Some young adults want independence from their parents as soon as possible. Other young adults prefer to live with their families for a longer time. Which of these situations do you think is better? Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion.
Obviously, there is no shortage of opinions on whether it is better to be independent too early or to live with families for a longer time. Different youth have different perceptions. For me, it sounds to be independent as soon as possible for the reasons that we can struggle on our own and develop a real being on us and moreover, we can get acquainted with sorts of responsibilities in order to do something in an early age.
First of all, independence from parents at an early age subjects us to struggle for exploring our real potentialities living inside us which we can expose to the world when required. For instance, I remember my cousin who left his home at an early age in search of independence and to my concern, he has become a great physicist by now. He pursued his dream through his struggle and perseverance because of which Stanford University has accoladed him the merit of all times. If he had been hiding beneath the lap of parents, maybe, he would not have reached the glory.
Secondly, it is through independence, one feels a sense of desire and responsibility to fulfil for oneself and the other beings. When youth become independent, they realise their objective of independence and begin to hound their goals. For example, most of the great doers of all times, such as Latin pop singer Enrique Iglesias, who left his home at an early age to pursue his career. By this time, he has reached the highest peak of his career. It was his desire and feeling of responsibility that triggered him to leave home at an early age. Furthermore, there are some political personalities who left their home and parents at an early age in search of independence to pursue public services.
Least but not last, when youth feel a sense of independence, they can explore what is happening around the world. By doing so, they practically acknowledge themselves with finding a suitable alternative for living on their own. For instance, consider an example of my uncle who left his home and parents at an early age to be independent. He went to India and, there, he worked very hard in a hotel. He was doing all sorts of things in the hotel from washing to cooking and he became skilled at accounting too. Within a few years, he set his own hotel and managed to become a rich person through his venture. If he hadn't left his home at that age, probably, he would not have been so successful by then because he may not have gotten much practical knowledge to pursue his dream.
So, in my opinion, independence will be better for youths as soon as possible because by doing so, they will feel a sort of responsibility to do something for their own betterment and the others and more importantly, they can acquaint themselves with sorts of events happening around the world.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, furthermore, if, may, moreover, second, secondly, so, then, for example, for instance, sort of, such as, first of all, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 62.0 43.0788530466 144% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 75.0 52.1666666667 144% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2291.0 1977.66487455 116% => OK
No of words: 492.0 407.700716846 121% => OK
Chars per words: 4.65650406504 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.70967865282 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79895908411 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 230.0 212.727598566 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.467479674797 0.524837075471 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 724.5 618.680645161 117% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 19.0 9.59856630824 198% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 57.1580932069 48.9658058833 117% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.095238095 100.406767564 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.4285714286 20.6045352989 114% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.85714285714 5.45110844103 126% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.15300842874 0.236089414692 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0543769023516 0.076458572812 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.058509552922 0.0737576698707 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.108837659976 0.150856017488 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0404864207083 0.0645574589148 63% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.2 11.7677419355 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 58.1214874552 97% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.04 10.9000537634 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.6 8.01818996416 95% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 86.8835125448 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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