Some parent offer their school-age children money for each high grade (mark) they get in school Do you think this is a good idea?
Each person has some motivation to go forward and make progress in his life. Although sometimes some parents misconstrue this fact and try to create some motivations for their children's development. Undoubtedly, the impetus plays an essential role in people's life. I know it. But my saying is, impetus should be formed by our own thinking and external incentives like giving money is not a good practice to push student doing their best. The following paragraphs elaborate my rationale for being against the parent's habit which provides money to their children as an incentive.
First of all, I should point out to the fact that, this type of incentives cause a lot of behavioral disorder as some surveys, which have been conducted in my hometown country, shown us. The findings of these survey exhibited that most of the students who usually be motivated by some external incentives such as money and gift turned out to be not as successful as the other group whom they did not motivate at all with the same average of IQ. So based on these survey, we, as a parent, should not rely on the external incentive and we should do other things to help our children become successful people.
The second of all, if a child behaved in this ingratiating manner sooner or later, the number of people around him will dwindle to a great extent. In other words, it can lead to children become an obsequious person, and no one in the world would not admire this behavior regardless of the culture issue. As a personal experience, I had a friend which I cannot count on him unless I do something in favor of him. On that days, I was the only friend of him. Meanwhile, we are not friends anymore. So It is not an admirable idea to teach our children to behave like this.
The last but not least, maybe a day come which they do not need to anything in their life. So nothing can make them happy anymore and they do not try to make progress anymore. I mean, if all the things were available, they would not incline to make progress as they did not find the real impetus of the life. So we should help the children to find out the real and main impetus of life. To put it in a nutshell, we likely misconduct the children to find their own motivation.
All in all, I strongly disagree with the money-giving policy as I found it, at best ineffective, at worst, misconducting. The parents should teach their children to find some real impetus instead of such fictitious impetus if they are willing to have successful children.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'parents'' or 'parent's'?
Suggestion: parents'; parent's
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, may, second, so, while, i mean, such as, first of all, in other words, to a great extent
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 53.0 43.0788530466 123% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 61.0 52.1666666667 117% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2060.0 1977.66487455 104% => OK
No of words: 450.0 407.700716846 110% => OK
Chars per words: 4.57777777778 4.8611393121 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.6057793516 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.57029181223 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 225.0 212.727598566 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.5 0.524837075471 95% => OK
syllable_count: 642.6 618.680645161 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 7.0 3.08781362007 227% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.6910178916 48.9658058833 112% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.6363636364 100.406767564 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.4545454545 20.6045352989 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.72727272727 5.45110844103 87% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.221293037781 0.236089414692 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0644719743215 0.076458572812 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0554958127552 0.0737576698707 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.128177360691 0.150856017488 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0583557463552 0.0645574589148 90% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.4 11.7677419355 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 68.1 58.1214874552 117% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.28 10.9000537634 85% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.33 8.01818996416 91% => OK
difficult_words: 77.0 86.8835125448 89% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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