In any field of inquiry, the beginner is more likely than the expert to make important contributions.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.
People are making contributions to their area of expertise and the society in several
respects. In some instances, imagination plays a bigger role than experience.
However, in other cases, there are areas where, no matter how creative it is, the role of
imagination cannot subvert that of experience. Additionally, both imagination and
experience can make an equal contribution to an achievement.
Established habits and attitudes may become hindrances to those who want to contribute
to society. It may become hard to think out of the box with already fixed
habits. This is especially true in the field of art and design. In the late 1860s, as early as
his twenties, Claude Monet rejected the accepted art style exhibited at the Salon de Paris,
the greatest annual event at that time. In the era when outdoor painting was rare, Monet
enjoyed painting outdoors and used revolutionary techniques. Monet’s new style of
painting attracted the public so quickly as to be successful of starting his own exhibition
along with a few like-minded artists. This new art movement is called impressionism. If
Monet had adhered to the established painting techniques at that time, no such
innovative paintings would be handed down to today.
On the other hand, there are calls for situations where experience is of great
necessity. Decisions just based on imagination might bring disastrous results. When
America was suffering from a hideous inflation problem, President Jimmy Carter
appointed Paul Volcker as Chairman of the Federal Reserve Bank in 1979. As soon as
Volcker took on the role, he took several measures such as letting the target federal fund
rate to over 20% and unemployment to double digits. Although he faced a great amount
of opposition, Chairman Volcker was steadfast with his policies. The American economy
did suffer for another three years but made the runway to substantial growth in the 1980s
and 90s. It would not be possible for Paul Volcker, who had almost 30 years of
experience in the financial industry, to be praised as the man who quelled inflation if he
based his decision on imagination. In this regard, previous experience is crucial in making
a great contributions.
Moreover, there are cases where imagination and experience create a synergy. They
could complement each other in a way that imagination based on experience leads to
innovation in business fields. This is what is happening at Tesla Motors. Although Elon
Musk, chairman of Tesla, had no previous knowledge of automobiles, his vision of
changing the fundamental infrastructure of energy led him to be the first to successfully
launched and commercialized electrical cars. Furthermore, along the process of
developing more efficient batteries for these electric cars, Musk and a group of scientists
introduced home batteries for storing solar energy to use for electricity. Elon Musk’s vision
coupled with the expertise of a group of scientists has made a significant contribution to
the daily usage of energy in people’s lives by propagating the using of solar energy.
All in all, imagination can contribute more significantly than experience in certain areas
that place more importance in creativity. Contrarily, when it comes to specialized fields
such as economic policies, novices can hardly do much for these fields than can experts.
Yet, the combination of imagination of a novice and knowledge of a virtuoso may bring
more remarkable achievements in business fields
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, furthermore, however, if, may, moreover, so, as to, such as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 19.5258426966 97% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.4196629213 97% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 14.8657303371 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.3162921348 124% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 33.0505617978 82% => OK
Preposition: 80.0 58.6224719101 136% => OK
Nominalization: 31.0 12.9106741573 240% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3056.0 2235.4752809 137% => OK
No of words: 556.0 442.535393258 126% => OK
Chars per words: 5.4964028777 5.05705443957 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.85588840946 4.55969084622 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.07219726674 2.79657885939 110% => OK
Unique words: 306.0 215.323595506 142% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.55035971223 0.4932671777 112% => OK
syllable_count: 930.6 704.065955056 132% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 6.24550561798 160% => OK
Article: 6.0 4.99550561798 120% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.10617977528 225% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 11.0 4.38483146067 251% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 29.0 20.2370786517 143% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 23.0359550562 82% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 50.6676236428 60.3974514979 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.379310345 118.986275619 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.1724137931 23.4991977007 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.10344827586 5.21951772744 59% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 42.0 4.97078651685 845% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 60.0 7.80617977528 769% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 22.0 10.2758426966 214% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0820814379976 0.243740707755 34% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0214224081929 0.0831039109588 26% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0246600438308 0.0758088955206 33% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0191841838552 0.150359130593 13% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0251854087679 0.0667264976115 38% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.1 14.1392134831 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.73 48.8420337079 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.1743820225 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.62 12.1639044944 120% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.12 8.38706741573 109% => OK
difficult_words: 160.0 100.480337079 159% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 11.8971910112 63% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.2143820225 86% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.7820224719 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum six paragraphs wanted.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 16.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 6
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