The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons and/or examples that could be used to challenge your position.
Leadership in any field is a very good skill for anyone to have, hence the importance to encourage the young people to develop and harness good leadership skills. But there are questions about which is best - a sense of cooporation or commpetition. I do not completely agree with the claim that instilling in the young people a sense of cooporation, versus competition, is the best way to prepare them for leadership. However, I suggest that an amalgam of both will produce the best results.
We live in a world where professionalism is key to the growth of any organisation today. Today's top business are run by individuals who follow good leadership principles. Google is one of the top information and technology companies in the world. Google is also a cooporate firm. There is a CEO, a CFO, and a CIO. Google will very likely not be where it is today, if not for these devoted individuals who tenaciously follow and adopt leadership principles. In addition, for Google to remain at this level in the future, it needs to make plans to prepare the next generation of leaders; individual that will follow and uphold true cooporative skills. Hence is it vital to encourage the young ones to understand and appreciate the essense of cooporation in leadership.
On the otherhand, cooporation should not stand alone as the sole factor for great leadership. Competition is equally important and tantamount to a successful leadership campaign. Today's world is very competitive. Consider again, Google as a case study. Very likely, the position of the Chief Executive will be highy sought after, by individuals who have been in the company for quite a while. These folks already understand the importance of having and sustaining a cooporative environment. Competition, at this stage is meant to put them at their best, and ensure that the eventual winner is most refined and ready to carry on responsibilities of a CEO. Without such competition, we cannot assert that the eventual occupant of a top leadership position will perform.
The world is constantly evolving and new generations are taking center stage, in making many decision today. People are occupying top leadership positions in government, industry and other fields, having harnessed good leadership qualities over the years. Young people, who are the future leaders, should be encouraged to understand the importance of both cooporation and competition as essential skills to posses in attaining leadership positions. No one is more vital than the other and I posit that the responsibility rests on the society to instill in the young ones, both cooporative and competitive skills.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 651, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Hence,
...low and uphold true cooporative skills. Hence is it vital to encourage the young ones...
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Line 5, column 42, Rule ID: STAND_ALONE[1]
Message: Did you mean 'standalone'?
Suggestion: standalone
...n the otherhand, cooporation should not stand alone as the sole factor for great leadership...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, hence, however, if, so, still, while, in addition
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 19.5258426966 123% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.4196629213 64% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 14.8657303371 114% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.3162921348 115% => OK
Pronoun: 21.0 33.0505617978 64% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 58.6224719101 90% => OK
Nominalization: 21.0 12.9106741573 163% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2219.0 2235.4752809 99% => OK
No of words: 432.0 442.535393258 98% => OK
Chars per words: 5.13657407407 5.05705443957 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.55901411391 4.55969084622 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.06433182835 2.79657885939 110% => OK
Unique words: 216.0 215.323595506 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.5 0.4932671777 101% => OK
syllable_count: 707.4 704.065955056 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 6.24550561798 96% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.77640449438 169% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.38483146067 137% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.2370786517 119% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 23.0359550562 78% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 48.7237108603 60.3974514979 81% => OK
Chars per sentence: 92.4583333333 118.986275619 78% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.0 23.4991977007 77% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.5 5.21951772744 48% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 10.2758426966 175% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 5.13820224719 19% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.83258426966 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.233307471727 0.243740707755 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0611163633847 0.0831039109588 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0779832356011 0.0758088955206 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.1628745435 0.150359130593 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.106011974586 0.0667264976115 159% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.8 14.1392134831 83% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 48.8420337079 109% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.1743820225 85% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.24 12.1639044944 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.18 8.38706741573 98% => OK
difficult_words: 100.0 100.480337079 100% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 11.8971910112 97% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.2143820225 82% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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