"The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition."
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Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons and/or examples that could be used to challenge your position.
Leadership is commonly thought of as a trait of inspiring the subordinates or dependent individuals to partake and complete an activity as per requirements. While the statement is true it fails to encapsulate the complete concept of leadership.
While the government should try to instill a sense of cooperation within individuals aspiring to become leaders of future, a small amount of competition is also necessary for the all-round growth of an individual; and hence society. By ignoring competitive spirit among the individuals, the society may lose a sense of progress and the extent to which one should try to achieve it, both for his ot her own benefit and for the benefit of society. That being said cooperation is always the trait of primacy for a good leader and reflects a person's ability to first contribute and then inspire the team or society which they are supposed to lead.
The federal system of a team or government or society runs on the principle of trust- belief in the system's leaders ensures efficient and effective growth, which not only brings about prosperity within a society but also improves the quality of life. A leader, who is entrenched in a sense of competition, can never be truly trusted by the individual who reports to him or her.
While one might argue that cooperation may lead to a lost grasp of competition and ultimate demise of an economy, there are numerous examples of the contrary to be true. Excessive obsession with competition may very well lead to the hindrance in progress. It all lies in the approach with which the leadership approaches and identifies itself. A balanced outlook between competition and cooperation yields more productive results.
A peculiar example of such different approaches to leadership is the era of cold-war, while the leaders of US and USSR competed both along the lines of scientific and military progress, there was a marked difference in the leadership of both sides. While the leaders of US were regulated, maintained multiple public support groups and balanced military spending with educational reimbursements, the leaders of USSR struggled to maintain a state of cooperation from em masses because of excessive military spending and ultimately this led to the fall of USSR. This example is particularly potent in exemplifying the way in which a society responds to leadership and also the way in which leadership can significantly be improved with cooperation while maintaining a sense of competition.
The Industry/Government etc should primarily instill a sense of cooperation in individuals and along with that should also help develop a knack for competition as it is a necessary ingredient in the growth of a society.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 158, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “While” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...mplete an activity as per requirements. While the statement is true it fails to encap...
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Line 2, column 538, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'persons'' or 'person's'?
Suggestion: persons'; person's
...rimacy for a good leader and reflects a persons ability to first contribute and then in...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, hence, if, look, may, so, still, then, well, while
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 19.5258426966 82% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.4196629213 81% => OK
Conjunction : 22.0 14.8657303371 148% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.3162921348 97% => OK
Pronoun: 17.0 33.0505617978 51% => OK
Preposition: 72.0 58.6224719101 123% => OK
Nominalization: 20.0 12.9106741573 155% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2288.0 2235.4752809 102% => OK
No of words: 443.0 442.535393258 100% => OK
Chars per words: 5.16478555305 5.05705443957 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.58776254615 4.55969084622 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.11263845605 2.79657885939 111% => OK
Unique words: 216.0 215.323595506 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.487584650113 0.4932671777 99% => OK
syllable_count: 730.8 704.065955056 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 6.24550561798 48% => OK
Article: 8.0 4.99550561798 160% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.10617977528 161% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.38483146067 23% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.2370786517 74% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 29.0 23.0359550562 126% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 69.6071516121 60.3974514979 115% => OK
Chars per sentence: 152.533333333 118.986275619 128% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.5333333333 23.4991977007 126% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.53333333333 5.21951772744 87% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.97078651685 121% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 10.2758426966 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.16068229356 0.243740707755 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0572234913702 0.0831039109588 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0577208112468 0.0758088955206 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0794157485017 0.150359130593 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0477576802784 0.0667264976115 72% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.6 14.1392134831 124% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.04 48.8420337079 86% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 12.1743820225 120% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.24 12.1639044944 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.07 8.38706741573 108% => OK
difficult_words: 112.0 100.480337079 111% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.5 11.8971910112 130% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 11.2143820225 121% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.7820224719 119% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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