The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation,not competition

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The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation,not competition

I agree to an extent with the prompt. Yes, most fields in today's world need people to work together, but in others they do not.. In fields like science, the problems have gotten so expansive that cooperation is the only way to solve its problems. Likewise goverance would be impossible if members did not work together. However in other fields, competition is more important than cooperation.

The problem in today's world has gotten bigger than most indivduals. Most problems have gotten so interdisplinary that one person cannot have the knowledge to solve it alone. Take for example the Higgs-Boson theory; the idea that dark matter exists in the universe. For decades, the theory remained at theory, as one one could prove the existance of dark matter. However, the theory was proven not a lone sciencist, but a group of physists, chemist, and microbiologists. These scienists need to cooperate with each other in order to pool their collective knowledge to solve the theory. If these scienists where competiting with on another, the theory would be unsolved today.

Likewise, in the field of goverment, cooperation is the most nessicary tool for success. With over 500 members of congress, competition would be determential to the goals of these elected officals. If everyone was competing against each other for every resource, Congress would send most of its time arguing while nothing would get done.. This is why the Found Fathers set up government this way, the idea was cooperation and compermise. Even in today's partasn congress, nothing gets pass without cooperation. The the fiscial package sat long jammed in Congress as some members of congress did not want to comprise on several polices in the bill. However, a 25th hour change was made when other ruling party agreed to cooperate and some make the changes the minority wanted. If congress did not agree to cooperate, government would still be shut down and many services citizens neeed would be unaccessible.

However, in some fields, competition more important than cooperation. Business for example is fundementally cut-thoart. Your loss is someone else gain. Working together in some cases could even be determential as sharing secerts or knowledge could be used against you. For example, several Amercian green energy firms who cooperated with Chinese firms in 2011 found their trade secerts used against them after they were kicked out the the Chinese market.

In short, cooperation is important in some fields, but competition is important in

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, likewise, so, still, while, for example, in short, in some cases

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 19.5258426966 102% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 12.4196629213 105% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 14.8657303371 54% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.3162921348 53% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 19.0 33.0505617978 57% => OK
Preposition: 56.0 58.6224719101 96% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 12.9106741573 132% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2121.0 2235.4752809 95% => OK
No of words: 408.0 442.535393258 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.19852941176 5.05705443957 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49433085973 4.55969084622 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74961878278 2.79657885939 98% => OK
Unique words: 219.0 215.323595506 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.536764705882 0.4932671777 109% => OK
syllable_count: 647.1 704.065955056 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 6.24550561798 64% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.740449438202 0% => OK
Article: 9.0 4.99550561798 180% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.77640449438 225% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.38483146067 114% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.2370786517 128% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 23.0359550562 65% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 33.3288483176 60.3974514979 55% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 81.5769230769 118.986275619 69% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.6923076923 23.4991977007 67% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.15384615385 5.21951772744 60% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 11.0 7.80617977528 141% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 10.2758426966 136% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 5.13820224719 117% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.83258426966 124% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.163339668453 0.243740707755 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0453357407493 0.0831039109588 55% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0446932425777 0.0758088955206 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0916088298156 0.150359130593 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0440002305289 0.0667264976115 66% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.9 14.1392134831 77% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 56.25 48.8420337079 115% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 12.1743820225 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.58 12.1639044944 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.86 8.38706741573 94% => OK
difficult_words: 90.0 100.480337079 90% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 11.8971910112 50% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.0 11.2143820225 71% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.7820224719 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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