"The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition."
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Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons and/or examples that could be used to challenge your position.
Leadership is the epitome of professional position. It is a hallmark of comprehensive knowledge and accolades given by other; they believe that one person capable to lead them into a prosperity. However, to become a leader, a person need to have a bunch of skillset that allowed them to lead other, predict the opposition movement and most fundamentally learn to work in team. It needs to be instilled to the future leaders by underscore tolerance, understanding and cooperation in their education since they are young. Although, a sense of cooperation is a primacy to built a world class leader, the person also need to extensively understand the point of competition, and most importantly how to win it.
Direct a lot of people to work for a single purpose either for government, industry or even creative industry needs an insightful view about how to manage every individual with different weaknesses. It is a known fact, that there is no one can work alone hence the essential need to understand how to manage people. We can found that in the process where we force to work together eg. group task proposal. In fulfilled the obligatory task, children learn to delegate specific part to the most competent person in a group to make sure the job done right, in contrary, competition, rooted a sense of insecurity. It make sure that to be the most prominent one, they should work alone. In the bigger picture, as a leader of big corporate, it implausible to be done.
We also understand the value of networking in corporate business. Either it is useful to secure a merger, tender or even gain crucial data hold by others. To deserved that kind of information, we need their trust. The verocious people is someone that capable to work with other. Bring advantage to the relationship and free from calumny. It is contradictory with the rule of competition where it is full of trickery and deceit thus the competitive person tend to have unreliable reputation and lose the advantageous symbiosis from other leader or even from his/her own employee.
However, as important as gregarious tendency, ambitious and combatful type also needed to build the sagacious leader. It means they always step ahead, able to anticipate opposition move thus able to protect his/her own business. For example, Steve Jobs is famously known capable to swindle people for his own advantageous, so competitve, he capable to throw his own partner under the bus. Now, we see how dominant Apple in the technology industry.
All things considered, leadership have so many facets that need a specific skill to serve its own purpose. Mostly to be able to cooperate with other, but when face a fiece competition, they need to be treacherous, strong even cunning. To circumscribe a future leader to one box means hinder them to be more succesful and impactful than their precedent
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 364, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'working'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'force' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: working
...ound that in the process where we force to work together eg. group task proposal. In fu...
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Line 2, column 613, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'makes'?
Suggestion: makes
...ition, rooted a sense of insecurity. It make sure that to be the most prominent one,...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, hence, however, if, so, still, thus, for example, kind of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 19.5258426966 87% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.4196629213 72% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 14.8657303371 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.3162921348 97% => OK
Pronoun: 42.0 33.0505617978 127% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 73.0 58.6224719101 125% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 12.9106741573 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2377.0 2235.4752809 106% => OK
No of words: 480.0 442.535393258 108% => OK
Chars per words: 4.95208333333 5.05705443957 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.68069463864 4.55969084622 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.90929947539 2.79657885939 104% => OK
Unique words: 252.0 215.323595506 117% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.525 0.4932671777 106% => OK
syllable_count: 768.6 704.065955056 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 16.0 6.24550561798 256% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.38483146067 137% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.2370786517 124% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 23.0359550562 82% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 55.566407118 60.3974514979 92% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.08 118.986275619 80% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.2 23.4991977007 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.72 5.21951772744 52% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 10.2758426966 146% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.83258426966 166% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.100478065313 0.243740707755 41% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0258693005654 0.0831039109588 31% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0277889946898 0.0758088955206 37% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0572325500402 0.150359130593 38% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0183859274347 0.0667264976115 28% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.5 14.1392134831 81% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 48.8420337079 107% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.1743820225 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.43 12.1639044944 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.43 8.38706741573 101% => OK
difficult_words: 117.0 100.480337079 116% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 11.8971910112 101% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.2143820225 86% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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