The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition.

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The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition.

The issue raises a controversial topic that the best way of preparing young people for leadership in the government is to instill them a sense of cooperation, not competition. Although a minimum amount of competition, in a moral way, would play a role as a motivation in stepping forward towards our route to the success, as far as I am concerned fortifying the sense of cooperation is more important in order to prepare someone to be a leader.
First, the most important attribute of a successful leader is how he/she could bolster the team-work among the assembly. In other words, assemblies are created to carry out the arduous tasks in most effective. So if an assembly rests on the individual's capability, it would keep away from its chief aim. All in all, the cooperation plays an important role that someone become a good leader.
Second, the competition would have some inimical effects in an assembly. In other words, it could increase the sense of enmity among the people in the group. The people who take part in a competitive assembly are not able to see anyone could be superior to them. So they attempt to undermine all the other people to become the first. It is quite obvious that such conditions are not helpful and hinder the way of progressing. To put it in a nutshell, increasing the rival among the people in an assembly is opposed to the blossoming of the assembly.
Although, a little amount of competition is needed to progress, as the competition has its own motivation and inspiration effect. But this type of competition should be in a moral way, a positive competition. The positive competition could help the people in the assembly are nourished and learn from each other.
In conclusion, both sides (i.e. instilling the sense of competition or the sense of cooperation) have their own pros and cons. Nevertheless, after weighing up, in the above body paragraphs, instilling the sense of cooperation advantages far outweigh the increasing the sense of competition as the competition may have hampering effects in nourishing of an assembly.

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Average: 6.6 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 219, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a moral way" with adverb for "moral"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...though a minimum amount of competition, in a moral way, would play a role as a motivation in s...
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Line 2, column 241, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'individuals'' or 'individual's'?
Suggestion: individuals'; individual's
...fective. So if an assembly rests on the individuals capability, it would keep away from its...
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Line 4, column 170, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a moral way" with adverb for "moral"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
... But this type of competition should be in a moral way, a positive competition. The positive c...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, may, nevertheless, second, so, still, in conclusion, in other words

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 19.5258426966 67% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.4196629213 72% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 14.8657303371 40% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 4.0 11.3162921348 35% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 19.0 33.0505617978 57% => OK
Preposition: 55.0 58.6224719101 94% => OK
Nominalization: 20.0 12.9106741573 155% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1721.0 2235.4752809 77% => OK
No of words: 350.0 442.535393258 79% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.91714285714 5.05705443957 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.32530772707 4.55969084622 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.98906988468 2.79657885939 107% => OK
Unique words: 172.0 215.323595506 80% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.491428571429 0.4932671777 100% => OK
syllable_count: 547.2 704.065955056 78% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 6.24550561798 48% => OK
Article: 8.0 4.99550561798 160% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.38483146067 160% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.2370786517 84% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 23.0359550562 87% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.8344472845 60.3974514979 91% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.235294118 118.986275619 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.5882352941 23.4991977007 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.88235294118 5.21951772744 94% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 7.80617977528 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 10.2758426966 107% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.83258426966 83% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.248200953488 0.243740707755 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0814388237653 0.0831039109588 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.118968243123 0.0758088955206 157% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.138905176428 0.150359130593 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.114381524327 0.0667264976115 171% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.0 14.1392134831 85% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 48.8420337079 105% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.1743820225 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.26 12.1639044944 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.7 8.38706741573 92% => OK
difficult_words: 68.0 100.480337079 68% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 11.8971910112 118% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.2143820225 89% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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