The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons or examples that could be used to challenge your position.
Training young people for future society is challenging, as we have to prepare young people to change the future that those young will live in. The attribute of leadership is one of the key factors in training since we always leaders. However, between which attributes, cooperation or competition, that we should we instill in young people could be questionable since, for some time, it may seem fair to regard cooperation is a most important factor, as leaders they might have to work with others. However, on the other hand, it may seem equally justifiable to assert that competition is a single most factor for the leaders, as they have to compete with others when leading the society. While both arguments have their own reasons, I personally regard both traits are important for the leaders. Good leaders tend to ask perspicuously, balancing between the two traits, exploiting both fully. By asking which traits are important in training of future leaders, we must seek what traits are important for leaders.
For leaders, it is important to have a sense of cooperation, since they are not only acting behalf of themselves but also taking the matter of organization they are leading, including every people related with it. As we humans are living in society, we cannot act alone. This is meaningful in two ways. First, there are networks of humans within organizations. That means in each organization there are rules, norms, and members like a society. Moreover, the organization itself is also living in the network of organizations. An Organization cannot independently exist by themselves. As a result of highly developed technologies and globalization, a single organization cannot handle every aspect of the fields. This is happening in both commercial industries and academic fields. Companies need vendors and partners to sell products while in collages, interdisciplinary works widely appreciated. There are even joint researches between schools and companies, as we can see from the case of Artificial Intelligence. As researches are becoming sophisticated, budget and number of the researchers are becoming so enormous that single agency alone cannot endure them all.
On the other hand, competition is also an important value for the leaders. This is simply while organizations have to cooperate in their set of values, they also need to develop reasons why they are there in the chain of networks in their field. Without competence, and without substantial technology, knowledge, and innovation, there is no room for them. The assumption behind the need for cooperation is that there is a need for each organization in organizations, even if they cannot work alone. Though they may not independently exist, there should be reasons for dependency among them. In case of interdisciplinary researches, if a single department is totally useless, then there is no need for the cooperation among the two, this could be similar in industries as well. Therefore, there should be competition between the two, ones want to remain in the circle and the ones who want to become a part of it. Leaders in the future have to have this in mind, and survive in this competition.
Some might ask that then is to instill the young both the matter of competitiveness and a sense of cooperation. When asking this question, there is an underlying assumption that seemingly contrasting behaviors can be unequivocally instilled, and competitiveness and cooperation are competing values that cannot be reconciled. However, as I have mentioned above, two facts may act together. This is because the groups of compete and cooperate may differ, in the case of ones within networks and the ones who want to become a part of networks. Moreover, there may be the case of the ones competing a while ago may become beneficial to each other as industries are evolving. Leaders should expect every aspect of the field so that they can suvive in the field. To win or to lose is not important. What matters the most is who to benefit from it, not to decide dichotomously, act supply. Seemingly competitive groups such as Apple and Samsung are competing in mobile phones, while Samsumg is supplying chips to Apple.
In conclusion, for leaders of the future, both sense of competition and cooperation is needed as there are no definite rules for the survival of the fields. They have to act perspicaciously, not to simply assume easily. What matters the most is to get benefit from it, to do what is good for them while flexibly decide between the two.
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Essay evaluation report
Sentence: Leaders should expect every aspect of the field so that they can suvive in the field.
Error: suvive Suggestion: survive
Sentence: What matters the most is who to benefit from it, not to decide dichotomously, act supply.
Error: dichotomously Suggestion: No alternate word
flaws:
No. of Words: 748 350 //write the essay in 30 minutes. around 500 words are enough. Try to support or against one side since time is limited.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 2 2
No. of Sentences: 39 15
No. of Words: 748 350
No. of Characters: 3689 1500
No. of Different Words: 284 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 5.23 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.932 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.904 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 264 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 177 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 122 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 100 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 19.179 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.53 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.59 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.238 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.393 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.106 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 805, Rule ID: SHOULD_BE_DO[1]
Message: Did you mean ''?
...ies as well. Therefore, there should be competition between the two, ones want to remain in...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, may, moreover, so, still, then, therefore, well, while, in conclusion, such as, as a result, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 47.0 19.5258426966 241% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 31.0 12.4196629213 250% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 20.0 14.8657303371 135% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.3162921348 150% => OK
Pronoun: 56.0 33.0505617978 169% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 104.0 58.6224719101 177% => OK
Nominalization: 28.0 12.9106741573 217% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3797.0 2235.4752809 170% => OK
No of words: 748.0 442.535393258 169% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.07620320856 5.05705443957 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 5.22968341894 4.55969084622 115% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.01661013883 2.79657885939 108% => OK
Unique words: 295.0 215.323595506 137% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.394385026738 0.4932671777 80% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 1201.5 704.065955056 171% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 6.24550561798 240% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 5.0 4.99550561798 100% => OK
Subordination: 15.0 3.10617977528 483% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 5.0 1.77640449438 281% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 11.0 4.38483146067 251% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 39.0 20.2370786517 193% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 23.0359550562 82% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 50.8870944735 60.3974514979 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 97.358974359 118.986275619 82% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.1794871795 23.4991977007 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.61538461538 5.21951772744 69% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 24.0 10.2758426966 234% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 11.0 4.83258426966 228% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.167109862131 0.243740707755 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0390821634565 0.0831039109588 47% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0470394921444 0.0758088955206 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.10308274071 0.150359130593 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0467385685049 0.0667264976115 70% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.1 14.1392134831 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 48.8420337079 107% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.1743820225 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.18 12.1639044944 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.94 8.38706741573 95% => OK
difficult_words: 159.0 100.480337079 158% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 11.8971910112 122% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.2143820225 86% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.7820224719 85% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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