The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons and/or examples that could be used to challenge your position.
Leadership plays a key role in modern societies. In order to be a successful leader, a person should have certain qualities. It is asserted that a society should strengthen cooperation in their possible future leaders instead of competition. I agree that having collaboration can benefit a community in general. However, sometimes competition can reveal the true potential of leaders.
To begin with, having cooperation can be beneficial in several ways. First of all, when people with different intentions and viewpoints cooperate, they can address a certain issue with more effectiveness. For example, consider a situation in which a certain group of government officials are going to make a decision about immigrants. If people from different cultural background are within this group, the decision making process can be more accurate. Likewise, if an immigrant is among the officials, this group can use his or her experience in order to consider all the consequences of their final decision. Second of all, usually leaders are not familiar with certain fields such as economics. As a result, leader need to establish close relationships with experts in the aforementioned fields. Clearly, having a high sense of cooperation can intensify these relations so that leaders can use the expertise of other influential officials. More importantly, having strong cooperation can improve the image of leaders in the eye of their followers. This phenomenon is more tangible in political field, though. If people construe that their leaders are eager to collaborate with other officials, they feel that the leaders are more trustworthy.
However, having cooperation in certain fields is more important. For instance, leaders of sport teams should motivate their teammates in order to show their superior performance. Similarly, having collaboration in scientific fields is quite essential. For example, a team of researchers should be able to communicate and cooperate with each other to achieve a certain goal.
On the other hand, having tight competitions can be beneficial for specific reasons. Some people are not able to manifest their true potential unless they feel a competition. This is true especially for politic aspirants. When this people enter into an election campaign, they start to show their hidden talents. Likewise, having qualified rivals can stimulate some people to set more ambitious goals through which they can improve their societies.
To sum up, having a sense of cooperation seems mandatory for future leaders. However, providing healthy competitions might also be useful to unleash the true power of young people who are eager to be a leader.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 228, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
... especially for politic aspirants. When this people enter into an election campaign,...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, however, if, likewise, second, similarly, so, then, for example, for instance, in general, such as, as a result, first of all, to begin with, to sum up, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 19.5258426966 102% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 12.4196629213 145% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 14.8657303371 20% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.3162921348 88% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 33.0505617978 88% => OK
Preposition: 57.0 58.6224719101 97% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 12.9106741573 132% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2266.0 2235.4752809 101% => OK
No of words: 416.0 442.535393258 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.44711538462 5.05705443957 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.51620172871 4.55969084622 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.99123472952 2.79657885939 107% => OK
Unique words: 211.0 215.323595506 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.507211538462 0.4932671777 103% => OK
syllable_count: 702.9 704.065955056 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 6.24550561798 128% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.10617977528 193% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 20.2370786517 133% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 23.0359550562 65% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 30.7330200032 60.3974514979 51% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 83.9259259259 118.986275619 71% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.4074074074 23.4991977007 66% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.77777777778 5.21951772744 130% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 21.0 10.2758426966 204% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 5.13820224719 19% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.83258426966 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.115918940531 0.243740707755 48% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0380131692953 0.0831039109588 46% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0284531981106 0.0758088955206 38% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0789537529921 0.150359130593 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0204046668172 0.0667264976115 31% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.9 14.1392134831 84% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 47.79 48.8420337079 98% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.1743820225 85% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.03 12.1639044944 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.14 8.38706741573 97% => OK
difficult_words: 99.0 100.480337079 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 11.8971910112 55% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.0 11.2143820225 71% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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