The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition."
The given topic presented the controversial issue of Cooperation vs Competition. What is the more beneficial for a soceity to prosperous ?. Indisputably, competition should always be there in a soceity to keep growing, keep developing of its assets. Competition expediate the process of development, improvement, innovation, creation etc. Nevertheless, as like competition is necessary for development of a society the same as Cooperation. Cooperation leads to cultivate a sence of trust in the group; trust, that is an pivotal part for growth. But, there are several instance appear in day to day life; in business, in government, in education, in home etc. where the cooperation is more viable comparing to competition. Hence, I agree with the opinion presented, and would like to argue for this in the following examples.
Firstly, if we think about the government employee who work for a country, a state, or any level, there the sense of cooperation is always an elementry part among its members. To expediate the process of any file, any tender, any project, the cooperation is required. Employee will not get anything if they compete with their colleagues there. In the same way, if politicians believe more in sharing and cooperating with their counterparts in any disputable, controversible issue, then the issue would be resolved soon. Even, during implementation of a new policy, the consensus among member is necessary, and it can achieved by cooperation, trust, faith.
Secondly, if we think more as an individual perspective then in education field, group study is always recommended. In Group study, students able to solve whole syllabus in a significantly lower time as compared to Regular class. The reason behind this is that, faith among your friends that he or she will teach you in a more familiar manner, you can ask number of question from your friends without hesitation. In businesses also cooperation has several benefits.
Agglomeration of several small and medium business into a large business give more credential to their customer in terms of revenue, market share, profit. In bad time, a sense of mutual cooperation is a thing that can bind a whole group and able to sort out its problems.
In summary, although competiton is necessary for growth of business, education etc, cooperation has its own benefits. Competition among industries help themselves for their growth, as they want to do always something better among their competitors, it leads to innovation, creation, growth. But the sense of cooperation leads to trust which is necessary in any field.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 518, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
...e of trust in the group; trust, that is an pivotal part for growth. But, there are...
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Line 1, column 561, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun instance seems to be countable; consider using: 'several instances'.
Suggestion: several instances
...pivotal part for growth. But, there are several instance appear in day to day life; in business,...
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Line 1, column 569, Rule ID: THERE_RE_MANY[3]
Message: Possible agreement error. Did you mean 'instances'?
Suggestion: instances
...part for growth. But, there are several instance appear in day to day life; in business,...
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Line 3, column 618, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'can' requires the base form of the verb: 'achieve'
Suggestion: achieve
...s among member is necessary, and it can achieved by cooperation, trust, faith. Second...
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Line 5, column 28, Rule ID: COMP_THAN[1]
Message: Comparison requires 'than', not 'then' nor 'as'.
Suggestion: than
...t, faith. Secondly, if we think more as an individual perspective then in educa...
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Line 9, column 198, Rule ID: ADVERB_WORD_ORDER[9]
Message: The adverb 'always' is usually put before the verb 'do'.
Suggestion: always do
...elves for their growth, as they want to do always something better among their competito...
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Line 9, column 207, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... their growth, as they want to do always something better among their competitors...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, hence, if, nevertheless, second, secondly, so, then, in summary, in the same way
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 19.5258426966 77% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.4196629213 64% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 14.8657303371 54% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.3162921348 62% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 29.0 33.0505617978 88% => OK
Preposition: 66.0 58.6224719101 113% => OK
Nominalization: 31.0 12.9106741573 240% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2188.0 2235.4752809 98% => OK
No of words: 416.0 442.535393258 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.25961538462 5.05705443957 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.51620172871 4.55969084622 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.10938621597 2.79657885939 111% => OK
Unique words: 224.0 215.323595506 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.538461538462 0.4932671777 109% => OK
syllable_count: 686.7 704.065955056 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 6.24550561798 64% => OK
Article: 6.0 4.99550561798 120% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.10617977528 193% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.77640449438 225% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 11.0 4.38483146067 251% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.2370786517 114% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 23.0359550562 78% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 37.8427749295 60.3974514979 63% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.1304347826 118.986275619 80% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.0869565217 23.4991977007 77% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.65217391304 5.21951772744 89% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 7.80617977528 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 10.2758426966 146% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.83258426966 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.145256092759 0.243740707755 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0439918218069 0.0831039109588 53% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0428663758442 0.0758088955206 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0774347240577 0.150359130593 51% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0513961099947 0.0667264976115 77% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.4 14.1392134831 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 44.75 48.8420337079 92% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.1743820225 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.93 12.1639044944 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.1 8.38706741573 97% => OK
difficult_words: 94.0 100.480337079 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 11.8971910112 71% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.2143820225 82% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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