residential where the people working in industry, full time might not be feasible in day to day basis. Its likely that increased opening of job will increase the employement opportunity but the competent worker's skill as said by the author might not parallel with the created jobs requirements and nature. Also, the nature of work of industrial opening has not been clarified in the report. In an ideal world, a person might be a jack of all, but for a certain corporate job one should be adept of knowledge regarding the field one works in. Thus, until the clarity of evidence is found, these mentioned evidence seriously weaken the argument presented by the opponent.
In conclusion, the argument,as it stands now, is considerably flawed, and the evidence are not clear enough to support the argument. And the unwarrented assumption if made on such evidence can seriously hamper the argument. But if the opponent can provide ample evidence beside these weaker one, then it will be possible to predict the effect of downsizing on people's life accurately.
Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 7 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 8 2
No. of Sentences: 21 15
No. of Words: 564 350
No. of Characters: 2693 1500
No. of Different Words: 236 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.873 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.775 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.546 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 196 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 141 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 113 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 59 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 26.857 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 10.723 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.905 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.316 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.525 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.075 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 136, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...article of corporate downsizing has been undermined by the report on elthyrian ec...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ted, three questions must be answered. First of all, is the report repr...
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Line 3, column 217, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: It
...dship which can be abstract in its term.It is not clearly stated that the indicato...
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Line 3, column 539, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: If
...h- thus leading the answer to be biased.If either of these scenario has merit, the...
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Line 3, column 552, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this scenario' or 'these scenarios'?
Suggestion: this scenario; these scenarios
...ng the answer to be biased.If either of these scenario has merit, then the argument has been s...
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Line 5, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...rgument has been seriously weakened. Secondly,Is it not possible that the pop...
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Line 5, column 16, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , Is
...n seriously weakened. Secondly,Is it not possible that the population mig...
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Line 5, column 376, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error -- use past participle here: 'worsened'.
Suggestion: worsened
...been increased which might have further worsen due to corporate downsizing as a result...
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Line 5, column 452, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: cannot
...s a result the apparent increase in job cannot cannot supersede the demand. Also, the report ...
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Line 7, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... the argument made by the opponents. Similarly, the opening of job in industr...
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Line 7, column 89, Rule ID: EN_COMPOUNDS
Message: This word is normally spelled as one.
Suggestion: fulltime
...ies paying above average wage rate with full time mode is feasible for majority of people...
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Line 7, column 291, Rule ID: EN_COMPOUNDS
Message: This word is normally spelled as one.
Suggestion: fulltime
...l where the people working in industry, full time might not be feasible in day to day bas...
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Line 7, column 445, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'workers'' or 'worker's'?
Suggestion: workers'; worker's
...ployement opportunity but the competent workers skill as said by the author might not p...
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Line 9, column 29, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , as
...pponent. In conclusion, the argument,as it stands now, is considerably flawed, ...
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Line 10, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...downsizing on peoples life accurately.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, likewise, regarding, second, secondly, similarly, so, then, thus, in conclusion, as a result, first of all, in other words, in regard to
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 34.0 19.6327345309 173% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 21.0 12.9520958084 162% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 11.1786427146 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 13.6137724551 110% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 28.8173652695 94% => OK
Preposition: 85.0 55.5748502994 153% => OK
Nominalization: 21.0 16.3942115768 128% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2760.0 2260.96107784 122% => OK
No of words: 560.0 441.139720559 127% => OK
Chars per words: 4.92857142857 5.12650576532 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.8645985582 4.56307096286 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62033904465 2.78398813304 94% => OK
Unique words: 241.0 204.123752495 118% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.430357142857 0.468620217663 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 876.6 705.55239521 124% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 4.96107784431 121% => OK
Article: 10.0 8.76447105788 114% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.70958083832 185% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.67365269461 239% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 8.0 4.22255489022 189% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 19.7664670659 106% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 22.8473053892 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 57.307303061 57.8364921388 99% => OK
Chars per sentence: 131.428571429 119.503703932 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.6666666667 23.324526521 114% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.95238095238 5.70786347227 139% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 15.0 5.25449101796 285% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.20758483034 73% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 11.0 6.88822355289 160% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.67664670659 86% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.220089113281 0.218282227539 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0631921821291 0.0743258471296 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0460852799507 0.0701772020484 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.121643689124 0.128457276422 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0479051558087 0.0628817314937 76% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.1 14.3799401198 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.09 48.3550499002 93% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 12.197005988 110% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.61 12.5979740519 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.37 8.32208582834 101% => OK
difficult_words: 122.0 98.500998004 124% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 11.1389221557 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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