" Although many people think that the luxuries and conveniences of contemporary life are entirely harmless, they in fact, prevent people from developing into truly strong and independent individuals."
Luxuries and conveniences of contemporary life are entirely harmless until and unless they interfere with our normal state of mental and intellectual development. Luxuries and conveniences are designed to facilitate involving tasks; making ease at solving complicated problems within a limited period of time. But, when they are often used for less involving tasks, they affect the mental growth of a person-in fact, retard the intellectual development of well-being. I am consonant with the author's statement to a very extent, provided the additional context of 'misuse' or 'overuse' in the terminating sentence until it strikes a discordant note between two parts of the statement. To the extent that we depend upon automobile and, merely sophisticated cell phones and tablets, we are concomitantly preventing ourselves from developing into truly strong and independent people.
Consider first of all the effect of automobiles in our day-to-day life. Automobiles, nowadays, have become an inexorable part of living a life. People have started to misuse (in sense of overuse) automobiles for the part of activities that could be easily and innocuously done without their assistantship. Cars were obviously invented to make access to reach the destination where public transportation is on the verse of scarcity. With the introduction of new and unique designs, people have become more addicted to brands rather than the ultimate uses. Cars have been exemplified as a symbol of richness; people with Buggati and Mercedes own a prestigious position in society. Actually, this type of trends marks our showy dependency on automobiles rather than making us independent- and equally preventing development into a truly strong and bold personality. We have been enslaved by luxuries and conveniences of contemporary life.
What makes us think so superficially when we have the designer of these luxuries and conveniences inherited within our own body? The luxuries and conveniences of our derivation are now, suppressing our ability of intellectual and cognitive standards. For example; Our brain is able to solve complicated tasks within a few seconds if provided with diligence and continuity, but we are dependent on scientific calculators without judgement of how simple the solution could be. This saves our time, of course, but more importantly prevents our intellectual and mental growth of solving complicated tasks by ourselves.
Some people may say that luxuries and conveniences are sources of advancement and mental development. This applies true only under certain circumstances; when they are more used for betterment rather than ineffective ludicrous tasks. However, the judgement entirely depends upon the correct application at the right time. Luxuries and conveniences are meant to ease our work; not to retard or prevent from developing into truly strong and independent individuals. Moreover, this can only be achieved when we ensure that they are causing no significant harm to us in any respect.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 295, Rule ID: PERIOD_OF_TIME[1]
Message: Use simply 'period'.
Suggestion: period
...g complicated problems within a limited period of time. But, when they are often used for less...
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Line 1, column 493, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
... of well-being. I am consonant with the authors statement to a very extent, provided th...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, but, first, however, if, may, moreover, second, so, well, for example, in fact, of course, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 19.5258426966 97% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 12.4196629213 32% => OK
Conjunction : 26.0 14.8657303371 175% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.3162921348 80% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 38.0 33.0505617978 115% => OK
Preposition: 70.0 58.6224719101 119% => OK
Nominalization: 19.0 12.9106741573 147% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2562.0 2235.4752809 115% => OK
No of words: 463.0 442.535393258 105% => OK
Chars per words: 5.53347732181 5.05705443957 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.63868890866 4.55969084622 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.13404101757 2.79657885939 112% => OK
Unique words: 250.0 215.323595506 116% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.539956803456 0.4932671777 109% => OK
syllable_count: 825.3 704.065955056 117% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.59117977528 113% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 6.24550561798 144% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.2370786517 109% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 23.0359550562 91% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.6235589679 60.3974514979 69% => OK
Chars per sentence: 116.454545455 118.986275619 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.0454545455 23.4991977007 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.13636363636 5.21951772744 98% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 10.2758426966 136% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.83258426966 124% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.269071948472 0.243740707755 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0793570494282 0.0831039109588 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0804544761814 0.0758088955206 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.16807361913 0.150359130593 112% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0687986113009 0.0667264976115 103% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.1 14.1392134831 107% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 33.24 48.8420337079 68% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 12.1743820225 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.79 12.1639044944 122% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.08 8.38706741573 108% => OK
difficult_words: 129.0 100.480337079 128% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.5 11.8971910112 130% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.2143820225 93% => OK
text_standard: 16.0 11.7820224719 136% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 83.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.